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Re: Poetic Heart by Kusibe77(m): 4:36pm On Aug 16, 2017 |
Debbietiyan:Alright, keep em coming, more growth to your creativity |
Re: Poetic Heart by Debbietiyan(f): 5:27pm On Aug 16, 2017 |
Kusibe77: Thanks a lot Kusibe77. For being my first critic, if this ever gets published, you'd be the first to get a copy ![]() 1 Like |
Re: Poetic Heart by moseph(f): 6:55pm On Aug 16, 2017 |
Very interesting.keep up the goodwork.I want to invite:tiffanyj,bibijay123,chumzypinky,audreytimms,d9ty7,larrysun,flakkydagirl,leigh,hassan85,kingphilip,bumsiee,mikedimeji,heemah and a host of others i didnt mention to come and read this story. 1 Like |
Re: Poetic Heart by Kusibe77(m): 7:16pm On Aug 16, 2017 |
Debbietiyan: I'm humbled ma'am — smiling warmly. Thanks 1 Like |
Re: Poetic Heart by kerenjay(f): 12:16pm On Aug 17, 2017 |
very nice story, but once per week ![]() |
Re: Poetic Heart by kerenjay(f): 12:21pm On Aug 17, 2017 |
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Re: Poetic Heart by kerenjay(f): 12:24pm On Aug 17, 2017 |
yewande1234, Kimberlywest, kimkardashian, Angelsss, pamelB, rapmike, safarigirl, blair01, Penshalom, marianneada, cbella, fiyah, lavendie 1 Like 2 Shares |
Re: Poetic Heart by illicit(m): 2:43pm On Aug 17, 2017 |
kerenjay:thanks for the mention am here now nice one debbietiyan |
Re: Poetic Heart by Debbietiyan(f): 6:16pm On Aug 17, 2017 |
Re: Poetic Heart by GentlePirot: 6:09pm On Aug 18, 2017 |
Debbietiyan: Thanks for the mention. Let me digest it and offer my thoughts.. 1 Like |
Re: Poetic Heart by jupitre(m): 11:16am On Aug 19, 2017 |
Nice stuff mam...waiting for the next update 1 Like |
Re: Poetic Heart by cbella(f): 11:49am On Aug 19, 2017 |
kerenjay: Thanks for the mention. I am following now steadily 1 Like |
Re: Poetic Heart by rapmike(m): 8:03pm On Aug 19, 2017 |
[quote author=Debbietiyan post=59570723][/quote] I have just read through your work and its quite good, save for the one mistake I spotted. I will try and bring that mistake up. It takes nothing away from how good this has been so far. Larrysun, I mention you. |
Re: Poetic Heart by rapmike(m): 8:04pm On Aug 19, 2017 |
kerenjay:I have choke head here. |
Re: Poetic Heart by Debbietiyan(f): 12:42am On Aug 20, 2017 |
rapmike: Thank you ![]() |
Re: Poetic Heart by azeezat22(f): 12:33pm On Aug 20, 2017 |
nice story keep up the good work 1 Like |
Re: Poetic Heart by silentrock(m): 3:31pm On Aug 20, 2017 |
you're a good writer. well done. 1 Like |
Re: Poetic Heart by Debbietiyan(f): 6:52pm On Aug 20, 2017 |
Re: Poetic Heart by oluwafemi1993: 10:43pm On Aug 21, 2017 |
Following.... Nice write up ma 1 Like |
Re: Poetic Heart by cbella(f): 8:24am On Aug 23, 2017 |
I am not too late I guess |
Re: Poetic Heart by Debbietiyan(f): 8:42am On Aug 23, 2017 |
Re: Poetic Heart by Debbietiyan(f): 8:44am On Aug 23, 2017 |
Sophia walks into the room moments later and tries to shake me up. I have taken a quick shower and I am currently going through my notes (at least that’s what it looks like). She hobbles beside me and says. “You should see how swollen you look.” I keep a straight face and feign to be so engrossed in the materials. She seems to have guessed the cause my sour mood, so she blurts out. “I was just trying to pull your legs. He didn't say anything about you.” If Sophia had struck me with the remote control in her hand, it would have been less painful than the words she just spurted. I glare at her and she has no idea how much she has just worsened the situation. I turn to my side without saying another word to her, reach for ear piece by the bed side drawer, then I head to the kitchen to scavenge the freezer. I don’t bother checking the pots because Sophia is around, and even if by some stroke of luck something edible is actually in it. I wouldn't want to risk Colitis. I keep ignoring her for the rest of the evening. Mom notices during dinner. When Sophia, for the tenth time asks me to pass the water jar. How annoying can she get? Mom tries to intrude. “I know you’re not deaf Anita.” she says, and I ignore her too. I’d try to make her punishment less severe by ignoring her until night’s prayer. Sophia’s is indefinite. I know it’s petty, but that’s what she gets for trying to raise my blood pressure. |
Re: Poetic Heart by Debbietiyan(f): 8:46am On Aug 23, 2017 |
The next day at work, I meet a giddy Chinonso; she’s the receptionist on duty today, she says a hearty good morning and I ditto in reply. She pushes a note to the edge of the table and winks as I pick it up. “Mr. Denola dropped a message for you.” She says the instant my index finger touches it and at the mention of his name, my heart misses a beat. Telltale signs of probable admiration for pretty boy. I could deny it to Sophia and anyone else, but I am not one to delude myself. Which is quite annoying. Because all the guys I have known were always the one to initiate interest. And I’d, given by a certain probability decide whether or not to: 1. Indulge him of a possibility, or 2. Ignore him until he gets the picture of my overt refusal. I stare at the note in my hand, while trying to keep my expression neutral. “Is there a problem?” I ask, and she plunges the tip of pen into her sponge-like synthetic hair, smiling wilding she replies, “Why don’t you open it first.” Pretending not the notice the brown mote wedged between the lighter shaded brown of her bucktooth, I flip the thin folder paper in my hand, certain that grin etched on her first has everything to do with the fact that she already knows the content of the letter – it’s not really a letter; seven words meticulously written in block letters. Please See Me Before You Leave Today. 1 Like |
