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Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 7:32pm On Dec 16, 2013
Please y'all should rate, criticize, scatter, arrange and tell me how my rhymes be!

You must not derail please, just tell me where my faults is and try to correct me. Thanks...




Errm. . . Life is a B1tch, you just gotta keep banging/
You surprised? It happened thousands of years before Christ. . . She ain't a virgin/ tongue
Story of my life. . . I never thought i could be a rapper/
I was busy writing books and comics, my best artwork was the metro Skycrapper/

But now na me dey reign, as i dey ehn.. i dey rap something wey dey make sense/
If you no like me, abeg oga go sit down for that fence/

Just yesterday a brother tried to mess with my dream/
i was like, you ain't sh'it, your case is a piece of an ''iceberg'', your chance to get to ma level is ''slim''/ angry tongue

*chuckles*

It's kinda akward, i wish Jay Z was my dad, Blue my sis and Beyonce ma wife/ lipsrsealed
My hommie laughed and was like. . Keep dreamin, Such is life/ tongue

But i got the mind of a hustler/ i'm never a quiter/
prolly i could get a Beyonce look alike if ah dig her/

New cars, real cash, women and bottles going through my mind/
my ambition is to be that celeb y'all never seen his kind/

Verified tweeter and facebook account/
Chillin' beside the pool, of'cause ladies massaging my bones... That, Thomas can never doubt/ wink

I keep reppin' the East-coast/
But shoutout to my real nigga M.I.. He was the ''butter'' to my bread-toast/

I'm lookin' forward to that day when the ''fat 'I'' gon' be ''rolling dollars''/
My Cheapest cars be the black and white Range-Rovers/

.....Oh i remember the words of my dad/
He always said ''A real man is that man who keeps travelling even when the going is bad''/

And with these words he sowed in me, i'm sure he's gonna reap/
Yeah i wrote this one down with passion that's why the song' deep!/





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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by AbuMikey(m): 8:04pm On Dec 16, 2013


1st to comment tongue

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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 8:05pm On Dec 16, 2013
Abu Mikey:

1st to comment tongue

Rate me na kiss



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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by quivah(f): 8:07pm On Dec 16, 2013
Do you hope to spit this one on a beat?

Or its just a textcee thing?
Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 8:15pm On Dec 16, 2013
quivah: Do you hope to spit this one on a beat?

Or its just a textcee thing?
It's a verse from the song i'm writing ''DEEP'' kiss


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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by AbuMikey(m): 8:27pm On Dec 16, 2013
god_of_music: Please y'all should rate, criticize, scatter, arrange and tell me how my rhymes be!

You must not derail please, just tell me where my faults is and try to correct me. Thanks...



Errm. . . Life is a B1tch, you just gotta keep banging/
You surprised? It happened thousands of years before Christ. . . She ain't a virgin/ tongue

Mad coolcool _Dope!



Story of my life. . . I never thought i could be a rapper/
I was busy writing books and comics, my best artwork was the metro Skycrapper/

Rubbish! angry



But now na me dey reign, as i dey ehn.. i dey rap something wey dey make sense/
If you no like me, abeg oga go sit down for that fence/

Giiyaz, you dey craze ni? undecided , strike out this rubbish jor tongue



Just yesterday a brother tried to mess with my dream/
i was like, you ain't sh'it, your case is a piece of an ''iceberg'', your chance to get to ma level is ''slim''/ angry tongue

Mah Nigga »» WordplayOfLife cool

*chuckles*



It's kinda akward, i wish Jay Z was my dad, Blue my sis and Beyonce ma wife/ lipsrsealed
[s]My hommie laughed and was like. . Keep dreamin, Such is life/ tongue[/s]

This would make a hip-hop head look so uncool like my Father's brother cool



But i got the mind of a hustler/ i'm never a quiter/
prolly i could get a Beyonce look alike if ah dig her/

New cars, real cash, women and bottles going through my mind/
my ambition is to be that celeb y'all never seen his kind/

Nice smiley



Verified tweeter and facebook account/
Chillin' beside the pool, of'cause ladies massaging my bones... That, Thomas can never doubt/ wink

I keep reppin' the East-coast/
But shoutout to my real nigga M.I.. He was the ''butter'' to my bread-toast/

For ya dreams ba? undecided



I'm lookin' forward to that day when the ''fat 'I'' gon' be ''rolling dollars''/
My Cheapest cars be the black and white Range-Rovers/

I like this wink



.....Oh i remember the words of my dad/
He always said ''A real man is that man who keeps travelling even when the going is bad''/

And with these words he sowed in me, i'm sure he's gonna reap/
Yeah i wrote this one down with passion that's why the song' deep!/




Nice one bro wink
.

[size=26pt]Rated »» 8/10[/size]

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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 8:29pm On Dec 16, 2013
7/10 dope cool

which one be drugs i typed D.O.P.E... nawa seun...angry
Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 8:37pm On Dec 16, 2013
Thanks for the ratings Abu Mikey, but wait oo! You mean that 'skycrapper' part is rubbish?

