bibijay123:


Lol who EPP me to see veekid? thank u bro for the encouragement.

veekid:
Just seeing the new episode; what a critical suspense ...... some folks here will soon develop HBP cos of this Maggie

Olabantu:

I think I can see everything turning out to be her fault and she is gonna be the bad one after all

toboski1:


if no be Maggie na Kelvin papa hin go be

iberibe1:


maggie was just cut in the web, she knows nothing about the whole issue, while kelvin's father, though was promiscuous and paid the consequences of his action. but something is telling me that Tosin's father is a bad man, somebody who sent his own son out of his house saying he is dining with his enemies that he wouldn't want to be killed in his sleep. shola's involvment with drug pedlars is not also a coincident.

veekid:

Let's wait and see as the creator of their destiny decides

Olabantu:

Na true you talk ooo because dis lady called Bibi ehn, she can twist anything anyhow

toboski1:


#word, now am reasoning in ur direction but don't you think an assassin is a professional sombori? he should be able to distinguish between his target and the bride's father na

toboski1:


#word, now am reasoning in ur direction but don't you think an assassin is a professional sombori? he should be able to distinguish between his target and the bride's father na

veekid:

Na so she dey twist my head for house o

theorbiters:
Okay bibijay123. So, first of all, I want to say thank you for dedicating an update to me, it was nice of you, I do appreciate it and I am sorry I didn't acknowledge it earlier. Now just like the rest of the bandwagon, lemme, say congratulations on your story, it is nice and entertaining,. Now while I commend your efforts on this piece, permit me to say that next time before you post an update, proofread it first to check against errors. I know you want to satisfy the insatiable hunger of ur readers (myself included), I will advise that you should just take ur time.

Now, I really commend your efforts for building the background of each main players, it is really nice, but I have one thing to say. As you build each player's background to explain why they act the way they do, be careful where you insert those flashbacks, because at some point, they reduce the excitement that has already been built up and the anticipation for the next twist. Maybe I am the only one, but I just skip those flashbacks and go to the main story so that whatever excitement I had built up will not just fall. It is like taking me to a hill top and then dropping me from there. It takes efforts again to have that excitement come back.

What I am saying is that, let the flashbacks of an individual give a ground reflection of that individual present action, it should give a reason why that individual is taking an action at the moment. Your flashbacks are okay, but they should not come in between another player's moment, it throws your reader off for a while (maybe I am the only one).

One more thing, I think you should would on the title and your story, because it is only remotely close to the content.

Now let me shut up because I didn't even know what I am saying.

Nice story. You are talented.

bibijay123:


Thank you, I like your suggestion and I will work on it this way henceforth. I also think that it wld make for an easy comprehension. As for the typos, i try but sometimes i get lazy n push send sorry abt that. Will wrk on it. I have had it in mind long ago to change the title becos the content developed a mind of its own but i am yet to do so becos i don't know what to replace it with. I also wanted to change the synopsis too. Any suggestion on the title?

Brytawon:





Bro if I'm not mistaken, Bibi made mention of how Linda was observing the assassin on their first arrival for the wedding and how she noticed the suspect pointing the gun at Tosin's direction. I think that shot was a missed target.

I stand to be corrected tho.

Aitee1:



Lazy like our Tomi

bibijay123:

You are correct

Justicextian:
Bibi, I don't know how to make you understand that am really SORRY for my late acknowledgement of the dedication. Its not in my nature to be ungrateful, just that I ran out of mb. I wish to say a very Big THANK YOU for making my birthday memorable. Hope you've forgiven me. Am so so sorry and Thanks once again for the dedication. Am becoming your all time fan. Bibi, all the way...

Brytawon:





It seems I'm an attentive students.

bibijay123:

Yea you are

Brytawon:




Please what RAM are you using on this story coz it's very high?

bibijay123:



Lol its SRAM

Brytawon:





Bro if I'm not mistaken, Bibi made mention of how Linda was observing the assassin on their first arrival for the wedding and how she noticed the suspect pointing the gun at Tosin's direction. I think that shot was a missed target.

I stand to be corrected tho.

toboski1:

I concur

Brytawon:

You better if not you for lose.

bibijay123:



Lol no like u

Brytawon:




Lolz....
Let's play a game.
If you can correctly tell me the day and month of my birthday, I'll admit defeat and reward you with an all expenses paid vacation to the moon with Veekid.
I wish you goodluck.