ayozainy:

Thanks

you are welcome.

Our first collaborative poem

On a warm brisky evening... Where fireflies fly...
And butterflies and their wings beautifully flapped... There my heart dwells with my emotions shredded... Twilight hovered in the horizon...
A child sat there waiting, with his belly strapped...
Oh little child are you alright? I asked... Silence, shame and snare, his eyes were an axe...
His eyes told tales of innocence battered by the blows of disaster...
I could see the terror in his voice ...
And his ribs were sunken hollows, devoid of flesh...
His eyes shoved with fairy fears...
The ribs threatened to pop out of his skin,and give me some beating...
Then my pain sank into my skin...
My emotions disappeared into my being...
Fears, made from unquenched hunger ...
His days already drawing waters out of my little well...
Did my emotions really disappear? No they didn't...
They took another form. A guilty one...
And guilt consumed me like a forest fire feeding on firs...
Drunk like a man in a wild desert...
I know i had to act, or become a drowned fish...
But what could i do?,my conscience consciously scanning memories of wasted cereal...
Echoes of trash cans well fed....
Desires glisten like a mirage...It appears to linger longer stronger....

sorry i left the grp...i will be back .....i hope i can contribute from here ba?

Read all the poems and i'm wowed. Tempted to write one,tho i'm not much of a writer.
Would drop one soon...am coming,lemme search my brain

Jennimma:
Read all the poems and i'm wowed. Tempted to write one,tho i'm not much of a writer.
Would drop one soon...am coming,lemme search my brain

Brainstorm till inspiration troops in like battalions.

I'm waiting.....

Stepsse:
sorry i left the grp...i will be back .....i hope i can contribute from here ba?

Your contribution is highly effective.

9 MONTHS.

Oh sing,freedom song
for mother,child and 'dada'
the heave as placenta
strings are detached
at the right time.

Sing the song of nine
of safe delivery in time.


Oh dance,the toddler's dance,
the shaky legs quivering
to the tune of mama's voice
dance to the solos of nne's lullaby
rocking to slumber,
papa and nwa.

Sing the song of nine
of safe delivery in time.

Oh,cry with wide open mouth
yell for a gulp of milk
off mama's pouch
gnaw at those brea.sts
and claw to your satisfaction,child.

Dance the dance of time,
chant for the fruit of nine.

Christening,drinks and loud chatter
tell,what name would junior bear?
Nkem? Ola? Sanusi?
What beyond the clouds,do you see?

Shout,out in prime,
fruitful wails of time.




*covers my face*

cc:laykorn OMA4U

Jennimma:
9 MONTHS.

Oh sing,freedom song
for mother,child and 'dada'
the heave as placenta
strings are detached
at the right time.

Sing the song of nine
of safe delivery in time.


Oh dance,the toddler's dance,
the shaky legs quivering
to the tune of mama's voice
dance to the solos of nne's lullaby
rocking to slumber,
papa and nwa.

Sing the song of nine
of safe delivery in time.

Oh,cry with wide open mouth
yell for a gulp of milk
off mama's pouch
gnaw at those brea.sts
and claw to your satisfaction,child.

Dance the dance of time,
chant for the fruit of nine.

Christening,drinks and loud chatter
tell,what name would junior bear?
Nkem? Ola? Sanusi?
What beyond the clouds,do you see?

Shout,out in prime,
fruitful wails of time.




*covers my face*

cc:laykorn OMA4U

Nice. Check this out.


Attraction is what draws me to you
Distraction and retraction no more
Opposite poles attract
But with you, like poles attract

The power of you I can not phantom
For I cower at the power of your presence
Be it solar, nuclear, fusion, fission or hydro I can not say
All I know, I am attracted to you the way a magnet is attracted to iron.

*just goofing around*.

joseph1832:
Nice. Check this out.


