dre11:


Just asking. ......... Are you one of the students here and why didn't you copy the teachers to come and see ur poem.

IF not...... I can come and edict this and allow your thoughts to flow as u put ur pen at work

Cc: laykorn
Texanomaly

youngcrysta:


yeap, a student but having issues with tagging

laykorn:

Young, just seeing your message. All you have to do to tag is to mention the teachers' names. Something like this.

Cc:
Laykorn
Texanomal.y

And they'll see it in their mentions.
Ayamlaykorn

laykorn:

Young, just seeing your message. All you have to do to tag is to mention the teachers' names. Something like this.

Cc:
Laykorn
Texanomal.y

And they'll see it in their mentions.
Ayamlaykorn

youngcrysta:
HARSH

How can I keep enduring these pains!
Always, the word patience lies on human lips,
Ready to dish out advices.
Seriously, words are mere and cannot soothe
Helpless is the word.

CC: laykorn, leki10, taxanomly

youngcrysta:
HARSH

How can I keep enduring these pains!
Always, the word patience lies on human lips,
Ready to dish out advices.
Seriously, words are mere and cannot soothe
Helpless is the word.

CC: laykorn, leki10, taxanomly

texanomaly:
The gangs all here. Lemme read.

You and Laykorn no gree review my last poem why na?

laykorn:

Wow! Great acrostic!
You forgot your period in line 4
Ayamlaykorn

leki10:

kudos dear.....
since the first line is a question, you should punctuate wit a question mark.
Line 4 was not punctuated at the end.....keep it up
The sky is ur starting point

laykorn:

Wow! Great acrostic!
You forgot your period in line 4
Ayamlaykorn

youngcrysta:
Thanks for your comment, will work on the Punctuation aspect

laykorn:

What about the title change
Will you work on it too
Ayamlaykorn

Obinnau:
Hi, about editing your title, modify your first post of this thread, the title will show then you can modify it too.

Or you tell me the name you want to use, I'll modify it for you

Thanks

youngcrysta:
Moi Free Verse assignment

MORE TO WHAT WE SEE

Told to watch and learn
But kept repeating the mistake,
Cos I didnt observe the errors.
To fly high was in my imagination,
In reality I am soaring high.
The shoes I wear,
Determines my steps to greatness.
Have got to keep it shining.
Just like the sharp pain in the heart,
So also, Like a Stain that needs to be erased.

A smile can make you furious,
Anger can led to death.
Everything has a second phase,
Even the Universe and Life has.
To possess is our property,
Also to lend is your possession.

The Sun is great,
But still have to humble itself every night.
The moon shines brightly,
But still have to give way to the rain.
Stars are breath taking,
But will have to be mute,
When the cloud pass by.
Even High Mountain get scared,
they can suddenly become plain.
No matter the number of years I have,
A day old Angel is to be respected.


CC: Texanomaly, Laykorn, Leki10, Everestdebliu

leki10:

Nice one dear...love d way u expressed dose objects. Work on ur punctuation... ..the sky is ur starting point

youngcrysta:
WATERFALL

A beauty of nature,
A picture to keep in mind forever.
From top of the cliff
Water gush out with so much strength
Hitting, Crashing
Upon hard rock
Racing down into an open river.
An atmospheric music filled with happy flowers.

CC: Texanomaly, Laykorn, leki10, donifez

donifez:


was just imagining a waterfall ...love the poem, can't you make it longer (create more pictures).

Ghostlady:
So am here now;
Nice collection you ve got dear..
Me likey
Waiting for your assignment

youngcrysta:


thankz... will try to make it longer

texanomaly:


Here are some words to help.

flowing, ebbing, running, lapping, dripping, soothing, relaxing, blissful, whooshing, pounding, peaceful, dancing, pitter-patter, splashing, and my favorite... There a song called "Geronimo" it talks about walking through the "curtains of a waterfall". Awesome lyric!

youngcrysta:
Muder story (continuation)

Now the light is on, Silence ruling
In a lucid moment, Eve remembered
Her loved ones kissing the earth,
A fair masked man with metalic weapons
With a wicked grin.
Eve bowed her head while her heart kept saying a silent prayer.
"I am known to perform three action",
The thunderous sound made her heart skip
Silence bow down for it.
"To kill, steal and Destroy"


Everyone immediately became a silent prayer warrior
Wishful thinking.
Alas! it was granted
They stole
A soul, was taken
by the recuse team.

CC: texanomaly, laykorn, cisse7575, krystalxxx, everestdebliu, Donifez, leki10