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The Ashes Of Love / Analysing Dialogue In Red Ashes By Chumzypinky / Hearts In Ashes (2) (3) (4)
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Re: Red Ashes by Nmaglit: 6:44pm On Dec 30, 2016 |
Chumzy u b bad badooo Badest |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 8:24pm On Dec 30, 2016 |
adebriana:Babe park wel wit ds ur filin oo |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 8:25pm On Dec 30, 2016 |
BurnaKing21:Lol, tym fit cum wen u go beg oo. Especialy wen d kids start skul and wen i resume work |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 8:50pm On Dec 30, 2016 |
Dedicated to Holuwanoisy111. MABEL. I eyed the girl as she hurriedly walked past me, Nathan at her heels. She bowed her head and murmured something that sounded like goodbye. 'listen here girl...' i said shifting on the sofa 'let this be...the very last time you set your useless foot into this house else i will have to deal with your miserable excuse of a life!' I hissed loudly. 'sorry ma' she continued walking as Nathan held her waist. I wrinkled my nose in disgust 'see them...akuna kuna! Ashawo!' i hissed. 'please ma'am...' the girl turned with an angry look on her face 'please, do not take my silence for weakness because heaven knows i'm only trying to respect you...because you're old enough to be my mother...but please do not take chances with me. Do not...i repeat...do not call me a prostitute again!' 'ashawo! Thats what you are!' 'mum...' Nathan said walking towards me...he stared at me in hatred and disgust 'you're doing things that makes me regret you ever gave birth to me! Sometimes, i actually think i would have done better with a mad woman for a mother' 'what?!' i screamed rising on my feet. 'Nathan, please lets just go. Escort me out...' the girl said tugging at his arm. He eyed me angrily then walked out of the house. 'you better come back oo...' i shouted as tears gathered at the back of my eyes 'come back Nathan or dont you ever step foot in this house again! From this day henceforth, you're no longer my son!' i was fighting hard to control the tears 'go...get out! You're a disgrace!! Go back to your father and leave me alone!!!' I fell on the sofa and cried. Sometimes, i pretend like it didnt really matter to me. But it did matter. Nathan was my son...my blood, my only child. And the fact that he was living a wreckless life..and the fact that the close relationship we were supposed to share wasnt there. How many times have i tried to mend our relationship? What havent i done for him? I struggled as a single mother to raise him, give him the best things life could offer but this? I never expected him to treat me this way? Where was his useless father when i was busy fucking all the men around just to take care of Nathan's medical expenses since he had always been a sickly child. Not that he was an SS child, he was just a sickly child. Tears poured from my eyes more and more. I sobbed for like twenty minutes. Then the door opened and Nathan came in. I stared at him with teary eyes. He stared at me back. Then he made to walk away 'Nathan, i'm sorry...' i said 'i'm sorry' He didnt say a word. He just went up to his room. About five minutes later, he came down the stairs dragging suitcases. I stood up at once. My eyes bulged. 'Nathan, what..what are you doing?' He didnt say a word to me. He ran up the stairs again and returned with two small bags, one strapped across his shoulder while he held the other. 'Nathan...' i tried stopping him but he raised his palm up...signalling me to stop. I started crying as he dragged his suitcases outside 'baby, please i'm sorry...' i stood right in front him dragging his suitcase with him 'i'm so sorry...i wont do it again. I would never hurt you again...' i cried loudly. 'get out!!!' He forcefully dragged the suitcase from me thereby throwing me to the floor. He didnt care. He pulled the suitcases outside. I quickly stood up and ran to him again and this time he pushed me so hard, i landed my head on the floor. My sight suddenly became blurry. Everything changed their colours. My head felt as if it was oozing out something and when i slowly raised my hand, i felt a liquid gushing out of my head and when i brought it to my eyes, i saw blood. The last thing i remembered was Nathan screaming. Then my eyes closed on their own. Blackout. TBC 6 Likes 2 Shares |
Re: Red Ashes by boladex1: 9:12pm On Dec 30, 2016 |
Chumzypinky you are amazing your update hit back to back. Mabel need to take responsibility for the way he raised Nathan because she did a bad job. She deserves everything she got from Nathan. One thing this update remind me is that never speak when you are angry. |
Re: Red Ashes by gtin(m): 9:17pm On Dec 30, 2016 |
Jisos! Hope she will nt die oh |
Re: Red Ashes by kajsa08: 9:54pm On Dec 30, 2016 |
@chumzypinky, pls post more or I won't be able to sleep 2nite. .... *sobsquietly* |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 10:16pm On Dec 30, 2016 |