Attraction is what draws me to you
Distraction and retraction no more
Opposite poles attract
But with you, like poles attract

The power of you I can not phantom
For I cower at the power of your presence
Be it solar, nuclear, fusion, fission or hydro I can not say
All I know, I am attracted to you the way a magnet is attracted to iron.

*just goofing around*.

cool poem. I'll bookmark this. *displays 32*

joseph1832:
Nice. Check this out.


Attraction is what draws me to you
Distraction and retraction no more
Opposite poles attract
But with you, like poles attract

The power of you I can not phantom
For I cower at the power of your presence
Be it solar, nuclear, fusion, fission or hydro I can not say
All I know, I am attracted to you the way a magnet is attracted to iron.

*just goofing around*.

Joseph is in love with Jennimma the Queen.
A thousand Nairalanders watching you in 3D screen.
Ah,the Queen's beauty when she's young can be compared to the sky when its blue.
But Joseph's ink curves and straightens,drools, for rozzay and now the Queen too?
Ah,lend me a lengthy minute,for infedility before I get Joseph sued.....

Freestyle poetry
Ayamlaykorn

Jennimma:
9 MONTHS.

Oh sing,freedom song
for mother,child and 'dada'
the heave as placenta
strings are detached
at the right time.

Sing the song of nine
of safe delivery in time.


Oh dance,the toddler's dance,
the shaky legs quivering
to the tune of mama's voice
dance to the solos of nne's lullaby
rocking to slumber,
papa and nwa.

Sing the song of nine
of safe delivery in time.

Oh,cry with wide open mouth
yell for a gulp of milk
off mama's pouch
gnaw at those brea.sts
and claw to your satisfaction,child.

Dance the dance of time,
chant for the fruit of nine.

Christening,drinks and loud chatter
tell,what name would junior bear?
Nkem? Ola? Sanusi?
What beyond the clouds,do you see?

Shout,out in prime,
fruitful wails of time.




*covers my face*

cc:laykorn OMA4U

Wow! This is brilliant! Sing the song of nine. More, please?

Jennimma:

cool poem. I'll bookmark this. *displays 32*

Okay.

OMA4U:


Wow! This is brilliant! Sing the song of nine. More, please?

lolz...thank you. I'm more of a reader-reading and lauding writers. I'll search my brain again,but not today.

laykorn:

Joseph is in love with Jennimma the Queen.
A thousand Nairalanders watching you in 3D screen.
Ah,the Queen's beauty when she's young can be compared to the sky when its blue.
But Joseph's ink curves and straightens,drools, for rozzay and now the Queen too?
Ah,lend me a lengthy minute,for infedility before I get Joseph sued.....

Freestyle poetry
Ayamlaykorn

Awesome.

I guessed that this would happen.
Unstructured behaviour is already threatening to kill the poetry club before it starts.
The poem analysis has been derailed midway, and now everyone is just posting their own poems.
I had hoped for better, but knowing Nairaland, I am far from surprised.

Nihilist:
I guessed that this would happen.
Unstructured behaviour is already threatening to kill the poetry club before it starts.
The poem analysis has been derailed midway, and now everyone is just posting their own poems.
I had hoped for better, but knowing Nairaland, I am far from surprised.

Erm we can always go back to the poem analysis bros.

PS: I love your moniker. Reminds me of Darth Nihilus, the Darth Lord of the Sith in George Lucas' Star Wars franchise.

Jennimma:

lolz...thank you. I'm more of a reader-reading and lauding writers. I'll search my brain again,but not today.

Okay. Tag me when you post new ones.

Nihilist:
I guessed that this would happen.
Unstructured behaviour is already threatening to kill the poetry club before it starts.
The poem analysis has been derailed midway, and now everyone is just posting their own poems.
I had hoped for better, but knowing Nairaland, I am far from surprised.

This is a chat room, not the main thread. We also have a whatsapp group where we discuss.

OMA4U:

This is a chat room, not the main thread. We also have a whatsapp group where we discuss.

