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Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 2:47pm On Sep 23, 2015 |
Hi everyone, uhm this is merely an attempt at poetry; its my first poem actually. Please, give me your candid opinions. Title - FEMINISM Sit and listen; she was taught Like a lamb on its way to slaughter A fluorishing spring in a closet Full lips glimmering with latex shimmer Wearing sunny smiles on lingering fias Her love is winter; her cries mute Gold mines in an unjust society bias A clad voice singing m'lords flute And suddenly like a stung hot-air balloon Or like a volcanoe journeying to the moon floods of buried emotions erupted Sucklings in lieu with their mums protested All must taste her overcooked ferocious fury Whilst she leered at the Adams with green envy Paddling uncouthly her boat of 'rights' to the very edge Better left to be imagined, what betides the next age! *genuflects* |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 8:47pm On Nov 04, 2015 |
VISION Vision is seeing, not with the eyeballs, but with minds unflinching eyes An idea, a picture, whatever form It is mans's most magnificent creation! But no, this priceless soul is become a mere farce; a far cry from what it ought to be Visions have been murdered even buried As if its not pathetic enough to see them drown in the seas of 'I will' In the Godamn name of procastination! In a bid not to lag behind, we've neglected the main thing for frivolous pursuits Forgetting that someday all this chaos would be vanity However, vision stands! Nuff said, its high time we started believing in the things we see ourselves doing And quit waiting for a crowds applaud Or a favourite pals nod of approval. All you need is absolute reliance on your tower of strength And your determination with Godly obsession Will one day bring your vision into fruition. |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by OluwabuqqyYOLO(m): 9:05pm On Nov 04, 2015 |
Good for a beginner, ma'am. Not a poet but I believe you are on the right path. Been wondering when you would start writing, too, you know? It's been long you started reading stories here. |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 6:30am On Nov 05, 2015 |
The "Feminism" was cool . The expression of being taught to be a Lamb taking for slaughter expresses your point of total submission to men. I am a grooming poet myself . Poetry entered my blood stream early this year. I just started writing only to discover it's called Poetry . Ehmmm...it just all depends ,but I sincerely see no poem in the "Vision " stuff . The write up is cool but it isn't cool really. A nice work though . Since you are here ,I guess you would read the works of others to learn more and do more . More ink to your pen ! 2 Likes |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 12:39am On Nov 06, 2015 |
Thank you Oluwabuggyolo and Theagba! |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 12:53am On Nov 06, 2015 |
OluwabuqqyYOLO:honestly buqqy, am just being lazy cos trust me i've lots of nice stories. I jst dunno hw to start! |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by OluwabuqqyYOLO(m): 6:51am On Nov 06, 2015 |
gracile:Remember how I started? I started with no clue on writing, I only just felt like and you were there when I needed the motivation and I'm ready to be here, too - if you want to start scribbling- okay? You might not know who is here but trust me, you used to. |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 11:26am On Nov 06, 2015 |
gracile:I once asked a similar question ,but the answer I got was itself simple. I will summarise it as thus ,one of my poems ; bridge the pen to your brain. You don't tell your ink how to start flowing . I get my inspirations when reading or musing . Since you've got your stories and don't know how to start ,start reading and musing. Anyway ,you can start by writing all the rubbish you can ...lols. |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 6:23pm On Nov 06, 2015 |
Aww, this means alot to me. All thanx buqqy and theagba, i already feel inspired! Buh first i must do something about this my phone cos it so makes typing hard. Coming up are two recent poems, please stay tuned. |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 6:34pm On Nov 06, 2015 |
CHARM - part 1 I see a form, an appearance of a man He hath eyes that pierces mine soul I draw nigh with curious gaze I must look familiar! Why else does he look upon me such fondness? And slowly, parting his lips a'first He extends a warm grin at me Prettified by a spectacular set of dentition A pair of proud dimples gracing his meek cheeks Must be a sorcerer, enchanter of some sorts Oh! How he makes my every being Object of his mischievous expertise A stone throw apart yet I'm overwhelmed By this strange but kind charmer Maybe his fellows from heaven have beckoned Cos my eyes see him no more In grief and patient curiosity I'll sit and wait for my charm Let not even mortals stop me this time From exploring the beauty of a mutual aura. 2 Likes |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 6:50pm On Nov 06, 2015 |
This one kinda has k-leg buh anyway, thats why its here for treatment, lol. WEARY SOUL Tired of sleep; that routinely beeps Tired of food; the insatiable deeps Tired of garments; that grow old Tired of a house; desperate to be sold My mind and wit won't reconcile The deeds yet and of those awhile My thoughts each churn and chant hymns With beats whose dance lack rhythms Where does this compass lead? So my weary soul may heed I must on my knees report this hurdles To the one expert at ending struggles. |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 7:00pm On Nov 06, 2015 |
gracile:Here is this little ditty I wrote yesterday as a friend was in your shoes too. But it isn't about poetry but a work of it . I Am I am the beginning of my end The end of my beginning I am my own loneliness The island in the desert I am the sixth of the six The difference from the many I am the god of my choices The love of my life I am the sweetness in my distress The love of many lives I am the creator of my destiny The role model of orators I am a Moses to my people The activist of the mute I am my own story The reality to the listener I am my influential power The one in my tongue 3 Likes |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 7:14pm On Nov 06, 2015 |
TheAgba:This is simply dope! Theagba, can you be my tutor? Puleeaasse dont say no ![]() |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 7:53pm On Nov 06, 2015 |
