Danbrowndmf, can you continue with this? If you can't fit your words to the pattern, just script your verses, I'll edit. Or we might make your verses some kind'a refrain, you know.

I still wonder at old, young men
Who learn not to feel magic in the air.
How they still manage to be so blind,
To miracles light o' dawn left behind.

I still wonder at stains on villain's hands
That glitter in the suns of these plane lands.
How they still manage to be beautiful so,
When made of spilled blood n' crashed hopes.

Learnt something. .

llaykorn:


LOL. I suppose it's a love poem you wanna write.

A love poem can be written with this arrangement.

- Drop Lines About Some First Meeting
- Praise Her (Beauty, Intelligence, etc)
- Reassure Her (Know Whatta Mean?)

Firstly, brainstorm. What do you think of this person? As fast as you can, write out how you feel about this person, what happened the first time you saw him or her, when you fell in love, how you feel about the future, and whatever else comes to mind. Anything that you love for that specific person, and just keep thinking and writing. Don't stop to analyze or critique what you've written - just keep going. Write out a page or two, so you have plenty of material to use in your poem. After that, look through your page and bring out the most favorite to you of those you've written down. Structure them into something that makes sense, You could start with a few prose paragraphs.

And, from there you go. This way, you won't get stuck. Remember to avoid adverbs. Instead of 'very intelligent', use 'brilliant'. Instead of 'I really love you', say 'I adore you. Also, avoid cliches. Remember to avoid 'big words' too; don't write anything she won't understand.

There is one trick you can use though, if you have very refined prose paragraphs after the brainstorming. Just insert line breaks into the prose, and you have a poem.

Then, you have to be brave. Don't go halfway to express yourself. Hit that extreme, MuhdG. (Knwo whatta mean?)

gottoboy:

Shebi month man so fun eh.

Eruku to man fi Straw fa Shisha. .

Krone make I drop 5bars for that cypher?

Tell him to add small strength to his voice.
He should work more with english speaking artiste.


His story is top notch.
Kudos to him.

gottoboy:
Learnt something. .

Return what u've learnt. The lesson was for me, not u

ThePrekky's verse - maybe wasnt as dope as expected, but it wasnt wack.

If you don't like seeing keys, you can as well skip it and go straight to the main verse.

Y'all didn't get the humour in the verse because you're not familiar with the personals. It was a personal filled brawl.
Imagine what a non-member of this section would think of giyaz's verse against dark.


Think twice before jumping into conclusion. And you'd be doing yourself a great deal of favour by ignoring such frivolous comments
by thecrook!

MuhdG:

Return what u've learnt. The lesson was for me, not u

LOL. Did that help? If you're still not sure about yourself yet, write whatever you can and send it over. I'll edit it and point out whatever you got wrong.

llaykorn:
Danbrowndmf, can you continue with this? If you can't fit your words to the pattern, just script your verses, I'll edit. Or we might make your verses some kind'a refrain, you know.

I still wonder at old, young men
Who learn not to feel magic in the air.
How they still manage to be so blind,
To miracles light o' dawn left behind.

I still wonder at stains on villain's hands
That glitter in the suns of these plane lands.
How they still manage to be beautiful so,
When made of spilled blood n' crashed hopes.

i don't know what your writting there buh lemme follow suit.

I still wonder why God is slow to Anger...
why he decend so low to come through the sperm of a carpenter...
Why not assend from heaven instead of been placed in a monger...
What he has joined together,Why allow people to still put assunder...








I still wonder why my heart beats for u Faster...
Even when we no longer together...
I still wonder why we say to each other "It Over"...
Why we allow what we heard to seprate ous from one another...














I know know waten i wright.
but rate me.

ELYMAXiimus:
ThePrekky's verse - maybe wasnt as dope as expected, but it wasnt wack.

If you don't like seeing keys, you can as well skip it and go straight to the main verse.

Y'all didn't get the humour in the verse because you're not familiar with the personals. It was a personal filled brawl.
Imagine what a non-member of this section would think of giyaz's verse against dark.


Think twice before jumping into conclusion. And you'd be doing yourself a great deal of favour by ignoring such frivolous comments
by thecrook!

good explanation...seems that's why fb peeps didn't understand ibime,s verse when he dissed rebel

llaykorn:


LOL. Did that help? If you're still not sure about yourself yet, write whatever you can and send it over. I'll edit it and point out whatever you got wrong.

Heheh. it really helped bro.

Alot.

I just need to get in the mood, then begin writing.

