Give me a chance
Give me a chance
because i'm human
And i reek imperfection
Do not judge me by my past
Try judging me with my present.

Give me a chance
because it's a brand new me
the old me has gone
I've dispatch my old vices
I now breath love and peace

Give me a chance
Nothing can be compared
To the guilt i felt inside
I really want you to see
The changes in me.

Give me a chance
I'm so lonely and depressed
Your love and kindness is
All i craved for
Help me to let go of my fears

Give me a chance
Dear,i'm so sorry
take me back pls
The heart knows what it want
A second chance is all i yawn for

You really want an honest opinion?

Zikdik:
You really want an honest opinion?

Now,am scared

Dont tell me,i know it already.

Hw u fdoin??

kitnah:

Now,am scared

Dont tell me,i know it already.

Hw u fdoin??

I'm good. Don't be so sure about what I wanted to say tho.

Zikdik:

I'm good. Don't be so sure about what I wanted to say tho.

Hmm
I get so emotional,datz y

Are u a poet??

@zikdik,pls stick around,more poems loadin

kitnah:

Hmm
I get so emotional,datz y

Are u a poet??

Poet, maybe. I'm gonna be around as much as I can be 'cos medical school doesn't give me much flexibility.
Nice piece though.

Nice poem. Don't worry I'm gonna give you a chance.

Zikdik:

Poet, maybe. I'm gonna be around as much as I can be 'cos medical school doesn't give me much flexibility.
Nice piece though.

Thanks
U a medical student?? WOW!
Aii,i wl tag u along

spacefreak:
Nice poem. Don't worry I'm gonna give you a chance.

Thank you!!

Oya give me a chance,i know i've hurt u

I choose to love you in silence
Because in silence,i find no rejection
In silence,you are all mine

I choose to love you in my dreams
Because,that is the safest place
I can lock my lips with that sexy lips of yours

You are a player??Check
You treat girls like shii?? Trust me,i dont care
What matters is i care alot abt you.

I cant love you in reality
We are world apart,miles apart.
But i will always love you
In my dreams,in silence,and in my heart

cc:spacefreak,zikdik

kitnah:

Thank you!!

Oya give me a chance,i know i've hurt u

sly hottie. Me likey.

You can't love me in silence cause our love should be loud
You can't love me in silence cause in silence I cannot write these words
You can't love me in silence cause in silence I would never know
You can't love me in silence cause in silence there is no hope
You can't love me in silence cause silent thoughts are left buried like corpses
You can't love in silence cause our dreams are big together
You can't love me in silence cause your sweet lips I would never taste You can't love me in silence cause I would never love you back

Forgive me,if i cant love you in reality
Maybe because i'm not bold
Maybe because i'm allergyic to rejection
Rejection breaks my heart

I cant deal with the disaster if you say no
I will scream out and cry my eyes out
I will develop hatred for all guys.
That is how fragile and emotional i am
Trust me,i will love you in silence
That is the safest place for me.

cc:spacefreak

Don't love me in silence
whisper it to my ears
Let my ears tingle to the sound of your sweet voice
Let me be lost in your eyes
Let me hold your hands and never let go
I would forever be by your side like wings on birds
I wouldn't reject you even if it meant my death
I would love you back to the fullest


Your soft lips mine kiss
Your tender hands mine to hold Your lovely skin mine to touch
Your beautiful face forever in my mind

spacefreak:
Don't love me in silence
whisper it to my ears
Let my ears tingle to the sound of your sweet voice
Let me be lost in your eyes
Let me hold your hands and never let go
I would forever be by your side like wings on birds
I wouldn't reject you even if it meant my death
I would love you back to the fullest


Your soft lips mine kiss
Your tender hands mine to hold Your lovely skin mine to touch
Your beautiful face forever in my mind

Aww..expect mine tmr
so tired now

kitnah:
Forgive me,if i cant love you in reality
Maybe because i'm not bold
Maybe because i'm allergyic to rejection
Rejection breaks my heart

I cant deal with the disaster if you say no
I will scream out and cry my eyes out
I will develop hatred for all guys.
That is how fragile and emotional i am
Trust me,i will love you in silence
That is the safest place for me.

cc:spacefreak

Nice. Would review them tomorrow morning.
#loveisintheair

Zikdik:

Nice. Would review them tomorrow morning.
#loveisintheair

Lol
Thanks 4 stoppin by

really nice

Starie:
really nice

Aww...tanx

kitnah:

Aww..expect mine tmr
so tired now

It's fine.

There’s not much I have to ask.
Life builds up too fast.
Only twenty years in,
And I’m already a mess.
No telling what else is in store.
It’s too scary to think about.
So much in life is unknown.
We can’t learn till we try,
Even though sometimes,
No matter how hard we try,
It ends in pain.
But with so many paths to take,
I won’t give up.
Making it through all my errors isn’t easy.
I can’t do it alone.
As much as I hate to admit,
We all need help.
There is only one thing I ask.
Let me breakdown in your arms.
No questions.
No words.
Just tears.
Let me cry.
Hold me tight,
Like you never want to let go.
All I need is to be held while I cry,
Just to feel the touch of another.
Nothing hurts more than crying alone.
Isolation makes me want to scream.
Being so frail and weak,
What’s a scream worth if it reaches no ear?
What’s a tear worth if it reaches no shoulder?
What’s a person worth who is afraid to feel?
Just hold me tight.
Let the tears do the talking.
So many thoughts will go racing.
Seems like the problem is the world,
Which is something so impossible to face,
On your own.
The true reasons of sorrow are often buried.
Hidden away under mounds of doubt,
Guilt,
Pain,
And Regret.
There will be time to dig through,
But for now there needs to be time to cry.
When you cry,
There is always a reason.
Crying is never pointless.
When a person cries out,
It is out of sorrow.
Regardless of the cause,
Everyone wants to be heard.
Therefore I don’t ask for much.
The solution isn’t always complex.
All I want is to be held.
To feel close enough,
To feel safe,
To feel like I belong.
We all need someone to hold us down,
To keep us from drifting away,
Into an abyss of confusion and fear.
These guardians are called anchors.
Whenever you need them,
They will be there.
No matter the reason,
They will hold you tight.
That’s all I ask,
To be held tight.
I don’t know why I’m so sad.
I don’t know why I’m so mad.
I don’t know why I want to die.
I don’t know why I want to cry.
But more than ever I need my anchor.
I need to be held.
Let me breakdown in your arms.
No questions.
No words.
Just tears.
Let me cry.
Hold me tight,
Like you never want to let go.


