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THE CORONATION. An Easter Poem by Superclem(m): 10:13pm On Apr 08, 2012 |
THE CORONATION A crown of thorns 'pon his head A regal robe all smeared in red An inscription above his head that read "Behold the king..." and tears were shed A spear in his side from which he bled water and blood and then he said "It is finished" And he was dead¿ On the third day the stone was rolled away and the king arose in the most glorious way adapted from clemency's APIECE OF THE MASTER orTHE MASTER'S PIECE 1 Like
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Re: THE CORONATION. An Easter Poem by jackpol(m): 12:37am On May 09, 2012 |
Ur effort is commendable but poems are usually not decipherable at first glance.Any good poem requires a bit of hardwork to think it through. I suggest u change the title to something like"triumph crown".U can also delete "it is finished" as well as "the third day" and few others to allow critics to find out what the poem is thematically passing across to ur intended audience.From their response,u will know whether or not u hv done a good job.Well done. |
Re: THE CORONATION. An Easter Poem by Superclem(m): 8:40am On May 19, 2012 |
points taken.................thanks..................you can read more of me at www.iclemency..com |
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