Cool

FrancisTony:
Cool

thanks

Herald. I'll only comment on your layout and punctuation. Remember that every line of a poem starts with a block letter.

Remember to punctuate your poem too, just like you'd punctuate your prose work.

Although I don't really get the message in your poem, maybe its because I don't read the bible, but your rhymes are awesome especially in the first stanza. Keep it up!
Ayamlaykorn

Commendable work bruh.

Veeey:
Commendable work bruh.

Thanks sir.

mah come digest ur own sef

herald9:


Thanks sir.

mah come digest ur own sef

Good poem brother
Take note of what laykorn says
And work on the punctuation....... Also, on the verse

dre11:


Good poem brother
Take note of what laykorn says
And work on the punctuation....... Also, on the verse

Noted bruv...thanks much.

wish I was an art student... would've been a pro in this thing by now...

Have you written yours...would love to learn from it

herald9:


Noted bruv...thanks much.

wish I was an art student... would've been a pro in this thing by now...

Have you written yours...would love to learn from it

Heheh. Art students aren't better writers than science students.

I am a science student.
OMA4U is a student engineer.
Ayamlaykorn

laykorn:

Heheh. Art students aren't better writers than science students.

I am a science student.
OMA4U is a student engineer.
Ayamlaykorn

wow.

how were you able to combine both.

As science students we were only taught the basics...before we went our different ways...It just my love for literature that brought me this far.

herald9:


Noted bruv...thanks much.

wish I was an art student... would've been a pro in this thing by now...

Have you written yours...would love to learn from it

Yes
Tried to drop some few thoughts thou.

Also, I study engineering and I was never an art student

https://www.nairaland.com/1998782/subconscious-mind

I was never an ART student.

That's why i'm keen on learning.

dre11:


Yes
Tried to drop some few thoughts thou.

Also, I study engineering and I was never an art student

https://www.nairaland.com/1998782/subconscious-mind

Are you well-versed in describing abstract things.. like love..emotions..atmosphere.... etc.

Those kinds blow me up and crack my brain.

FrancisTony:
I was never an ART student.

That's why i'm keen on learning.

Every science student wanna write poems...what will Art students do...Oya go study periodic table

herald9:


Every science student wanna write poems...what will Art students do...Oya go study periodic table

The thing I love about science is its uniqueness.

If you didn't study it, you didn't do so.

I can venture into any ART profession even as a science student except LAW.

herald9:


Are you well-versed in describing abstract things.. like love..emotions..atmosphere.... etc.

Those kinds blow me up and crack my brain.

Thanks man.. .... Am still learning like you
Let's not turn this to a chart thread.

We learn from each other

FrancisTony:

The thing I love about science is its uniqueness.

If you didn't study it, you didn't do so.

I can venture into any ART profession even as a science student except LAW.

Says who?

Oya this thread is for my mind's ramblings alone... no come add your own

herald9:


Thanks sir.

mah come digest ur own sef

Lol. Even if you digest am with juice, e no go still belle full you .

You boys have turned a poem thread to a Meet-Up-Zone thread. Herald, and yoou sef no fit chase them commot
Ayamlaykorn

Creepy

I was alone in a moonless night,
Walking down a desolate road,
The road I always take,
To avoid the old gateman's suspicious stare.

To where I was going, I Did know.
Seems my wayward mind connived with my feet,
To drag my body,
On a journey of doom.

Yes,my love for my friends took me this way,
They'd have been here,probably going to
Steal some mangos,
In the cemetery.

If they were not locked up,
In the school's toilet,
For stealing,
The headmistress' locket.

What was my mission?
"To rescue my friends",I grinned excitedly,
As I climbed the tree,
And scaled over the fence.

I landed on it,soft,slippery.
It gave a jerk and I came tumbling down.
I stared into the darkness, it stared back,
My fears began to rise.

My body filled with dreadful chill,
As it glides motionlessly towards it's prey,
I tried to scream, my breathe failed me,
As it gets closer,it keeps getting closer.

Transfixed.
A gentle drip of sweat trickles down my face,
As I closed my eyes,
Waiting for the kiss of death.

I felt it in seconds;
Alas it was soft.
How it be so?
I had no idea.

And I felt it again,
Much more firmer,
I opened my eyes,
Not sure of what I'll see.

Still two pairs of eyes staring at me,
Yet these eyes were different,
Soft,tender and filled with care.

What was it?
It was my mum!
It was a dream!!!


cc: Laykorn
Lekki10
Ghostlady
Dre11
Veey

Nice one sweedy....
But its really a scary poem...
Me love it...

.

herald9:
my first acrostic

tags:
Laykorn
Everestdibu
Texanomaly
Ghostlady
Francistony
leki10

Is capitalization still important in an acrostic poem

Capitalization is the choice of the writer these days. I'm a little old school when it comes to poetry, so I like to do it. Your acrostic is really good.

texanomaly:

Modified

uhm... I didn't get you woh

herald9:


uhm... I didn't get you woh

Modified again. Sorry I didn't notice the poem because your tag was first in my mentions. I was confused. I thought that was your poem. Hehe

texanomaly:


Modified again. Sorry I didn't notice the poem because your tag was first in my mentions. I was confused. I thought that was your poem. Hehe

OK lemme tag it properly

texanomaly:


Capitalization is the choice of the writer these days. I'm a little old school when it comes to poetry, so I like to do it. Your acrostic is really good.

Thanks ma...