whut i want??

im not in any race to see who can write better

abeg u pple dont start anything here o

angel_empy:

gamine, isnt that what u want?
i posted a chapter of my book on slitty's thread.please read it and tell me what u think

you are nasty,
trying to getting people at loggerheads so that you can be accepted?

common, how old are you?

no hard feelings, but piece of advise no body gets accepted that way.

cheers

16. small girl!

here's a story of mine i wish to post for all to see.

timi sat a chair in the kitchen. she was in the house of her employers. mrs savage had employed her a few months ago to work as the cook. she loved the job because it gave her a go at her catering skills.she loved to thrill her employer and her guests with nice cuisines.
a typical day at work starts with preparing breakfast at six. Mrs savage loved meals like tea and bread(without butter); eggs and fries; bread and eggs.timi would be engrossed in getting breakfast ready. by seven, breakfast will be laid out on the table. the naive 19year old would hide behind the adjourning door from the sitting room to the dining.she stayed there to observe her employer' sreaction to themeal.
mrs savage who was also a core banker made it a point of duty to request for her favourites for dinner.
life in the large mansion wsa wonderful. the job also exposed timi to lots off people.
"timi, is dinner not ready yet?"
she heard mrs savage shout from across the sitting room
timi rushed into the sitting room.
"its almost raedy ma!" timi replied
mrs savage looked timi over as she left the sitiing room.
that day after mrs savage had finished her dinner, she informed her cook that her only son-dave would return home from the states the next day.timi found it unnecesary for mrs savage to inform her of her son's arrival.
timi wasnt at all expecting any thing diferent in the running of the home.but she was met with surprise the next day when a blue escalade pulled into the compound.
all the househole staff except timi came out to see the new arriver.
the gatemen put on phoney smiles as they welcomed young mr savage. from where timi stood beside the window in the boys quaters, she could see taht mrs savage's son was extremely goodlooking. he had this sort of looks possesed by movie stars. she saw him smile at the house hold staff.
after more tahn ten minutes of exxhanging banthers, he walked into the house.
***
"i'm terribly hungry nana." dave said to his nanny.
"my dear, let me get the cook. she'll certainly get u something good to eat."
that said, the woamn who doubled as the house keeper and the former nanny of dave savage went to the boys quarters in search of timi. she found her huddled on her ned intently studying a book.
"timi, the madam's son wants you to prepare him something to eat."
timi quickly left the sitting room and followed aunty onome into the main house.she greeted dave as she entered the room.
"you dont work for my mother, do you?"dave said pacing the room.
"ehm, yes, i do. i am te new cook."
"i saw everyone welcome me when i arrived.how come you stayed away?"
timi searched her mind for a good answer. none came to her mind.
"dont mind the lousy girl.she would certainly prefer reading to doing what others in this house do."aunty onome answered for her.
"oh!" dave noted. he thoroughly looked her over.
"what can i prepare for you?"timi asked averting her eyes from his.
he stood thoughtfully. aunty onome slipped out of the room;she had to oversee the arrangement of dave's luggages in his room.
timi stood where she was oblivious of dave's eyes.he saw. her flush and embarrsment. he enjoyed it.
"dave my dear, welcome back home." mrs savage's voice rang out.
dave lept for his mother and they hugged affectionately.that was timi's one chance of escape. she made good the chance.

@ angel_empy

what can i say, if you're this smooth at 16 you're quite obviously headed for greatness. But more importantly, what do you read?

because this sounds more like all those crappy M&B stuff. but then again am forgetting you're just 16. you're talented, but you need to read wider than all this romantic stuff.

angel_empy:

i have never read an M&B. i have read less than five hallequins. i am not into reading all those romance stuff.

good for you then. that stuff is poison.

slitty please can you complete your story i'am dying to finish it

Please do you know of any publisher that can bankrole the publishing of manuscripts?

Just read through your little excerpt.
Very interesting. A lot of people actually do read romance books even the "crappy M&B", so i think you're okay!
Great work and don't let the story die in you.