Crazeworld:


In my opinion, this is straight to the point


I like your copy but I feel it can be better if you synergize the story more with your objective (CTA). The transitioning to PURPOSE of writing lowered the keen attention I gave the story from the beginning.

Why put Call-To-Action as PSS? I believe that's what your copy is all about - COPYWRITING MASTERY

I would put mine this way:



And the closing



Editing it on a grammarly premium account will give you better suggestions on the grammar construction and word placement..


We go make am if we no relent!

Thanks man.

We are still learning the ropes.

I guess I need to put in the work, spend time writing more copies.

Make mistake learn from it, make another, learn from it..

Need to get grammarly ASAP.


Happy have grasp the concept of linking a story to a desired CTA.

Welcome back boss. This is very helpful. Thank you

Venzal:
I pictured you doing the emboldened in my head. Nice use of sensory words.

To answer your question...

Using American or British English depends on the client you are writing for.

An American client will definitely want you to write in American English.

And the same goes for a British client.

For every other country, I go American.

For those not sure about the differences between these two styles of English, this is another place where Grammarly can help.

When I have to write in American English, I simply change the setting to AE. And vice versa.

My goal is master these email copywriting skill and become a - Anthony Joshua!

Yes, become a champ!

These skill is a door to other doors.

You can build other businesses with it.

Venzal:


MAN, this is brilliant!

The subject line is a killer.

That is going to arouse a ton of curiosity. And in writing emails, your ability to sprinkle in a heavy dose of curiosity will help a lot.

You did it again at the end of the copy by teasing them about a secret without giving full details.

You have kind of caused an itch that they'd be naturally inclined to 'scratch'. And the only way to do that is to click on the damned link. That's why curiosity is powerful.

I have a little correction, though...

The TURN was too sharp. It'd throw a lot of people off.

What I am talking about is the part where you went "you don't want this for yourself?"

The transition, in my opinion, was too sudden.

You could have fed them a lot more details to ramp up desire before asking:

How would you want this for yourself?

Overall, you did amazing.

By the way, your moniker sounds like you're into PUA stuff. If I am correct, kindly shoot me a mail. We could work on something together.

Alright. Thanks bro, I'll work on it.
And I'll send u an email right away

Venzal:
Good evening everyone…
I just got freed from NL jail.

It’s sad that despite reaching out to the mods in charge of this section, they allowed what was overzealousness from aunty spam bot run its full course.

Yesterday was supposed to be a day for question and answer time.

I will dive into my mentions now and start to answer questions one after the other.

Thanks to all those who have contributed their quota.

Thanks also to the man who dropped a coupon code here. This is my first time of hearing Upwork uses coupons.

Also, I see many dropping emails they have written and want them to be critiqued… I’ll give those my attention too.

I am not really an expert at critiquing copy yet, but I will try.

Now…

I’ve got a few QUESTIONS that require your feedback.

1 What is the ONE thing holding you back from starting right now?

2 What exactly is it that you are still confused about?

3 What would you want me to CLARIFY more before you’d be confident to take action?

Answer them honestly, please.

I want to know what to cover next – alongside every other thing I have scheduled – to help bring you up to speed as quickly as humanly possible. Go on, I will be waiting.

1). I plan on taking my time to learn well..not a fast learner like the gurus here

2)..I dnt think have done anything like comprehensive writing since when I left secondary..but with what you have explained I was a able grab that it is not necessary am a good writer to be good at copywriting...will put my efforts into this.

3) ..how to easily blend the aspect of story telling an that of take a action in the email..


Thanks for sharing your knowledge with us.

OYENIYIJK:

bro abeg you remember Airtel YouTube night sub code? abeg I need the code

*312#

Crazeworld:
ZEIBNGLA

bro thanks, help me understand... I opened my zenith Bank account in Taraba state back then, now I'm in Edo state... I guess the branch doesn't matter. As that swift code covers for all Zenith banks.

The swift code you typed there is for Lagos State only...

Millennialaku:
*312#

thanks bro

Venzal:
Good evening everyone…
I just got freed from NL jail.

It’s sad that despite reaching out to the mods in charge of this section, they allowed what was overzealousness from aunty spam bot run its full course.

Yesterday was supposed to be a day for question and answer time.

I will dive into my mentions now and start to answer questions one after the other.

Thanks to all those who have contributed their quota.

Thanks also to the man who dropped a coupon code here. This is my first time of hearing Upwork uses coupons.

Also, I see many dropping emails they have written and want them to be critiqued… I’ll give those my attention too.

I am not really an expert at critiquing copy yet, but I will try.

Now…

I’ve got a few QUESTIONS that require your feedback.

1 What is the ONE thing holding you back from starting right now?

2 What exactly is it that you are still confused about?

3 What would you want me to CLARIFY more before you’d be confident to take action?

Answer them honestly, please.

I want to know what to cover next – alongside every other thing I have scheduled – to help bring you up to speed as quickly as humanly possible. Go on, I will be waiting.