kajsa08:Eya my dear, u jst hav 2 slp nw. If i start typin wen hubby is bside me on d bed rite nw, he's going to shout |
Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 10:57pm On Dec 30, 2016 |
na WA o. chumypinky, I hail your government |
Re: Red Ashes by ladyverere(f): 11:22pm On Dec 30, 2016 |
My dear Chumzypinky. I am so enamored with ur story! For a first writer U r good. Keep it up dear. |
Re: Red Ashes by berhdo: 4:18am On Dec 31, 2016 |
I dey gbadun am. Mrs chumzypinky u ar a goddesss to be sincere. Nice update ma |
Re: Red Ashes by swankmee(f): 8:35am On Dec 31, 2016 |
This Nathan mama ehnnn..... |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 8:49am On Dec 31, 2016 |
Gud mrnin pals. Update cums up shortly |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 9:15am On Dec 31, 2016 |
Dedicated to Swankmee and Noble2faith. JOLADE. I tried calling Nathan but it was not reachable. I became worried. Did something happen? My mum walked into my room. She wasnt smiling and i immediately knew YAWA DON GAS. 'Jolade, where were you last night?' her voice sounded angry. 'good morning...' 'save your greetings to yourself please!' she snapped sizing me up 'dont tell me you spent the night out with another man?' 'no! Hell no mum!' i gasped 'i would never do that, you know me' 'i dont know you please...just tell me why you didnt come home last night. And why your phone was switched off' 'i had low battery mum. I spent the night at a friend's' 'which friend is that? Male or female?' 'female mum! I can give you her number if you want. Her name is Qasa...she's Folake's sister-inlaw, the senator's younger sister' Then she grabbed my ears 'how many times have i warned you to stay away from that possessed sister of yours called Folake? How many times?' she squeezed the ears more. I winced. 'stay away from Folake!! I know she's the one convincing you to let go of Nathan and she's probably hooking you up with another man...which you dont want to tell me!' she pushed me. 'mum, thats not it! You know how much i love Nathan, and you also know that i can never cheat on him!' 'i dont know anything oo Jolade!' she raised her palms up 'i dont know anything about you anymore. Not like you have anything doing, yet you leave the house almost everyday and come back so late in the night. And now, it has gotten to the extent that you now sleep out now abi?' 'mum!' 'na you sabi oo. Its your life. Heaven knows i've tried my best as a mother to give you and your sisters a good life. Whether they dont appreciate it or not, its their business...' she sat on the bed. I pouted my lips and sat on the chair in front of my dressing mirror. 'i just want the best for you Jolade. Nothing but the best. I'll not see bad thing and tell you to put your hand inside now, never! I'm your mother. I gave birth to you. I nursed you in my womb for nine months and whenever i tell you this is the right path, it is the right path. Look, let me tell you. You see love? Love is only a mirage. Love is not a neccessity for marriage. Yes oo, you must love the man na. But you still have to shine your eyes. Na love you go chop? My daughter no! You dont marry for love, you marry for purpose. I just wonder how many times i'm going to make you understood. Both you and Folake. God bless Bidemi for me. She's the only one that truly understands me. She's the only one that makes me proud. See Folake now, ever since she got married to senator Ayoxelee, she has never brought even a piece of jewelry into this house. Or even transferred ten kobo into my account. Is it fair? Eh? Jolade, you judge this matter now. After how i struggled to raise you all up. But look at Bidemi, last week, she transferred fifty million into my account. And last month, she sent three cars in for the both of us. Tell me my child, wont you be proud as a mother to see your children doing well? You think poverty is a good thing? You think love will prevent you from living a life of poverty? Hmm, i've said my own oo. Dont let the foolish ones decieve you. Only the wise ones will listen to their mother and spread to others. And i just hope, you're among the wise ones' She stood up, dusted her buttocks and left. I sighed. There was a knock on the door and i sighed. Who was that again? 'come in' i said. The door opened and Kelvin came in. I restrained myself from sighing. 'good morning miss Jolade...' he was smiling. I tried to force a smile too, but evidently, it didnt get to my eyes 'good morning to you too. Any problem?' 'erm...' he was nervous now 'i..i just came to give you something' 'what?' It was then i noticed that he had both his hands at his back. Then he handed a bouquet to me 'happy valentines day miss' And then it hit me! Today was valentines day. Why hadnt Nathan called me yet? Yeah, hell! Nathan was the last person that was going to call me on valentines day. But then, this? This thing was giving me a flower? Where did he steal it from? I eyed him and eyed the flower. Then i leaned forward to inhale it. Of course, it smelt nice but it looked cheap. Like it was gotten from the roadside. 'please throw that away. I'm allergic to pollen' i said covering my nose. 'oh!!' he quickly flung it in the wastebin 'i'm really sorry ma, i never knew. Are you okay?' 'yes please. The smell of pollen is still on you, can you please leave my room for now?' 'erm..i can take off my shirt if you...' 'i said get out of my room!! Are you deaf? Are you stupid?!' 'sorry...' he dropped an envelope on the bed and ran out. I stood up from the chair and collected the envelope. And when i read it, i felt insulted. It was a love letter, from a very stupid boy! An errandboy. 'Kelvin!!!' i screamed. TBC 7 Likes 3 Shares |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 10:15am On Dec 31, 2016 |