See below

laykorn:
Welcome evereyone. This the the Nairaland Poets Club Chatroom. Here members and non-members are free to ask questions,post poems and discuss poetry. Membership registrations will be done here also and class schedules will also be updated here. Thanks.

Please send a message to 08039594156 to have you on the club group on WhatsApp.

[size=18pt]For Week 1,this is the assignment and timetable thread. All discussions will be done here in the chatroom.[/size] www.nairaland.com/2013247/nairaland-poetry-
club-assignments-week-1

Ayamlaykorn

Also a whatsapp group is a bit too personal. While I'm happy to discuss things here on NL, I am not ready to divulge my phone number via Whatsapp. Also taking things offline promotes 'cliquism' which defeats the purpose of promoting an appreciation for poetry to the public at large

Shoddy management is already threatening this great idea even before it kicks off the ground.

Nihilist:


See below



Also a whatsapp group is a bit too personal. While I'm happy to discuss things here on NL, I am not ready to divulge my phone number via Whatsapp. Also taking things offline promotes 'cliquism' which defeats the purpose of promoting an appreciation for poetry to the public at large

Shoddy management is already threatening this great idea even before it kicks off the ground.

[b]Thank you sir. I will admit that although the syllabus was set,it seems like its not being followed. Originally we thought the club would be for gurus who'd love some challenge,but we realised that more than 50 percent of the people that registered were pure beginners wishing to learn the art through the club. We realised this only after posting the first assignment. This could have been due to some lack of foresight from our part. We stand to be blamed for this sir. Meetings are currently holding on changing the the approach from a challenging environment to a lessons environment.

On the subject of the chatroom being derailed,this was what the chatroom was created for. For discussions on poetry generally. Due to clashes that are bound to happen when the new approach takes full force,a new thread could be created for the submissions of assignments or for pure assignments discussions.

On the issue of the WhatsApp group,we realised that maintaning a planning team wouldn't be easy on the forum since the forum does not support instant messaging which is a key factor in a successful plan.

We will be very happy to have you on the WhatsApp planning team and your suggestions are highly welcome and needed too.

Laykorn-Vice President[/b]
Ayamlaykorn

Laykorn thanks for clearing that up.

I must respectfully decline your offer of a place on the planning team though, as I don't consider myself knowledgeable enough

Nihilist:
Laykorn thanks for clearing that up.

I must respectfully decline your offer of a place on the planning team though, as I don't consider myself knowledgeable enough

Is it that you don't have enough time?
Ayamlaykorn

Nihilist:
Laykorn thanks for clearing that up.

I must respectfully decline your offer of a place on the planning team though, as I don't consider myself knowledgeable enough

Would really love to read one of your poems. Kindly oblige me.

Not tried delving into poetry. Guess if I try writing more of it, I'll get better. OMA4U laykorn

Here's something I wrote, first attempt. Rate me please:

I have seen enough!
From these 10year olds,
From these teens who think they’re cool,
And from these Adults who won’t act their age.

You see, I respect myself,
So, I’ll remain a stalker,
I’ll wait for your blunders,
And I’ll just write!

Dear Instagram girls,
We’ve seen enough!
Spotless selfies that tell a story,
Background that says another.

Dear Facebook boys,
Who cares about your six packs?
Stop stressing it,
We know you’re cute.

Dear Marketers,
Go down on you marketing,
We probably don’t need your product,
Stop forcing it down our throats.

Dear 10year olds,
It’s past your bed time.
Don’t try sending me a request,
We are not mates!

Yes indeed!
I’ve seen enough!
Your spellings are bad,
Stop updating your status!

Would you stop serving more than necessary?
Just 5 likes?
I’ll remove some more clothes,
50 likes is my aim.

Parents, don’t share in what’s for the 21st century.
If you must, do it on your lane.
Please, don’t spy on me,
I’ll just unfriend you.

Dear lovers,
We really don’t need the pictures.
No, we are not jealous,
We’re just not interested.

