Your story is awesome but lacks more than a little creativity. I almost know what will happen next and it really looks like nollywood movie script. No pun intended Sir but a little suspicion will get your readers sitting on the edge anticipating your updates. And the wealth and affluence are a little bit exaggerated making it not so interesting for me ooo I don't know about others. In essence of this long sermon of mine, make your audience glued here and a little twisting of what we think will happen next. But in all, you are a fine writer and if you continue, may end up one of the finest Nairaland writers....thanks.