merit12:
The kiss dream


I have always want to kiss his soft lips,
I do not have courage to tell him
I don't want to lost the friend I cherish.
All of a sudden his smiling face came closer,
I saw his eyes shone bright like a diamond
He brought his face close to me .
I draw my face more closer with all my best smile
He planted a soft kiss on my lips,
I lost my self in his lips and tongue
I was lost but find my self in him.
As I hold him to kiss him harder
I felt a hot slap on lip,I opened my eyes
Oh it was a dream,the kissed dream.


young.


Thank you

It's compelling to read, easy to understand (No deep meaning attached, all surface clear) like the ending, desire turned fantasy. I'm Not a pro analyst on poetry, just my opinion... Ur next poem, be sure to add more spice to it, play with words more. i saw the picture in this though
Cheers