festwiz: Dude,nice.keep it up,and update regularly.

MIKE4CHRIST: just keep trying the use of past tenses. make do with it more than ever since the start of the story.
"moved", instead of "move" and the like. with time you wil be better. also its "wrapper".
GOD wil bless and help improve your syntax IJN.
am taking front seat, just need some popcorn.

chinedumo: This story promises to be sweet

Foxy_Flow: Wait... Make I talk my mind... I no fit read this story.. No paragraphing, nothing. The sentence ma bad.. Sorry bro.. I am unfollowing.

Rock.. Give me something good to read. Sorry bro

The rock5555: Ok
(1). Am sorry i have not been branching through here, my time had been shortened by the colabo with Foxy n flow but no probs, am back now.

(2). Prince i must say you have over improved alot, am so happy for u. But add alittle suspence even though the gift that ur school mom promised is kiping me on my toes, me wan know abeg.

(3). Festwiz i want to thank u for helping him through, his work is more organised now.

And to all of una, i dey hail jare.

@prince-i guess its time i fufil my promise bcus u have improved alot. I dey go advertise ur story for my thread now, i just wish that u wont disappoint me o.

BTW u beta come update or i kidnap u and cut out ur brains and read it from there

Foxy_Flow: Wait... Make I talk my mind... I no fit read this story.. No paragraphing, nothing. The sentence ma bad.. Sorry bro.. I am unfollowing.

Rock.. Give me something good to read. Sorry bro

janetDurling: Weldone, bro................................nice story

360prince: . Thanks mrs janet. Ehmmm... your darling to me is really passionate, i must confess. You are so caring, and i want you to keep on following thread till the end. I wish to see your reply soon. Thanks

The rock5555:

I actually skipped the story at first cus of the chokeness, but wait small na, d bros has upgraded, remember say na small small person dey start o.

Kai @prince mbok, zain baka bulala o, come update ne

swaggerkid: No problem bro
Stop Putting uS on suspense cant wait for the next update

janetDurling: Lol.......erm a Miss, sire.....sha dey update regularly and be mindful of yo tenses

festwiz: Your last post was nice, and its "fridge" and not "frigh".

chinedumo: You mean she was top-less?

No bra or shirt or blouse?

360prince: . Ok ma or my lady, i will do exactly what you said. Good morning

The rock5555:



nd escourt not excurt.



escort, not escourt
*smiles*

ride on 360prince

The rock5555:

Na my property u wan yarn abi, i go kick u o, beta trowey ur face

its Meal not mill

nd escourt not excurt. Now the story is becoming sweet, but nawao for u, only u come dey open two threads. BTW that other thread is not Marry, its Mary(i mean that gal that was molested in ur second thread)

360prince: Pls followers the bible said no man is perfect. In case of any miss typing or wrong sentence constructions. Pls dont blame it on me. Just tell me the corrections i need to do. Pls encourage me to do better. And i promise to do better for you guys.

360prince: Pls followers the bible said no man is perfect. In case of any miss typing or wrong sentence constructions. Pls dont blame it on me. Just tell me the corrections i need to do. Pls encourage me to do better. And i promise to do better for you guys.

adegwurulez: I dont know if i'm qualified to advice you cos i am also a learner, i just started my work about three weeks ago. In my three weeks of writing, i learnt two importand secrets of being a good writer, there are;

1.READING
being a writer doesn't mean you will stop reading other people's work, there are lots of very talented writers on nairaland and they can really be resourceful. Take your time to read the works of people like kayemjay, chistar, flow1759, foxy_flow, the rock, repogirl, ishilove, E<R>F, Ezepromoe, frank3:16etc. like i always say, nairaland is a very large forum that can contain as many writers as possible, we could be of help to eachother. My sister would always bring novels home but i was never a big fan of novels or literature, i was this "SCIENCE GUY". When i started my work, i decided to read one of the novels. I saw authors like john grisham, shakespear, james hardly chase, steve kahn etc. I decided to read The Mall by steve kahn. After chapter two i started noticing improvements in my work.
NB: i am not telling you to emulate other writers, be yourself. I even enjoy ur style of writing.
About your spelling, i'll give you just one advise; it doesn't take up to 1minute to look up a word in the dictionary. let the dictionary be your friend. There are some words whose spellings may look wrong but they are correct, especially words with both american and british spellings. e.g americans would write color while british would write colour. both are correct but we were colonised by the british so we go with the british spelling, again the dictionary will also differentiate. we also have search engines for research. ur work is non-fiction so i dont think you need it but if u want to venture into fiction, they would be of help.


2.WRITING writing regularly is as important as reading. just keep on writing and you will learn.


N.B: hope you took out time to read my rubbish, i would have used that time to update my thread but i used it to advice you cos i saw something in you. Though still crude, but i know you will surely get there, nigerians are talented.
sorry for using a large portion of your thread in spewing trash, i just thought i should help a promising writer.

Sexy Sapphire:

I got to know about this story from Rock's thread. Really, I think the story looks promising but the problem is your control of English. The first three updates that I've read so far is so full of errors that I had to take my time to read it. I think u shud always take ur time to read and read all over again after u might have done ur editing cos its gonna discourage people if u don't correct the mistakes. Always take ur time to write, don't be in a rush and pls try to modify them correctly so far its not a pidgin write-up. My two cents though. Amma kip reading sha. Thanks and I wish u all the best.