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Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 9:32pm On Nov 27, 2014 |
On Sunday service Praying, i paused coz God sent me a VISSION/ That its time to accomplish my Marital Mission/ ... that the beautiful girl αt my 3:00 clock he personally Made my Wife/ i kept searching n watching till my heart fell off my body like crumbs of bread..// αt first i Thought αh was Dead//... On the altar bout to take the bread from the priest when I saw her, my heart came to life again, so I screamed Jesus! You the bread of life..// . . (After service) I quickly walked up to her, i was like Girl spare me a Minute, i need us to briefly Converse/ Firstly ur 'Beauty' is not of this 'Planet' am guessing you from Marz/ Marz? Ɣǝ̥§ coz the First time i saw you. I knew have found my Missing Ribs/ Am Tempted to 'Touch n Hug' you, i wanna Kiss Ya Lips/ They say life is sweet, but I doubted untill I met you sweetheart/ under the sun, u make me shiver, under the rain u make me sweat when I'm putting on my red hat// I've loved and I've cried, I'll call you my onion/ just like I've made up my mind I'll listen to no other opinion/ Girl your Beauty is 'Driving me Crazy' right now am Just going Nuts/ (Jos/North) Like a Super Model, damn baby you too Hot/ . . See, Its obvious people don't see youlike i Do/ Ill trek for you from Lekki, through 3rd Mainland down to Mile 2/ on the 'Battlefield of Love' i'b there to Fight for You/ Those boiz? Thier 'Total Dissaster' when it comes to matters of the Heart/ they wud say they LOVE You, buh its ur Heart they want to Tear Apart/ Am no Reminisce buh my LOVE for you, its Too Much/ I wunt 'Hurt ur Feelings' i wouldn't even Do Such/ . . Girl i have a Confession!, are you Gonna Marry me?/ Be my Wife, Bear me Kids, together like Couples we shud 'Build' a Family/ (Her Response) bro take it 'Slow' you moving Too Fast/. . Men are not to be 'Trusted' this days its had to see the Good Lads/ Like Emmygee I know ♈όϋ gat Rands N Naira' buh Love is not only bout Cool Cash/ Be patient lemme get home, rethink the matter, i'll Call or text you, i promise i Wunt Flash/ ... . . (Αt Home) Then i got a Call From Babel/ That during their 'Youth Meeting' the Reverend Father said he Had a Vission/ Which says, 'Heaven' Lost an Angel/ Funny this sounds ℓιkε Mission/ Then i asked him, how does she look like? He said she's Six Feet Tall/ She so Qute, elegant, Her skin 'Firm' like a District Wall/ like a Deer her Feets are so Tender/ She neither fat nor Slender/ She dressed like a Queen/ To 'Cut' the story 'Short' ♈όϋ can't compare her Beauty to any mortal Beauty Queen/ . . then it dawned on me she's, THE GIRL I MET IN THE CHURCH 2 Likes 4 Shares |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by Nobody: 1:11pm On Nov 29, 2014 |
Hehehehehe,oga mi you just taught me new pickup lines. Oya ka lo am woo looooooor! ℓ̊ quickly walked up to her, ℓ̊ was ℓιkε Girl spare me Your rhymes lol. And the way your lines end. Let me borrow GIYAZZ's words. This is "rap poetry". This is awesome Bruv keep it up! ![]() Ayamlaykorn . |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 1:49pm On Nov 29, 2014 |
laykorn: Bless Baba Mi! |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by Nobody: 12:01pm On Dec 06, 2014 |
I like this |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 2:19pm On Dec 06, 2014 |
elvisosho:Tnx plz help broadcast |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by PerfumeRepublik: 11:35am On Dec 17, 2014 |
Cool Try and remove those special characters .. Simple and plain is way to go |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 1:29pm On Dec 17, 2014 |
PerfumeRepublik:Done!! ![]() |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by Niftyrules(m): 12:23pm On Dec 21, 2014 |
gottoboy: Hey bro to be frank with you, you're gonna be a good poet only if you could observe some few things. You can tell the story better only if you follow the pattern in which poems are arranged. I can bet it with you that you've got the stuff in you but provided you can learn more from others. Don't know if you've heard about allpoetry.com before but you can Check here and see some of my poems: allpoetry.com/poem/by/Niftyrules lest I forget you're also a good story teller. Do have a nice day Regards Niftyrules. |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 1:14pm On Dec 21, 2014 |
Niftyrules:Tnx brov, ill do just that |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by AfricanApple(f): 2:06pm On Dec 21, 2014 |