Re: Poetic Heart by Debbietiyan(f): 8:53am On Aug 23, 2017 |
The day progresses as fast as a racing turtle. And for the umpteenth time, I catch my phalanges sneaking into the recess of my black bag, reaching to feel the realness of the letter. It’s real alright, but that doesn’t mean it makes any sense. Why would he want to see me? Maybe I should just ask Sophia. Maybe I should just text her right now. I lift my phone to my face and fling it back once I locate the Inbox app; whatever I do now would just end up putting silly ideas into her head. So maybe Sophia was right when she said I was being overly dramatic. But in my defense, I have never been on the giving end before. It was the same with David, Augustine, Prince, Oscar, Chisom, Chris, Andrew, Tochukwu, Micheal, Joshua, Jemini, Justin, Tony, Ayodeji. Yes, I’m exaggerating. Half of the names listed above were just guys I once had a crush on; most are first names of celebrities I crushed on as a teen (logical crushes). Some are names of acquaintances and male friends who tried to catch feels. The rest are my exes. Notably, three in all. Tochukwu being the most recent. My last relationship ended barely a month after it had begun. It was hardly any fault of mine. Tochukwu had the worst case of roving eyes I had ever seen or even heard of. He was as quirky as he was handsome. The only reason I dated him, was the quality of genes I felt would be passed down to my – our children if we eventually got married. We met at a friend’s party. He happened to be the emcee of the event and I remember vividly, been drawn to his languid mannerism. I, however, didn’t throw pathetic glances and inane smiles as did my obnoxious female counterparts. He walked up to me after the party and we got talking, turned out he was the first cousin of my friend. Although I’m leery of giving out my numbers to guys I meet at parties and clubs – sly, smooth-talking devilish ones most especially. I bent my rules a little and gave my number (main line) to him, my silly justifying reason then, being…he was related to a good friend and was therefore not a total stranger. Each morning after that, I awoke to the gentle buzzing of my phone. He sent me beautiful albeit Google-lifted messages. I chose to forgive his tactlessness and appreciate the gesture. The latter was quite difficult. I couldn’t help but imagine how many millions of ladies, myself included, having the same professed message sitting in our various inboxes. Some inexperienced ones, actually believing it. Resignedly, I chose to ignore them. Not everyone could be as poetically gifted as my second boyfriend Chisom. Although, I never believed a word he said. That was mostly due to his dire habit of speaking in rhetoric. Chisom was the first guy I really liked (he was also my first). He had the warmest smile and was undoubtedly too soft. That alone caused major issues between us. He was a History and International relations student (He graduated last year) and given his looks, was always swarmed by pesky females. His problem though was he could never say no to them. We definitely had chemistry. No doubts. But like all deluded poets...he imagined a world where every problem could be fixed with flowers and kisses...No kidding. He is still the sweetest guy I have ever met. We had a consensual breakup but we still keep in touch once in a while. 2 Likes |
Re: Poetic Heart by Debbietiyan(f): 9:04am On Aug 23, 2017 |
I'm so sorry for the length of this week's update. My week was messed up. Although the above is subject to change (I was half asleep while I wrote it this morning), I just decided to drop it anyway. Thanks for stopping by. |
Re: Poetic Heart by OluwabuqqyYOLO(m): 9:10am On Aug 23, 2017 |
Welldone. Keep up the updates! The third update is merely a lift from one of the early episodes though. |
Re: Poetic Heart by princemozyk(m): 11:23am On Aug 23, 2017 |
Keep the fire burning....I am here to stay...updates needed.... Nice flow you got..... ![]() |
Re: Poetic Heart by Debbietiyan(f): 11:53am On Aug 23, 2017 |
princemozyk:Welcome ![]() |
Re: Poetic Heart by Debbietiyan(f): 11:55am On Aug 23, 2017 |
OluwabuqqyYOLO: Yes, it is. I meant it as an excerpt in the beginning. Just thought to incorporate it into the story now. Thanks dear. |
Re: Poetic Heart by yewande1234(f): 11:57am On Aug 23, 2017 |
Nice one ma'am, dis story is so funny dat i cant even stop laughing wen ever i remember d part Sophia cooked. Anyways nice update keep it flowing 1 Like |
Re: Poetic Heart by oluwafemi1993: 3:06pm On Aug 26, 2017 |
Oh sweet chisom 1 Like |
Re: Poetic Heart by princemozyk(m): 8:01am On Aug 28, 2017 |
Update |
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