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Sin: New Necessities by Nobody: 6:15pm On Jun 13, 2016 |
SIN: NEW NECESSITIES 1. such a deceit they say yet so difficult to disregard. what's this embrace that's so difficult to ignore? i've tried to wash away these thoughts staining mind like black greasy engine oil on pure white cotton fabrics. vessels do try to stay strong in the face of flogging waves; but let's face it we all seem to sail towards a lie so many ships were sunk by these gruesome waves; yet we keep sailing; somehow we keep failing to see how to live thro' this necessary mess. so we fail win, fail, win fail, win fail 2. this necessity are pretty-hued flames which make us meals yet burn our homes and obliterate treasures into smoke and ashes. warm us up during cold nights we even got a squad to put them out when they rage night after night we seek warmth inch by inch we drift closer to an embrace with these lies it's so easy to embrace cuddling & kissing away realities declining lust it's sensual to slide into half-truths especially when they bring us into memorable orgasms swift muscles-spasms resulting in sleep retrogression recession lesion 3. the world has coloured retrogression into bright hues of cheerful deceit lies, lies, lies, lies, lies and lies lay shelved at various malls cancerous preservatives keep them prolonged we buy new lies daily on sale: we stock death 1 Like |
Re: Sin: New Necessities by joseph1832(m): 9:48pm On Jun 13, 2016 |
Your poem has the form of Nonet poem, but the meter structure doesn't match. It is very irregular. |
Re: Sin: New Necessities by Nobody: 1:12am On Jun 14, 2016 |
joseph1832: Thanks a lot for your review. Most of my poetry fall within "Free Verse"... I write freely. |
Re: Sin: New Necessities by joseph1832(m): 9:30am On Jun 14, 2016 |
artmostfair:Yea, most poets poem usually fall within Free Verse form. Try experimenting on other forms of poetry, it makes you a versatile poet. 1 Like |
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