Yes...i knew it! I knew it was Daniel! Haha! I badt gan... *clapping for myself*

Really enjoying it. .daniel go start with hm own explanation...lwkmd.... This Lot na goat...lmao

Iaz93: Yes...i knew it! I knew it was Daniel! Haha! I badt gan... *clapping for myself*

You really deserve the applause, at least. What gave you the impression that it was Daniel who did it?

I knew it was Daniel who pulled the trigger but what I couldn't get straight were the mysteries surrounding the suitation.

'

' Lot noticed blood oozing from
the scratch marks on the police officer’s left wrist but he didn’t comment about it, it wasn’t any of his
business, he thought.' copied from ch 10. The moment I came across this, my instinct told me it was Daniel who committed the murder.

Adinije: ' Lot noticed blood oozing from
the scratch marks on the police officer’s left wrist but he didn’t comment about it, it wasn’t any of his
business, he thought.' copied from ch 10. The moment I came across this, my instinct told me it was Daniel who committed the murder.

You're so very shrewd. Do you have any theory about the motive behind Daniel's action?

Larry-Sun:


You really deserve the applause, at least. What gave you the impression that it was Daniel who did it?

meHn...i just had that feeling that he was the one, after chapter 10, where Lot saw scratch marks on his arm

Iaz93:
meHn...i just had that feeling that he was the one, after chapter 10, where Lot saw scratch marks on his arm

It's a pity that Lot wasn't as clever. If it were you, I know you'd have found out the reason behind the bruises.

Larry-Sun:


It's a pity that Lot wasn't as clever. If it were you, I know you'd have found out the reason behind the bruises.

LOL!! For sure na... I must ask questions oh

Thanks for the compliment. I am the most lazy reader in the world but this crime thriller has got me hooked. All I do is lurk around waiting for update. You are unarguably good. May your ink never run dry Amen.

As for the motive behind Daniel action, three possible motives are going up in my mind. Its either for the love he had for Abigail or someone paid him to kill mc or Mc have wronged him in the past and he decided to take his pound of flesh.

Adinije: Thanks for the compliment. I am the most lazy reader in the world but this crime thriller has got me hooked. All I do is lurk around waiting for update. You are unarguably good. May your ink never run dry Amen.

As for the motive behind Daniel action, three possible motives are going up in my mind. Its either for the love he had for Abigail or someone paid him to kill mc or Mc have wronged him in the past and he decided to take his pound of flesh.

Wow! I've said it before, and I'll say it again: YOU'RE VERY IMAGINATIVE! But the story did not really go in that direction.
My intention was to post the next chapter tomorrow, but I'll post it now because of you.
Thanks.

brokoto: ok. pls Daniel is innocent. I'm the one who killed Cain Martins

YOU LIE! ! I killed Cain Martins.

Larry-Sun:


Wow! I've said it before, and I'll say it again: YOU'RE VERY IMAGINATIVE! But the story did not really go in that direction.
My intention was to post the next chapter tomorrow, but I'll post it now because of you.
Thanks.

Thank you

What a twist .what a tale

IZUKWU: What a twist .what a tale

The story hasn't ended.

am really impressed, finally everyone was free, free from the devil, free from conscience.

Awww i love this. Richard is free and gets the girl . Everyone's finally able to let go of their guilt and find peace.

The story hasnt ended na....what of Richard and Abigail, won't they kiss?

Kudos Larrysun, you're doing a wonderful job. Writing is not an easy thing.

A few comments on chapter twenty-one:
I think the narrations of Kish and Richard are too long and smooth without interjections. I suggest you chip in reactions from their listeners every now and then. For example, when Richard mentioned how much he loves Abigail, she shifted uneasily in her seat/she looked up at him surprisingly... You know something like that. Let your readers feel the reactions of the other people in the living room. It will make it more real.

Again, Richard's narration is too comfortable and smooth for reality. He was not narrating like someone under tension. His speech was too smooth; giving details of time, professing undying love for Abigail, giving comparisons here and there and so on. I think you should inject some level of apprehension/nervousness in his narration.

And again, I expected that Hakeem would have been long dismissed. What's he still doing there listeneing to all the details. In a real life situation, I doubt if his presence would still be needed at that particular time.

Hope I make some sense to you.

Let me quickly go to chapter 22. This story is captivating!

Larry-Sun:


The story hasn't ended.

i know. the last part is where detective lot is arrested for masterminding everything. *just joking*

zayhal: Kudos Larrysun, you're doing a wonderful job. Writing is not an easy thing.

A few comments on chapter twenty-one:
I think the narrations of Kish and Richard are too long and smooth without interjections. I suggest you chip in reactions from their listeners every now and then. For example, when Richard mentioned how much he loves Abigail, she shifted uneasily in her seat/she looked up at him surprisingly... You know something like that. Let your readers feel the reactions of the other people in the living room. It will make it more real.

Again, Richard's narration is too comfortable and smooth for reality. He was not narrating like someone under tension. His speech was too smooth; giving details of time, professing undying love for Abigail, giving comparisons here and there and so on. I think you should inject some level of apprehension/nervousness in his narration.

And again, I expected that Hakeem would have been long dismissed. What's he still doing there listeneing to all the details. In a real life situation, I doubt if his presence would still be needed at that particular time.

Hope I make some sense to you.

Let me quickly go to chapter 22. This story is captivating!

Thank you, Zayhal, thanks so much. You're very right. You see, I wrote this script over two years ago. I've not really taken time to revisit the plottings and characterizations. I was busy writing another one. However, I shall do that asap. Thanks again. I wish to see more of your comments and observations.

brokoto: i know. the last part is where detective lot is arrested for masterminding everything. *just joking*

LOL! That would really spoil the story. A detective isn't supposed to be the criminal.

i was *just joking*

Larry-Sun:


LOL! That would really spoil the story. A detective isn't supposed to be the criminal.

but Daniel was a detective, no?

brokoto: i was *just joking* but Daniel was a detective, no?

Yes, Bro. I know you were joking.
Daniel wasn't a detective; he was an ordinary police-officer assisting a detective in the investigation.
And, he didn't commit a crime...he was only at the wrong place. May GOD protect us all. LOL!

Iaz93: The story hasnt ended na....what of Richard and Abigail, won't they kiss?

Iaz, they've kissed before, remember?

chaii...i am really enjoyin dis story.welldone larry

subscribing.

Larry-Sun:


Iaz, they've kissed before, remember?

yeah, but they need to kiss again

Larry-Sun you are good,very good!!!!!!!