Fantastic, Interesting, Suspense-filled, Intriguing, Captivating. Your story is FUSIC.

we need more updates Mr emmyphey.


I must confess you have a great story.

like someone said DETAILS. What sort of story is this anyway? :/ but this is nairaland sha, they'll read anything. 2/10 for me. work on making yur story more detailed and you'll be suprised at the outcome

This is the type of story I love to read .... let m Grab my Cold Kunu and continue reading...Good job man

Good story line but you didn't describe your main character so as to introduce us to your story.
I dey read am e come be like sey I dey watch James bond.

Op, why nah? Where is d update?

the whole characters are so clumsy. I can't even differentiate them distinctively . Like others above me have said, spend more time in describing ur characters and STOP rushing to introduce new characters. BTW Great story line u gat i must say

emmyphey pls try and continue this story fantastic

Its been almost a month since the last update ... What a shame on me . You would be wondering why but am not here to give excuses though there are many
am just here to say I AM SORRY for keeping you waiting for such a long time pls . The situation was really out of my control .
I have seen all comments especially about the detailing , well this is my first and i myself agree with you guys , i need to try harder .
I will continue the story now and now the schedule wouldn't be once in a week again but i think 3 important a week though the days may vary . Your opinion pls
cc spdazzy rikidony , 812clothings ojuolu dsauce tdemo missmossy emmyfresh2000

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Agent Max got to his house 5:30pm dot . Had to take some time off to relish and enjoy every bit of the goodnews he got from the headquarters today , another agent from the CIA is being sent to assist him and that person was none other than his friend Edgar .
He and Edgar had been friends since their university days . They were coursemates and they did most things together and surprisingly they were both inducted into service by the CIA , both on recommendations by the university for outstanding grades . They both worked together till Edgar was sent along with the MI 16 team to Korea due to his expertise in computer manipulation and creation and bypassing of fire walls . But they still were in contact with each other thought there was a strain in their friendship
' now is the time to unleash our joint effort once again ' Max said to himself smiling ascent he dozed off on the sofa.
MEANWHILE
A black range rover parked few meters from Max house and its occupants got out of the car
'are you sure he is now around ? ' a light handsome guy with piercing eyes clad in a designer shirt and black Jean asked
' yea i have been on look out for almost 6 hours and my device confirms that ' a bald guy spoke in a thick voice
the guy in designer shirt smiled to himself and spoke to his device ' target already at home and we are now taking close watch , the operation will commence in about 2 hours time .

leahcimzil:
like someone said DETAILS. What sort of story is this anyway? :/ but this is nairaland sha, they'll read anything. 2/10 for me. work on making yur story more detailed and you'll be suprised at the outcome

ok Thanks # am sorry if it wasn't up to your expectation

oga emmyphey....d storyline is OK,buh d characters are kinda confusing. I can't tell d real agents from d assassins

Keep it up.

I am sure you can do better in your use of tenses though.

pls dont stop d gud wrk yt

still following...

Great idea and skill but you need to do something about
- the characters. -Also too much names that has no much relevance. -Describe your major characters well. -Again the connection is very little. -Above all, thumbs up.

Wow