Good day Mr Venza, I really appreciate what you are doing. i mean is only someone with a heart of gold, that can do what u are doing here.
just curious, Can someone use smartphone to start this email copywriting?
for now am still gathering resources, to get myself laptop. and that's what is holding me back.

you all should check this out. I think it will be of help

https:// carminemastropierro.com/wp-content/uploads/2019/11/Effective-Copywriting-Blueprint.pdf

remove the space, I dont want aunty spam bot to visit me

Crazeworld:
I can't find the guy I bought it from again but here is another link https://ebay. to/2Azt3XK

Remove space before "to"

Yes, you can use grammarly on phone once you set your browser to desktop mode.

Cc shaykum


Graxie you can mail me on domaingeekz at gmail dot com

I just bought it now, though I am yet to receive the login details but ebay emailed me that my transaction is successful. just waiting for the premium details

@ venzal

What holding me back is:

My copy is really not great yet, I dropped one yesterday and my flaws was pointed out. Am grateful it was criticize and thankful to the- CRITIQUE!


Lots of grammatical errors...Need to get the grammarly account.


Have gotten the hang of things in the aspect of the discipline of an email copywriter, but still need to dive in deep.

Need to get template and format of a product launch sequence, autoresponder email campaign and email sequence.


Also need swipe files on real copy that has been written

Thank you Mr Venzal, what are doing here deserve a national honor because you are changing our narrative in your own, our youth have to be enlightened on how to leverage on the opportunities provided by the internet to make a living legally. Once again I say thank you very much.

emperorsversion:


bro thanks, help me understand... I opened my zenith Bank account in Taraba state back then, now I'm in Edo state... I guess the branch doesn't matter. As that swift code covers for all Zenith banks.

The swift code you typed there is for Lagos State only...

Edit your account to Lekki or festac Lagos state...problem solved.

I can't find email copywriting on upwork, I dont know whether I am the only one facing that issue

@adsmaster
Go to swiped.co
Click on control
And pick

emperorsversion:


bro thanks, help me understand... I opened my zenith Bank account in Taraba state back then, now I'm in Edo state... I guess the branch doesn't matter. As that swift code covers for all Zenith banks.

The swift code you typed there is for Lagos State only...

Swift is for international transactions and banks have only one. So go ahead brother, it's the same

shakyum:


I just bought it now, though I am yet to receive the login details but ebay emailed me that my transaction is successful. just waiting for the premium details

You'll get a response from the seller today or tomorrow.

Good Afternoon everyone,I opened a upwork account 2 weeks ago and it was approved but the issue now is that I’ve not gotten any order since then ,I’ve used all my connect to bid for project but still not getting anything ����
Please help a sister
Also I’ve a fiverr account ,but I’ve only gotten 2 order this year
Incase you’ve any idea on what to do please send a dm on WhatsApp 08168829780
Thank you in anticipation ������

subject: VENZAL'S second (and last) chance.

Hi Venzal.

Congratulations on your bold step to counting in six figures, you are on the right path.

Tell you what? I am going to help you gain clarity and insight on making mind-boggling sales in just a few lines of copy.

But before that, here's something that could help you focus, how a brand's sales-turn-up almost burst at the seams from ZERO sales.

The 'Doris's Cosmetic Enterprise' suffered lots of setbacks.

In her own words...

"My brand has a credible and powerful range of services we offered from makeovers, hair styling, to decorations, gele-tying but still, sales turn up was on the low.

We had the technicality, the products and all but still needed that 'midas touch' on our copies.

That was until I read an eBook on MY_SECRET_TO_COPYWRITING [LINK] which made me understand what I've been doing wrong...

This book helped me expedite sales in almost 200% coupled with the mentorship program i enrolled where fast tracking tips and templates were dished and served to us regularly. It was worth every penny I spent."

You, Venzal, are in luck, as we are giving a 43% discount on this goldmine MY_SECRET_TO_COPYWRITING [LINK].

This offer would come to an end two days from now and I wouldn't like you to miss out on this. You don't get such offers every time at the price its currently selling for.

The book is detailed with A.I.D.A, K.I.S.S, P.A.S.O formats of writing copies that have high conversion rates and lots more...

In any case, you might have wondered how to get enrolled in the mentorship program, or not...

Here is the link anyway, just in case you change your mind. [LINK]

Talk to you soon, Venzal.

Anchex

I've been following and jotting stuffs down but NEPA (abi PHCN) has not really smiled on us in two weeks. What do we think of this copy.

PS: I just stated writing down emails from Ben and John and i hope to be really good at this. My phone could use a change (tecno w2 since 2016) loool.

adsmaster:
@ venzal

What holding me back is:

My copy is really not great yet, I dropped one yesterday and my flaws was pointed out. Am grateful it was criticize and thankful to the- CRITIQUE!


Lots of grammatical errors...Need to get the grammarly account.


Have gotten the hang of things in the aspect of the discipline of an email copywriter, but still need to dive in deep.

Need to get template and format of a product launch sequence, autoresponder email campaign and email sequence.