Dear Instagrammers,
Keep using the filters.
One day, we’ll meet you in person,
Then, you’ll tell us where you kept the cute face.

I can go on and on,
But I’ll respect myself,
I’ll keep stalking,
I’ll keep waiting for your blunders.

Christie Uzebu
Twitter/Instagram ---@xtyzeb

Krysstie:
Not tried delving into poetry. Guess if I try writing more of it, I'll get better. OMA4U laykorn

Here's something I wrote, first attempt. Rate me please:

I have seen enough!
From these 10year olds,
From these teens who think they’re cool,
And from these Adults who won’t act their age.

You see, I respect myself,
So, I’ll remain a stalker,
I’ll wait for your blunders,
And I’ll just write!

Dear Instagram girls,
We’ve seen enough!
Spotless selfies that tell a story,
Background that says another.

Dear Facebook boys,
Who cares about your six packs?
Stop stressing it,
We know you’re cute.

Dear Marketers,
Go down on you marketing,
We probably don’t need your product,
Stop forcing it down our throats.

Dear 10year olds,
It’s past your bed time.
Don’t try sending me a request,
We are not mates!

Yes indeed!
I’ve seen enough!
Your spellings are bad,
Stop updating your status!

Would you stop serving more than necessary?
Just 5 likes?
I’ll remove some more clothes,
50 likes is my aim.

Parents, don’t share in what’s for the 21st century.
If you must, do it on your lane.
Please, don’t spy on me,
I’ll just unfriend you.

Dear lovers,
We really don’t need the pictures.
No, we are not jealous,
We’re just not interested.

Dear Instagrammers,
Keep using the filters.
One day, we’ll meet you in person,
Then, you’ll tell us where you kept the cute face.

I can go on and on,
But I’ll respect myself,
I’ll keep stalking,
I’ll keep waiting for your blunders.

Christie Uzebu
Twitter/Instagram ---@xtyzeb

Witty,with a touch of humour and a sting in its tail. This is out of the norm and I really like that. Keep up the good work.

Right now I'm like the "phantom of the opera" disappearing and reappearing. Well it might take a while but I hope I'll be able to stay steady and stop "glitching"

laykorn:

Is it that you don't have enough time?
Ayamlaykorn

That is one of many reason sir.
But my main reason is that I don't consider myself well versed enough in poetry to assume/accept a position of leadership in this matter.
So again I must thank you, but decline

Krysstie:
Not tried delving into poetry. Guess if I try writing more of it, I'll get better. OMA4U laykorn

Here's something I wrote, first attempt. Rate me please:

I have seen enough!
From these 10year olds,
From these teens who think they’re cool,
And from these Adults who won’t act their age.

You see, I respect myself,
So, I’ll remain a stalker,
I’ll wait for your blunders,
And I’ll just write!

Dear Instagram girls,
We’ve seen enough!
Spotless selfies that tell a story,
Background that says another.

Dear Facebook boys,
Who cares about your six packs?
Stop stressing it,
We know you’re cute.

Dear Marketers,
Go down on you marketing,
We probably don’t need your product,
Stop forcing it down our throats.

Dear 10year olds,
It’s past your bed time.
Don’t try sending me a request,
We are not mates!

Yes indeed!
I’ve seen enough!
Your spellings are bad,
Stop updating your status!

Would you stop serving more than necessary?
Just 5 likes?
I’ll remove some more clothes,
50 likes is my aim.

Parents, don’t share in what’s for the 21st century.
If you must, do it on your lane.
Please, don’t spy on me,
I’ll just unfriend you.

Dear lovers,
We really don’t need the pictures.
No, we are not jealous,
We’re just not interested.

Dear Instagrammers,
Keep using the filters.
One day, we’ll meet you in person,
Then, you’ll tell us where you kept the cute face.

I can go on and on,
But I’ll respect myself,
I’ll keep stalking,
I’ll keep waiting for your blunders.

