...How many tyms wld u lie to me, do u luv me at'al? I use 2 mutter dat ,,, bt d hrt wan't what d hrt wants,, ,though i had ma pretends 2 mk, i neva knew she had her's as twice as i do, bt den it was durin a kul dark eve, dat was abt sme days ago', d sky was 2 shy 2 reveal ts face, d stars hiding distance behind it, d ppl we knw, wre al shiverin in d space btween dier blankets n beds, we wre alone, jst alone in d dark open street, amidst d lies, she never told' . My hrt made t in some happy strokes, maybe it went skiing, i culdn't help t lookin at hr beutiful beauties, hw was i seein hr tro dz unfrndly earth dark barrier?. . .i mean darkness shaaa,,, she didnt knw dat she was d only shining star dat dark night', so t wasn't dat had 2 spot a spotlight in d nyt, . . I in ma shiverin nerves manage 2 cross my arms acros hr snowin sholdrs, , hr shy face lifted 2wards myn, n dos eyes weren't only killin bt also made me 4get ma name, . . .ts tym 2 pay ur debt my thud rang high. . .ofcos t was a remindr da i'l b one kiss richer dat nyt,. , She did owe me a kiss, dat kiss, 4 probably along tym na since i once gave t 2 hr,. . . You'r stil owin me smethin, i manage 2 summit dat 2 her hear lobes, , wat? She asked, a kiss , stil she replied n al l cul said was yeap' 2 add 2 what did said.. I was finaly convinced dat she luv me much, nt jst as a frnd n brother as she's been lyin 2 me,. lol', bt as sme1 she'l nt want 2 live witout n i either. . .nxt i had started ma unsual physiological n anatomical vibrations already' . . .t was'nt ma usual logic though, . .
As den hr lips journey closer 2 myn, we weren't movin, i becme serious n curious wt an abt masef, am abt 2 cros a rubbicon oo, or hw z t calld, probably she fixd hr soft gentle 'tasty' lyte colourd dual lips in myn perfctly in d very right position which i can't xplain 2u na'. ..kul... Immediately, I was teleported 2 anoda planet net yet discoverd by science, . as she gave me dat killin kiss . Yeah, da kiss was simply amasing in ma simplest commentary hahaaa,,commentary?! t was quick, n aftr dat i wanted mre, so much mre, wen she drove dat hr chillin body 2 myn-dat was at ts boilin point, i guess u knw d reaction dat occurs wen a chill water ties up with a hot metal,, i went smokin inside n she saw d vapour risin , , , Dat nyt was a nyt of memory 4 me. .hahaa, a nyt of fresh kiss, a nyt 2 write a luv story abt' perhapz dz is a nyt i've been lukin 4 n stil lukin 4 mre, , ,,,,,

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I cant read your story because of your cut and join english.better learn how to write well

I couldnt get past the first line.

K, noted

It would have been an interesting story if you had written those words in full. The abbrievation make your work look rough.

OK, i'm sorry about the abbreviations.

wow is all I can say

gtim4uall: OK, i'm sorry about the abbreviations.

now, stop bein sorry and re-edit that work, you really are a good writter, if only you'd heed to our advice and write in full, so that people would get the message and drop more comment to motivate you to write more.