extremelygolden:
This story can not end ooo. End ke?


So after passing out, the fat guy decided that he cannot let Mike die. He placed an urgent call to his gang's private doctor. Thank God he was able to revive Mike after series of surgery to extract the bullets.

Phila is now agitated wondering where on earth Mike has gone to and while his number is not connecting. Jaz and Sly needed to see Frozen urgently because there's a package to deliver first thing tomorrow morning.

Esther has gotten to Frozen's house but was told he left home five days ago and couldn't be reached via the phone. Everyone thought he probably has absconded from duty, but Esther is sure that Frozen is not the type to quit so easily.

Meanwhile, Phila is confused and feels that should anything happen to Mike, she might be held responsible. Esther on her own was wondering who Phila is, but that's a matter for another time. The most important thing now is finding out where the hell Frozen has gone to.

Mike woke up in a strange room. He couldn't remember how he got there, but his recovery is even faster than both the fat guy and the doctor anticipated....

Topher052, see now, this story never finish nah. Mike's son cannot be orphaned nah. Mike needs to visit Nigeria even once to flaunt his new acquired wealth, etc.

Thank you very much for keeping me glued to Nairaland these months with your amazing story. You are indeed a great writer. Kudos.

ugnoble:
Honestly I think Topher052 rushed this story courtesy of those who have been requesting for an end. There are many twist to add to the story but some people just wouldn't allow him. Oya make una chop end now. Topher052 Abeg this story must continue ooo. I no gree at all. Interesting story though, thumbs up.

wonderjewel:
Guys please let's turn up for topher052 by voting massively for him in the ongoing Nairaland literature contest.He has been nominated for the grand seat category. Let's show him love by voting for him.He truly deserves to win.

wonderjewel:
Guys please let's turn up for topher052 by voting massively for him in the ongoing Nairaland literature contest.He has been nominated for the grand seat category. Let's show him love by voting for him.He truly deserves to win.

topher052:
Please on Nairaland?

Amb25:


yes on Nairaland it's closing on the 28th of may. pls vote for Topher052.

Osaib:


Please how do I vote? The guy is really great and his story superp.

Osaib:


Please how do I vote? The guy is really great and his story superp.

metalgear11:
I applaud you for the efforts you made in your story. However, I feel you kinda rushed the conclusion. I had this "unfinished, rushed" and sort of unsatisfying feeling about the end. Like you didn't know the best way to end it properly. To me, it felt like a meal you've been savoring, enjoying the taste, but along the line you begin to lose interest in the meal, then when you are beginning to enjoy it again, your plate is taken away.

I figured out Mike was gonna die at some point. The build up was sort of abrupt to be honest. What then happened to others? how did they react? How about those he left behind at home? I assume he was killed in a totally different country from where he had his base with Sly and Jaz. The hired assassins didn't know him from Adam. How would you have then "gathered every detail from friends and family, every one he ever met during his life time"? And what happened to his and Amaka's child? These are but some questions that were left hanging and left me with my conclusions.

I believe you might have run out of ideas on how to end the story, and i honestly feel it dragged on for too long, especially with the repetitive plots but different characters, but that doesn't take away the fact that you came up with a good story. You just need a bit of improvements here and there.

franksunny:
I give the honor of commenting on this thread for the first time, but I don't agree with you on your assertion. Still no time for me to express myself, no vex for me

Tosinex:
Wooooowww this is wonderful!
You are such a great writer Topher.
I really enjoyed this piece, this is the first adventure piece I'll sit myself to read through, if it is not ghost or intra-universe stories then it's nothing but this hooked me. Thumbs up Bro.

I can see so many agitations on why you concluded the story like that, but seriously that's what a good writer does, you have to leave us hanging, in suspense hoping and curious for what to come and then you hit the jinx and make us go haywire lolz that's how it's been done, thanks. More ink to your pen.

And the moral lesson to learn is of great impact, you've told us why we young men shouldn't engage in indiscriminate sex, sex with anything putting on skirt, I love that too, God bless you and stay great!

topher052:
follow me, and join in the new season

Kaodek:


Link pls?

tcharrisson:
Please can anyone direct me to the start of the story. My madam and I. I only read the continuation

topher052:
fOLLOW: THE DEVILS TOUCH

Goddeywithme:


Topher, u are a good writer. You are up there with Chinua Achebe and Chimamanda Ngozi Adichie. I hope u have plans to write a full novel which u will publish. U are really good.

Pls, while I enjoyed the free entertainment of My Madam and I, while I appreciate that some guys here gave u something, I encourage u to publish. Consider all avenues through which u can achieve ur aim. Consider ebooks. But u would have to develop a story line to be big enough to be a novel. U will make it man. U will be big like Adichie and Achebe and other big Nigerian writers. God bless

topher052:


I'm blushing boss. Thanks so much. Im trying to get there by Gods grace. Please follow the sacrifice, chapter 35 now.