Ymix94:
Sorry...I arranged it properly but it scattered when I posted it... Maybe I dnt know how to post it

Ymix94:

The demons inside me,
One on the right and one on the left;
Weighing one'forty grams each.
Their hidings as obscure as the dark
They work diabolically, typical of a devil.

I protect and maintain them,
Yet, they turn my blood and water
Against me.
They use my arteries, veins and plexus
To plague me,
They made me to be drinking water like
An elephant in the wild,
Devouring anything green like an hopper
In the field.

Alpha and Omega of what I eat and what I drink,
When I sleep and when to wake -
They call the stones and invite d' tumor.
They made nephritis their governor
And together they caused a failure,
Starting a war that will not end until
I breathe my last.

Mephistophelean they replicate;
Armistice I long for, but these my fiendish
Friends would not agree.
Show me d' exit door O yee good friends,
Let me rot with these daemons
Beneath d earth that torment like hell.

Now I'd change my mind to fight,
Ready to lead a war for my aspirations
And dreams.
Anyway to avoid this war? No I guess.
How I wish I was not created with my
"KIDNEYS" tormenting me and wanting
Me dead.

Dedicated to a friend recuperating from a
kidney failure...My first time of writing... Please
Cc...Laykorn
Texanomaly
Genarality07

joseph1832:
You should do it arrange it again, organization is key to poetry, the way it is its in prose form.

Ymix94:

Boss how did u go about it.... bad me

Ymix94:
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I'll be glad if u can teach me the way u arrange yours, I could see you are a good poet too

timpaker:

Just remove the space that you used in starting each lines.
Then try to properly punctuate your poems so that it would have meaning while reading... I tried a little in the punctuation..
Above all, you did great. Nice poem bro!

joseph1832:
That's my man Tim!.

Boss!

Ymix94:
...
Thanks for d motivation bro, I'll really appreciate it if could please illuminate me More on how u arranged it...

Ymix94:
The demons inside me
One on the right and one on the left
Weighing one'forty grams each
Their hidings as obscure as the dark
They work diabolically, typical of a devil.

I protect and maintain them
Yet, they turn my blood and water
Against me
They use my arteries, veins and plexus
To plague me
They made me to be drinking water like
An elephant in the wild
Devouring anything green like an hopper
In the field.

Alfa and Omega of what I eat and what I drink
When I sleep and when to wake
They call the stones and invite d' tumor
They made nephritis their governor
And together they cause a failure
Starting a war that will not end until
I breathe my last.

Mephistophelean they replicate
Armistice I long for, but these my fiendish
Friends would not gree
Show me d' exit door O yee good friends
Let me rot with these daemons
Beneath d earth that torment like hell.

Now I'd change my mind to fight
Ready to lead a war for my aspirations
And dreams
Anyway to avoid this war? No I guess.
How I wish I were not created with my
"KIDNEYS" tormenting me n wanting
Me dead.

Dedicated to a friend recuperating from a
kidney failure...My first time of writing... Please
Cc...Laykorn
Texanomaly
Genarality07