gottoboy, hope by the time u start going international you will still be using this moniker so that I will know its u ![]() mehn! boy you are too good, imma start putting my eyes on u ![]() I guess this is one of the raps you were talking about, this is more more than a poem o you and rapzino will make a good collabo ![]() |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by herald9: 3:00pm On Dec 21, 2014 |
gottoboy: Dude.. you'll give Yung6ix a run for his money...Your rap is cool and entertaining ![]() |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by misshoree(f): 4:08pm On Dec 21, 2014 |
Aww!this is so cute ![]() |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 7:27am On Dec 22, 2014 |
herald9: Tnx bro, ii appreciate |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 7:28am On Dec 22, 2014 |
Reyginus |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by Nobody: 11:05am On Dec 22, 2014 |
Good one. But it is more like a rap. It is lacking in that poetic essence every poet identifies by heart. Don't follow any pattern if you want to be average. Create your pattern. Diss the iambs and create your style. You must not write in aabb pattern. |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 11:51am On Dec 22, 2014 |
Reyginus:Aabb pattern? |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 11:53am On Dec 22, 2014 |
misshoree:Tnx maam 1 Like |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by Nobody: 12:13pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
gottoboy:Yeah... I quickly walked up to her, i was like Girl spare me a Minute, i need us to briefly Converse/a Firstly ur 'Beauty' is not of this 'Planet' am guessing you from Marz/a Marz? Ɣǝ̥§ coz the First time i saw you. I knew have found my Missing Ribs/b Am Tempted to 'Touch n Hug' you, i wanna Kiss Ya Lips/b The first and second words rhyme similarly and that makes them 'a' lines while the third and fourth rhymes similarly and different from the first and second so we have a 'b'. You don't really need this normal style of rhyming in poetry if you want to be different and too good. You can do without even rhyming or you reinvent the rhyme scheme. |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 1:10pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
Reyginus:Ơ̴̴̴͡ º°˚˚°ºoo now ii get the gist! It depends onn thee source of Ūя̲̅ inspiration/mood, and time limit, as a poetic rapper, my rhyme scheme came exactly from a rapping angle (Flow). . . Still working O̶̲̥̅Ϟ a permanent style though |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by Nobody: 2:16pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
gottoboy:Okay. |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by Buqqui: 8:24pm On Dec 23, 2014 |
Wow!!! That's impressive. With a little polishing here and there, You'll make an Author someday. All the best bud. |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 3:38am On Dec 25, 2014 |
Buqqui:Tnx мα'am |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by Nobody: 6:32am On Dec 25, 2014 |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 9:38am On Dec 25, 2014 |
laykorn:Hang Over ![]() |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 10:05pm On Dec 31, 2014 |
AfricanApple:Ɣǝ̥§! Buh ill have an Alter Ego ♡⌣̊┈̥-̶̯͡»̶̥A̶̲̥̅̊nthonƔ⌣̊┈̥-̶̯͡»̶̥♡ iis my other ᶰ̲ᵃ̲ᵐ̲ᵉ̲ a.k.a TonniBlaze AfricanApple:Αм already putting myy eyes O̶̲̥̅Ϟ you, infact αм writing you 2love verses for starters ![]() AfricanApple:Its not Ơ̴̴̴͡ º°˚˚°ºoo, its just a free verse, this is rap poetry a little bit beyond Poem AfricanApple:Rapzino ![]() |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by AfricanApple(f): 10:45am On Jan 01, 2015 |
gottoboy:tonniblaze. no pp oh really? I can't wait to hear them ![]() hmm yep, he is happy happy new year |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 1:09pm On Jan 01, 2015 |
AfricanApple:Same to You |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by Rapzino: 7:55pm On Jan 01, 2015 |
gottoboy:sup man? |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 8:25pm On Jan 01, 2015 |
Rapzino:Dude wasup? |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by Rapzino: 9:42am On Jan 02, 2015 |
gottoboy:i'm good and ya? |
Re: Rap Poetry: The Girl I Met In The Church by gottoboy(m): 9:45am On Jan 02, 2015 |
Rapzino:Gooder, do you rap? |
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