......I once wrote that for an online pal..it's old but its one of my all time favourites. Hope you like it. Would review your work as soon as I can.

it was nice
@ zikdik

It's easier said than done
When reality sets in
Then we will know that
we aint meant to be
I will be left with a broken heart
Not capable of loving anymore
I will be lonely again
I will be left with unfulfilled promises and desires
Then my crazy love story will turn sour
My heart will become desolate again
Dearie,i dont want this to happen
In silence,i shall love


cc:spacefreak

TO MY SWEET MUMMY

Everyone has a mother
But you are just different
You can be compared to none
Having you as a mother is a blessing.

You are my bestfriend
My number one fan
You inspired me to achieve
My dreams and goals
You said i should not give up

Your warmth and sweet words
Restored me back to life
You are as gentle as a dove
You are as caring as an angel
You are as bold as a lion

They said human beings are not perfect
I'm afraid ma,you are virtually perfect
I cant pin-point your shortcomings
Do you even have one?
You are the best thing,MOTHER

kitnah:
Give me a chance
Give me a chance
because i'm human
And i reek imperfection
Do not judge me by my past
Try judging me with my present.

Give me a chance
because it's a brand new me
the old me has gone
I've dispatch my old vices
I now breath love and peace

Give me a chance
Nothing can be compared
To the guilt i felt inside
I really want you to see
The changes in me.

Give me a chance
I'm so lonely and depressed
Your love and kindness is
All i craved for
Help me to let go of my fears

Give me a chance
Dear,i'm so sorry
take me back pls
The heart knows what it want
A second chance is all i yawn for

OK. I'm sorry about the initial delay..let's dig in..
This is the first..poem. It was nice from an emotional perspective because the message was clear and straight to the point. But, it lacked a lot poetic attraction. No rhyming, no imagery, no poetic devices. It just appealed to the emotional side of me and that might be a good thing if it was a bit more voluminous. It looks like a personal message to someone than the naira work of art that poetry is supposed to be.

kitnah:
I choose to love you in silence
Because in silence,i find no rejection
In silence,you are all mine

I choose to love you in my dreams
Because,that is the safest place
I can lock my lips with that sexy lips of yours

You are a player??Check
You treat girls like shii?? Trust me,i dont care
What matters is i care alot abt you.

I cant love you in reality
We are world apart,miles apart.
But i will always love you
In my dreams,in silence,and in my heart

cc:spacefreak,zikdik

Same as the first. A bit more intimate..

spacefreak:
You can't love me in silence cause our love should be loud
You can't love me in silence cause in silence I cannot write these words
You can't love me in silence cause in silence I would never know
You can't love me in silence cause in silence there is no hope
You can't love me in silence cause silent thoughts are left buried like corpses
You can't love in silence cause our dreams are big together
You can't love me in silence cause your sweet lips I would never taste You can't love me in silence cause I would never love you back

Now, this is a bit more like it. Imagery... poetic devices..I even smell a story somewhere in there. Nice but short. Very short with poor rhyming too.

Zikdik:

OK. I'm sorry about the initial delay..let's dig in..
This is the first..poem. It was nice from an emotional perspective because the message was clear and straight to the point. But, it lacked a lot poetic attraction. No rhyming, no imagery, no poetic devices. It just appealed to the emotional side of me and that might be a good thing if it was a bit more voluminous. It looks like a personal message to someone than the naira work of art that poetry is supposed to be.

Roger that boss
I just felt most people wont understand it,if itz filled with imagery
i will work on that.thanks
Rhyme?? i do free verse and blank

kitnah:
Forgive me,if i cant love you in reality
Maybe because i'm not bold
Maybe because i'm allergic to rejection
Rejection breaks my heart

I cant deal with the disaster if you say no
I will scream out and cry my eyes out
I will develop hatred for all guys.
That is how fragile and emotional i am
Trust me,i will love you in silence
That is the safest place for me.

cc:spacefreak

Oh dear..how do I say this without sounding like a dead, broken bell? Still looks like a personal message than poetry. It's got intensity, personification somewhat. Still too short and not poetic enough.

kitnah:
TO MY SWEET MUMMY

Everyone has a mother
But you are just different
You can be compared to none
Having you as a mother is a blessing.

You are my bestfriend
My number one fan
You inspired me to achieve
My dreams and goals
You said i should not give up

Your warmth and sweet words
Restored me back to life
You are as gentle as a dove
You are as caring as an angel
You are as bold as a lion

They said human beings are not perfect
I'm afraid ma,you are virtually perfect
I cant pin-point your shortcomings
Do you even have one?
You are the best thing,MOTHER

I couldn't skip this. Can't fault it either. Nice.

Zikdik:

Oh dear..how do I say this without sounding like a dead, broken bell? Still looks like a personal message than poetry. It's got intensity, personification somewhat. Still too short and not poetic enough.

Ok,i will take note..THANKS