gracile:You should know I am also a learner like you . I can share ideas with you and possibly also receive from you,but tutoring ? I don't think so . It's a yes ,but it's not tutoring oh . I never sabi reach that level . lols |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 6:03pm On Nov 07, 2015 |
TheAgba:So you'll think. anyways, thanks all the same! I really am grateful |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 6:17pm On Nov 07, 2015 |
gracile:I sure will . You be the one to tell me how we can go about it . |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 6:23pm On Nov 07, 2015 |
TheAgba:okay, i'll tag you after every poem i post, you'll tag me after ur poems. we're gonna be previewing eachothers work, kinda looking out for flaws and all. gorrit ![]() |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 6:27pm On Nov 07, 2015 |
gracile:Nice Idea ... you'll get a tag shortly . |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 3:44pm On Nov 23, 2015 |
GOOD NEWS To be a worthy steward of this ambassadorial body To emboss my mission with unambiguous subtlety Harnessing all weapons boldly like a soldier at battle Heralding this coup is a death blow to a prim conscience Every ear my duty to tell Ensigning my role to foretell The good news of the bouncing baby to both young, old and sundry cc: theagba |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 11:16pm On Nov 23, 2015 |
gracile: First off, you've got the "literary flair", obviously. And bravery, for putting your write up in the public space but it also shows naivety. Naive in the sense that anyone can "steal" your work here and claim ownership. I could be wrong though, because this may just be a casual, fun catching adventure to you and you have no plans of turning it into a financially viable endeavour. Now, instead of pouring out all your thoughts and emotions here, be selective of what you post here. The bulk of it should always be emailed out to one or two people whom you feel can appreciate and critique your work, a sort of mentoring, editing etc. For instance, you could begin by exchanging email addresses with the fellow who has graciously agreed to work with you here; every once a while you email him a piece or two to read. Besides, every time the writing fever or inspiration comes upon you, don't worry about spelling, punctuation, choice of words, structure etc, just allow your thoughts and feelings to flow. Editing and corrections come much later when you are relaxed and not in a hurry to get something off your mind. Someone once said that to a writer, the best critic is him/herself. Never be satisfied with your work rate or the quality of your output. And never expect motivation from everyone, if it comes, accept it and enjoy it. Your motivation should come from inside you, from nature, from God. Best wishes always. |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 5:51am On Nov 24, 2015 |
mazado: How nice . That's cool. However, she can have her work here but be sure to at least restrict it from public uses . I normally update my poems to my facebook wall . That's not different . The date has something meaningful to offer . I post my poems here even once in a while . Nice advice really . |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 6:04am On Nov 24, 2015 |
gracile: It's a cool piece . Although , you painted a picture in the end that's different from the picture you painted in the beginning. It's not OK to me . This is the message I got Stanza 1 : About being amongst poets who also writes . Stanza 2 : Using of your skills in the work of poetry Stanza 3 : Here comes the question starting from even stanza 2. What are you to tell ? What's the bouncing baby ? Thanks |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 11:40am On Nov 27, 2015 |
mazado:thank you so much mazado, I really appreciate. actually i never thought of plagiarism cos i barely considered my poems good enough so I'll just forward my works to my tutors email as you've advised till further plans. thanks again! |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 11:48am On Nov 27, 2015 |
TheAgba:oh no, my bad i prolly didn't portray my message what I actually intended was to write about spreading the gospel, uno, like preaching. It definitely didn't hit. I've got a surprise for you tho, but lemme take the permission to start emailing you first, so can I? |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 5:22pm On Nov 27, 2015 |
gracile:I guess the message is clear now . I interpreted it for poetry of which you were referring to the gospel . It's a nice one. Use this mail : cletussixtus@gmail.com |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 8:29pm On Dec 06, 2015 |
Gracile I'm following your work |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 9:32pm On Dec 06, 2015 |
miclez:Thanks alot miclez! sorry tho i won't keep posting here again ![]() |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 9:58pm On Dec 07, 2015 |
gracile:Surely you aren't going to just cut me off, are you? |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 10:15am On Dec 10, 2015 |
miclez:Nah, I won't forget this moniker :* |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by gracile(f): 10:15am On Dec 10, 2015 |
miclez:Nah, I won't forget this moniker :* |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by Nobody: 5:41pm On Dec 10, 2015 |
gracile: Ok :-) |
Re: Poets Please C'mere by chuddyot(m): 10:11am On Dec 11, 2015 |
Attuned to words Believe me when I say am done doing favours for people. Abraka-da-brah after this I guess I can then change your mind, amazing as a feeling, wonderful as a feeling,great as a feeling,i pray it would be glorious like a. Feeling. I never. Intended to hit you hard!!! Now we approaching year 3000 the year we all fear God would be alive... Move it am not on that do it later shit anymore, i guess procrastination is my weakness! Woe trying to live my life not to disrespect church people opinions but I guess my WORD ain't lyrical enough just at the end Right before I met you... an epitome of creation, admired by creator, enthusiastic beauty... oh how I wish to love you every now and then MY DEAR PEN. I would admit it I would it my hands ain't soothing until I discovered you-WORD. Nobody really liked us except for us-WORD. Am so addicted to this-WORD. If I had to do this again I had start with you-WORD. I could go on and on an on-WORD Am going onnnn-WORD The nice times we had still haunt me-WORD Am not a man I can do this on my own-WORD Am now a man I cannot do this on my own-WORD Now we. Blowing up she's telling she needs the whole thing-WORD At that point in my life I appreciate honessty-WORD I could go on and on and on-WORD Bleep it am going on-WORD Am so ATTUNED to YOU-words 1 Like 1 Share |
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