Veeve Helz234 Fam24 i saw u guys viewin oo 1 Like |
Re: Red Ashes by harameede99(f): 10:26am On Dec 31, 2016 |
Mabel don see wetin she dey luk for abeg make i use seat belt oo nobody go carry me commot for dis place |
Re: Red Ashes by chara019: 10:30am On Dec 31, 2016 |
Jolade na beans.... well done ma'am. chumzy,more strength to your. typing skills |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 10:32am On Dec 31, 2016 |
Update deleted by author 8 Likes 2 Shares |
Re: Red Ashes by iwakacome: 10:37am On Dec 31, 2016 |
Chumzypinky: This part got me laughing hard. beautiful work ma'am. really enjoying it. 1 Like |
Re: Red Ashes by Pureheart91(m): 12:49pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
Chumzypinky: OH! MEN HAVE SUffERED IN THIS WORLD OF WOMEN; oya love dem that one is worldwar1 dont love them and u enter world war2. What must a man do to Please a Woman? Jolade!! 1 Like |
Re: Red Ashes by Nobody: 1:40pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
Thanks for the mentioned really appreciate it. Continue your good work and more update. |
Re: Red Ashes by rachealfst(f): 2:20pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
Jolade! you better start treating Kelvin well. As for you and Nathan- kolework . Thanks for the update. Wishing everyone Happy 2017 in advance. |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 2:30pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
rachealfst:Its Kolewerk, nt kolework, bush girl *grinning* 1 Like |
Re: Red Ashes by rachealfst(f): 3:21pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
Chumzypinky:Before nko, i am ibile. lol |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 4:55pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
Update removed by author 8 Likes 4 Shares |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 5:03pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
Update removed by author 6 Likes 3 Shares |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 5:09pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
Emmadiva Dahmine Shittaakeem make sure u guys comment. Dahmine, i havent sin u b4, are u new in dis thread? |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 5:10pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
rachealfst:Ibile kwa? Hian! Wer dat 1 dey again,abeg dont vexin 1 Like |
Re: Red Ashes by Chumzypinky(f): 5:11pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
BlizzydoDo Senator Ayoxelee... Honourable sir, i wlc u sir, wlc 2 d thread sir |
Re: Red Ashes by ladyverere(f): 6:12pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
I have been trying to comment with no success. What's happening na? |
Re: Red Ashes by bolubennie(m): 6:15pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
And e be like say make I dey follow Nathan dey sob sha ...I feel for the *boy* oo |
Re: Red Ashes by ladyverere(f): 6:28pm On Dec 31, 2016 |
So Mabel had to climb the rungs of whoredom in order to get to extreme wealth and in the process damaging her son psychologically and neglecting him to harshness of this world without the love of his mother. All the while believing she was doing it for his good. Money is indeed not everything. Nathan, craving for his mother's attention and trying to get it in the ways he thought he could. Both hurting each other, misunderstanding each other. They both have to come clean with each other in order to find peace. Chioma, confused, emotional, enmeshed in her world. She's is not innocent in destruction of her marriage to Chuka. She did a great job bringing up keinene and running a successful 5 star hotel. Keinene my very own persona. Head strong and strong willed. Seeing the world in only black and white but still compassionate. She needs love to balance her out. Kaka my best character. Down to earth, compassionate and considerate. A great friend but not smart to the wiles of men. Jolene, idle and weak. No mind of her own. No goal, no ambition just nodding to whatever she's told. She bends to everybody's will to her detriment. Her mum is greedy, selfish and money loving. Jude got what he deserved. An honorable that's not honorable. Self-righteous but full of bullshit. Chuka the ne'er-do-well. Unrepentant liar, cheat and a deceiver. He will get what is coming to him. I hate men such as he. Useless and worthless. 6 Likes 1 Share |
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