And the one i rapped in pidgin English ain't good, thought i was tryna put that Naija flavor in it o shocked

Meanwhile... What do you mean by that ''make a hip-head uncool undecided


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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by AbuMikey(m): 8:39pm On Dec 16, 2013
god_of_music: Rate me na kiss



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Done!

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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 8:41pm On Dec 16, 2013
deejay_harry1: 7/10 dope cool

which one be drugs i typed D.O.P.E... nawa seun...angry
Your mate dey give 8 you dey give 7... Greedy and wicked ''Gambler'' like you! angry



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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 8:54pm On Dec 16, 2013
god_of_music: Your mate dey give 8 you dey give 7... Greedy and wicked ''Gambler'' like you! angry



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if i give you 8 now, which one i go give you when you release track!??
Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 8:56pm On Dec 16, 2013
This would make a hip-hop head look so
''uncool'' like my ''Father's brother''


LWKMD! I get it now, i just kept looking at this and i discovered the lines under the words. . . Then i noticed it's a wordplay! cheesy

Nice one wink


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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 8:59pm On Dec 16, 2013
deejay_harry1:


if i give you 8 now, which one i go give you when you release track!??
Whatever undecided

Guy mo cut that deal, i don't think e make sense! sad


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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 9:10pm On Dec 16, 2013
god_of_music: Whatever undecided

Guy mo cut that deal, i don't think e make sense! sad


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backdoor msg
Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 9:23pm On Dec 16, 2013
deejay_harry1:

backdoor msg
How?? Oya call me Oleburuku! 07067977864



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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by quivah(f): 9:46pm On Dec 16, 2013
god_of_music: It's a verse from the song i'm writing ''DEEP'' kiss


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Cool dear...
But I'd suggest you shorten some of ya words (without losing their meaning)for better delivery... except if you know you are going faster on the longer lines..

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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by AbuMikey(m): 9:52pm On Dec 16, 2013
god_of_music: This would make a hip-hop head look so
''uncool'' like my ''Father's brother''


LWKMD! I get it now, i just kept looking at this and i discovered the lines under the words. . . Then i noticed it's a wordplay! cheesy

Nice one wink


#TeamGOM

coolcoolcoolcool

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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 9:55pm On Dec 16, 2013
quivah:
Cool dear...
But I'd suggest you shorten some of ya words (without losing their meaning)for better delivery... except if you know you are going faster on the longer lines..
My delivery on this track is perfect... Though a line may seem too long, it's just perfect when i'm saying it. kiss

Thanks baby.



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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by quivah(f): 10:20pm On Dec 16, 2013
god_of_music: My delivery on this track is perfect... Though a line may seem too long, it's just perfect when i'm saying it. kiss

Thanks baby.



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smiley... if delivery is perfect about the flow..?
You know bars are calculated on a beat.

Anyways,wink wish you the best dear
Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 10:27pm On Dec 16, 2013
quivah:
smiley... if delivery is perfect about the flow..?
You know bars are calculated on a beat.

Anyways,wink wish you the best dear

The flow and everything are in sync, i do give my self beats to rhyme with when writing, so i guess it's gonna match wink

Thanks again baby, i appreciate your concern cheesy


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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Andyblaze: 12:19am On Dec 17, 2013
Wow......!

This Is D.O.P.E!
I even prefer it to your other lyric thread!

BTW Do as Abu Mikey said, strike out those lines he said you should strike out...your wordplay is good mahn...abeg no dull me next year o, try enter studio do something us cool
Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 1:03am On Dec 17, 2013
Andyblaze: Wow......!

This Is D.O.P.E!
I even prefer it to your other lyric thread!

BTW Do as Abu Mikey said, strike out those lines he said you should strike out...your wordplay is good mahn...abeg no dull me next year o, try enter studio do something us cool
Thanks Andy bro, i will do exactly wink


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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Andyblaze: 10:26am On Dec 17, 2013
god_of_music: Thanks Andy bro, i will do exactly wink


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no p man....u na boss na! wink

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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 10:41am On Dec 17, 2013
Andyblaze:
no p man....u na boss na! wink
Biko Mazi Andy, stop flattering me undecided cheesy



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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Andyblaze: 4:14pm On Dec 17, 2013
god_of_music: Biko Mazi Andy, stop flattering me undecided cheesy



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cheesy Go N Die
Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 9:24pm On Dec 17, 2013
Andyblaze:
cheesy Go N Die



You must gimme 2 million for this insult oo! angry


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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Andyblaze: 9:32pm On Dec 17, 2013
god_of_music:


You must gimme 2 million for this insult oo! angry


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Looool No be wetin u de like to tell people these days?
Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Nobody: 10:01pm On Dec 17, 2013
Andyblaze:
Looool No be wetin u de like to tell people these days?
Ehen undecided If gods and Governors do, you sef go wan do?? angry



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Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by Andyblaze: 10:55am On Dec 18, 2013
god_of_music: Ehen undecided If gods and Governors do, you sef go wan do?? angry



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Who are the gods?
Re: Rate My Lyrics **deep** by SexyFox(f): 8:49pm On Dec 20, 2013
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