Fellaz.....am tryna record an audio buh my voice recorder is sh*t........plz need suggestions on other recording apps


Btw
Am using a Samsung Android

YoungDaNaval:
Longest time

yea bro. How you day.
#YolO

CaptAwesome:
Fellaz.....am tryna record an audio buh my voice recorder is sh*t........plz need suggestions on other recording apps


Btw
Am using a Samsung Android

HD audio recorder pro

When using it to record, tap on 'PCM' for better quality

Who Is Up For 8 Bars..Lemme Stretch Me Muscles!

Now playing - Let them talk - Naval
. . Abeg this Ycee's Jagabans sung ion know why I don't like it Na just the beat.

MuhdG:

HD audio recorder pro

When using it to record, tap on 'PCM' for better quality

Thanks

Giyazz couldn't download the file...

llaykorn:


Sakulala! SAW, talk true. Aren't you one of 'em overfed Ajebo mummy's boys?

if anyone can come up with a concrete proof that i am an ajebo, i'll hang myself

ELYMAXiimus:
ThePrekky's verse - maybe wasnt as dope as expected, but it wasnt wack.

If you don't like seeing keys, you can as well skip it and go straight to the main verse.

Y'all didn't get the humour in the verse because you're not familiar with the personals. It was a personal filled brawl.
Imagine what a non-member of this section would think of giyaz's verse against dark.


Think twice before jumping into conclusion. And you'd be doing yourself a great deal of favour by ignoring such frivolous comments
by thecrook!

I just no fit shout. No strength to explain. The battling styles in FB nd NL are very different. Most FB guys can't cope with the short nd precise type of writing that's employed here. On the other hand, Ibime should know this judging from the fact that he battled a couple of fb guys in that past tourney. Clear cut example being his bout against U3, if it were on Facebook, U3 would be leaving that ring the clear winner by a margin you wudnt even understand. Same, If I lay down a Nairaland type of verse there, no two ways about it, I'll lose.. as in woefully o! Reason almost no nairaland textcee has been successful on that side. I'm one of the few ppl that can alternate styles to suit arenas.
When I battled Mikuz on Facebook and here in quick succession, I won both battles cos I played to the styles of the different communities whereas mikuz just used NL style thruout.
Groups where personals carry 3 points and punches carry 2, what else do you expect?? Not my best verse clearly.. but anyone who Says the verse is wack clearly needs those keys more than the fb judges

GIYAZZ:
Prekky lost his form though. That verse was indeed wack.

Dude Do you know anything about Cheqqs or his personal life?
I need you to explain a few things to me.
0.That scrawny and big eyed line
1.That Goko cleanser line
2.Richard Zednick line
3.Hajj pilgrims line
4.what a carotid is and the correct pronunciation
5. The point behind the last bar
ALL ON THE SPOT WITHOUT EXTERNAL HELP/ LOOKING AT THE LINKS OR ASKING GOOGLE.
If you can honestly do that by yourself then you can comfortably say a verse is wack or not in future and nobody will question u

obainojazz:
I've been really busy...just got home now...

we drop on tuesdaY, 12 bars, 10 pm.

Supermiy:
Who Is Up For 8 Bars..Lemme Stretch Me Muscles!

Let's do 10 bars. . . .

do i ve to fry egg for u guys befor i get a battle?.....nawa oh!!!!!

st3v3nr3x:
do i ve to fry egg for u guys befor i get a battle?.....nawa oh!!!!!

Raise your game or change your name

Laveda. . .


Good morning

Raplinx999:

we drop on tuesdaY, 12 bars, 10 pm.

you be benin witch ...this one u wan 10 pm...let's see sha

JigsawKillah:
Laveda. . .



Good morning

Good morning jigs

How was your night?

st3v3nr3x:
do i ve to fry egg for u guys befor i get a battle?.....nawa oh!!!!!

don't mind jigsaw...just fry your eggballs...

Laveda:
Good morning jigs
How was your night?

Never slept. How yours? And why did you trick me?

obainojazz:
don't mind jigsaw...just fry your eggballs...

agbaya!

JigsawKillah:



Never slept.
How yours? And why did you trick me?

I was only teasing lol...buh thought I told you before the week runs out?

Laveda:
I was only teasing lol...buh thought I told you before the week runs out?

you're teasing a nigga old enough to father 3 kids oh be very careful

you still didn't say how your night went

JigsawKillah:



you're teasing a nigga old enough to father 3 kids oh be very careful

you still didn't say how your night went

Make I hear jaree...

I slept well