jummy604:
This story is gonna b super. following

comments that boosten the brain...Thanx..welcome

moseph:
interesting. #waiting for next update#

Welcome...Thanx for your comment..
Updates will be here soon

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stuff46:
following

Welcome baba...

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Damn! How come I'm just seeing dis #divepen u are da bomb# carry on boss...

Fatalveli:
Damn! How come I'm just seeing dis #divepen u are da bomb# carry on boss...

Thanx baba....Welcome oooo

the flows of d work has been great...keep it coming Weldon

hassan85:
the flows of d work has been great...keep it coming Weldon

sir Hassan...

I'd say pay closer attention to small details. To illustrate, here's from the first and second paragraphs of Chapter One -

Felicia was an exceptional girl. She was known among most of her family members to be a very light sleeper; infact, [1] one of her uncle [2] who is a professor believes she was suffering from insomnia and had pestered her parent [3] to treat her on that.So, [4] Just to please this Uncle [5] of hers,and [6] out of curiosity, her parent had taken her to a certified Hospital but the Doctor [7] said she was not having such sleeping problem.
Today, she was still sleeping at 9.am. [8] Nobody would disturb or dares disturb her, she knows, so she slept soundly. [9]

1. “In fact” - two words.
2. “Uncles” - the noun or pronoun that follows “one of” is always pluralised.
3. You sure you didn’t mean “parents”? If you mean one parent it’s batter to use the more specific “father” or “mother”.
4. Insert a space after the full stop – this error is very common around here and I’m not sure why. It makes your writing inelegant.
5. There is no need to capitalise the uncle.
6. Same as (4) above.
7. No need to capitalise hospital and doctor. Capitalisation is generally reserved for proper nouns – that is names of people and places. You may only capitalise anything else to “foreground” it as a technique.
8. “By 9am” or “by 9a.m.” or “by 9AM”. A space after the number is also fine.
9. “She knew nobody would disturb her, so she slept soundly.” Or “She knew nobody would dare disturb her, so she slept soundly.”

Divepen:

sir Hassan...

I always remain loyal

Writeditor:
I'd say pay closer attention to small details. To illustrate, here's from the first and second paragraphs of Chapter One -

Felicia was an exceptional girl. She was known among most of her family members to be a very light sleeper; infact, [1] one of her uncle [2] who is a professor believes she was suffering from insomnia and had pestered her parent [3] to treat her on that.So, [4] Just to please this Uncle [5] of hers,and [6] out of curiosity, her parent had taken her to a certified Hospital but the Doctor [7] said she was not having such sleeping problem.
Today, she was still sleeping at 9.am. [8] Nobody would disturb or dares disturb her, she knows, so she slept soundly. [9]

1. “In fact” - two words.
2. “Uncles” - the noun or pronoun that follows “one of” is always pluralised.
3. You sure you didn’t mean “parents”? If you mean one parent it’s batter to use the more specific “father” or “mother”.
4. Insert a space after the full stop – this error is very common around here and I’m not sure why. It makes your writing inelegant.
5. There is no need to capitalise the uncle.
6. Same as (4) above.
7. No need to capitalise hospital and doctor. Capitalisation is generally reserved for proper nouns – that is names of people and places. You may only capitalise anything else to “foreground” it as a technique.
8. “By 9am” or “by 9a.m.” or “by 9AM”. A space after the number is also fine.
9. “She knew nobody would disturb her, so she slept soundly.” Or “She knew nobody would dare disturb her, so she slept soundly.”

Thanx alot for this...

hassan85:
I always remain loyal

Yes baba..

other

wow divepen a really Gud work u r doing here please do keep it up

kingphilip:
wow divepen a really Gud work u r doing here please do keep it up

Thanx boss

Divepen:

Thanx boss

Uwc sir

Divepen:

Baba ooo.
Why did you stop your story now...
Please update ooo..I want to see the end of those two lovers

Boss...I was just posting it somehwre else. looking forward to ur new creation

why do NL writers acknowledge only their old pals thereby making the newies feel unwanted? ok o! i don comot o since newies are not important. divepen write ur story for ur old pals o *leaves in anger*

lenmafon:
why do NL writers acknowledge only their old pals thereby making the newies feel unwanted? ok o! i don comot o since newies are not important. divepen write ur story for ur old pals o *leaves in anger*

no vex dear so b so e be o
Na just the ones wey their brain fit remember

no commot abeg come make we enjoy dis beta story together

I hope dy didnt do it sha.hehehe

lenmafon:
why do NL writers acknowledge only their old pals thereby making the newies feel unwanted? ok o! i don comot o since newies are not important. divepen write ur story for ur old pals o *leaves in anger*

I'm so sorry...This is my second time... And who is a newbie...You? No...you are my padi...

jummy604:
I hope dy didnt do it sha.hehehe

Lolllll
Dey ddntgini

kingphilip:

no vex dear so b so e be o
Na just the ones wey their brain fit remember

no commot abeg come make we enjoy dis beta story together

Thank you baba...

I must say I'm really enjoying dis work.... Keep it up bro

kingphilip:

no vex dear so b so e be o
Na just the ones wey their brain fit remember

no commot abeg come make we enjoy dis beta story together

oga kingphilip na u det follow me abi na me dey follow u about? ok i no vex again o!

Fatalveli:
I must say I'm really enjoying dis work.... Keep it up bro

Thanx baba....
Thanxx

Divepen:

Lolllll
Dey ddntgini

that means i didnt read dat part,tot dy didnt o

jummy604:
that means i didnt read dat part,tot dy didnt o

Maybe...I did not expressly say it...But you will know as we go on..
Hope you read the update I made now...