Christie Uzebu
Twitter/Instagram ---@xtyzeb

It's hilarious. Write more, please. We are all learning to better our crafts.

OMA4U:


It's hilarious. Write more, please. We are all learning to better our crafts.

Krystalxxx:

Witty,with a touch of humour and a sting in its tail. This is out of the norm and I really like that. Keep up the good work.

True OMA4U, tnx..

Tnx Krystal..

Krysstie:
Not tried delving into poetry. Guess if I try writing more of it, I'll get better. OMA4U laykorn

Here's something I wrote, first attempt. Rate me please:

I have seen enough!
From these 10year olds,
From these teens who think they’re cool,
And from these Adults who won’t act their age.

You see, I respect myself,
So, I’ll remain a stalker,
I’ll wait for your blunders,
And I’ll just write!

Dear Instagram girls,
We’ve seen enough!
Spotless selfies that tell a story,
Background that says another.

Dear Facebook boys,
Who cares about your six packs?
Stop stressing it,
We know you’re cute.

Dear Marketers,
Go down on you marketing,
We probably don’t need your product,
Stop forcing it down our throats.

Dear 10year olds,
It’s past your bed time.
Don’t try sending me a request,
We are not mates!

Yes indeed!
I’ve seen enough!
Your spellings are bad,
Stop updating your status!

Would you stop serving more than necessary?
Just 5 likes?
I’ll remove some more clothes,
50 likes is my aim.

Parents, don’t share in what’s for the 21st century.
If you must, do it on your lane.
Please, don’t spy on me,
I’ll just unfriend you.

Dear lovers,
We really don’t need the pictures.
No, we are not jealous,
We’re just not interested.

Dear Instagrammers,
Keep using the filters.
One day, we’ll meet you in person,
Then, you’ll tell us where you kept the cute face.

I can go on and on,
But I’ll respect myself,
I’ll keep stalking,
I’ll keep waiting for your blunders.

Christie Uzebu
Twitter/Instagram ---@xtyzeb

yeeeeeeee! Rofl! My daughter you are hilarious yeeeeee! Lol. Check my dp and say something daughter. I no fine Lol

You said you're getting your hands on more poems,please remember to always tag me and my ogas at the top.

Since this is your first,please look into using more poetry devices in your next poems. Devices are what make poetry different from prose. Check these links to download short ebooks on all poetry devices. When you read through them,you can then decide what devices you want to use in the planing phase of your poem.

www.chaparralpoets.org/devices.pdf

www.utexas.edu/../Poetic-Devices.pdf

www.education.nt.gov.au/../poetry.pdf

If you had problems downloading them,please notify me,I'd be glad to send them to you by mail
Ayamlaykorn

laykorn:


yeeeeeeee! Rofl! My daughter you are hilarious yeeeeee! Lol. Check my dp and say something daughter. I no fine Lol

You said you're getting your hands on more poems,please remember to always tag me and my ogas at the top.

Since this is your first,please look into using more poetry devices in your next poems. Devices are what make poetry different from prose. Check these links to download short ebooks on all poetry devices. When you read through them,you can then decide what devices you want to use in the planing phase of your poem.

www.chaparralpoets.org/devices.pdf

www.utexas.edu/../Poetic-Devices.pdf

www.education.nt.gov.au/../poetry.pdf

If you had problems downloading them,please notify me,I'd be glad to send them to you by mail
Ayamlaykorn

Lol...Tnx a lot.
http://www.utexas.edu/Poetic-Devices.pdf says page not found...http://www.education.nt.gov.au/poetry.pdf didn't open @all...

Krysstie:


Lol...Tnx a lot.
http://www.utexas.edu/Poetic-Devices.pdf says page not found...http://www.education.nt.gov.au/poetry.pdf didn't open @all...

I'll mail them tonight. I guess the links are broken or something. Were you able to download the first one?

Check my dp,talk whether I fine na!
Ayamlaykorn