Also need swipe files on real copy that has been written

We're on dsame page, but I think @venzal did justice to the autoreponder email campaign and email sequence with 50 emails samples he drop in his previous post you should check it out

shakyum:
you all should check this out. I think it will be of help

https:// carminemastropierro.com/wp-content/uploads/2019/11/Effective-Copywriting-Blueprint.pdf

remove the space, I dont want aunty spam bot to visit me

Thanks bro

A video that gives you a little insight into what interviews look like on Upwork... and the RIGHT way to handle them.

Plus, you will see a little goof I made that you should avoid as much as possible.

P.S. Kindly overlook all errors. I didn't have the time to edit.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RP78bX23rNM

Crazeworld:
Swift is for international transactions and banks have only one. So go ahead brother, it's the same

Thanks

Crazeworld:
Swift is for international transactions and banks have only one. So go ahead brother, it's the same

Thanks bro, lastly the phone number format in the getting paid column is giving me issues... how did you bypass that please ?

Can you please help me with the writeup in the notepad, it turns blurry when I screenshot and zoom in, I just can't decipher it, I am actually using a phone, probably you guys that succeeded used laptop..for now my lappy is faulty. If you are willing let me know so I forward my email to you.

SuleimanKano:
What I'd was to pause the video and make relevant jotting on the notepad. In return, you'll be following your jotting to create a profile on WeB Dev niche when approved which you'll later re~edit to create your email copywriting profile. I hope this helps. Cheers

Revealed: 4 Steps to Making Your First Million ( No one Thinks About No 3)

Hey Venzal,
Did u know that in the next five years,you will be the same person you are except the books you read or the people you meet? - Charles Jones.

Well, I wouldn't want you to be the same person because we need change to evolve so I've decided to share a lesson from one of the books I've read and I would like you to read it too.

But,before I do,
I would like to share a story with you.

I stumbled upon a book which has enjoyed the coziness of my library for too long and hadn't served it's purpose.

I decided to feast on it's knowledge and share part as dessert.

Have you every heard of the millionaire equation?

Don't fret,we aren't going to solve math�.

Well,it's a linear equation which goes thus;

A dream+ A team + A theme= Millionaire Streams.

Complicated?

I'll explain...

1) A dream: This simply means having a vision of what you want. In this case,it's to be a millionaire. Attached to having dreams should be a burning desire and positive mindset.

2) A team: A popular saying goes thus " two heads are better than one". You need to be surrounded by like minds who will fast-track the process of achieving your goals.

3)Theme: Having a millionaire model to follow will give u inspiration to succeed.

Easy in'nit?

Now, let's get to the meat and potatoes of this email.

THE STEPS TO MAKE YOUR FIRST MILLION.

1)Decide it's okay for you to become a millionaire.

Don't join the bandwagon of those who foolishly program their minds into thinking that being wealthy is an abominable act. Think of ways to create wealth that support your beliefs and values.

2) Constantly paint the picture of wealth in your mind: Most millionaires firstly, believe it ,then they see it. Even the Holy Book acknowledges this.

3) Spend less than you earn: A simple way to do this is by budgeting. Pay yourself first. Always deduct 10% off your income for savings. Do this consistently to see results.

4) Investment is the difference: When you constantly invest,you create a second stream of income which will augument whatever you're earning.


I know you've learnt something.
I have too.

Anticipate my next email. I'll be sharing a new secret to a few people.

Talk to you soon.

Here's the link to the book if you'd like to have the main dish.

[ Link ]



How'd i do?

Cc: everyone

congratulations to everyone who used the coupon I dropped yesterday... You're welcome all.

Tannycouture:
Good Afternoon everyone,I opened a upwork account 2 weeks ago and it was approved but the issue now is that I’ve not gotten any order since then ,I’ve used all my connect to bid for project but still not getting anything ����
Please help a sister
Also I’ve a fiverr account ,but I’ve only gotten 2 order this year
Incase you’ve any idea on what to do please send a dm on WhatsApp
Thank you in anticipation ������

Read a few pages back... there are some information that will help you.



To everyone:- it cannot be overemphasized the need for a well written cover letter.

"https: // ebizfacts . com/ upwork-cover-letter /#1"
check out the above site in quote, there are a few cover letter samples there, just copy and paste but remove the space.


check "freelancetowin . com" also, it has useful information.




I hope not to get banned with that, I just can't use any other way.

Do they also accept voters card as a means of identification, cos that's all I have at moment.

Venzal:
I think so. My friend used that to verify his account last year

TommyAnthem:
Do they also accept voters card as a means of identification, cos that's all I have at moment.

yes, voter's card is very much accepted.

Venzal:
A video that gives you a little insight into what interviews look like on Upwork... and the RIGHT way to handle them.

Plus, you will see a little goof I made that you should avoid as much as possible.

P.S. Kindly overlook all errors. I didn't have the time to edit.


https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RP78bX23rNM

Thanks for this Boss Venzal,I hope the deal goes well

shakyum:
you all should check this out. I think it will be of help

https:// carminemastropierro.com/wp-content/uploads/2019/11/Effective-Copywriting-Blueprint.pdf

remove the space, I dont want aunty spam bot to visit me

Fantabulous,
Thanks for this