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Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by Sype: 11:50am On May 22, 2019 |
please I sent you a pm @ladymarshall and topsmamen..... kindly check and reply please.... Gracias |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by COPR: 11:57am On May 22, 2019 |
teechedah: WES |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by Omonoba1981(f): 12:01pm On May 22, 2019 |
In addition to the certificate from Nigeria navy school. She also has a licence in Medical Lab with the council in Nigeria. [s][/s] Omonoba1981: |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by johnnybravo1990: 12:13pm On May 22, 2019 |
hipstar2: Be also there to advise her when her marriage ends in divorce o. Let’s call a spade a spade. Abeg, forget that, ‘you can survive in Canada as a single mother’. She may go ahead with the Express Entry process for now, but finally, going to Canada without her husband’s approval and company is simply asking for a divorce. Who in Canada will want to marry a single mother with 3 kids when their father is still alive? Loneliness is real o! There is a kind of loneliness that your kids cannot solve, and that only a partner can quench. So it is a simple but difficult choice — Canada/divorce or continued marriage/love. You must point this to her when you advice: ‘so when your PR comes, will you want to risk your marriage because of Canada if your husband still refuses to agree to only you going?’ Even though I am also in the race to land in Canada, I will always reiterate that Canada is not everything; everything in this life is vanity. In some situations, one needs to weigh their options properly before they decide any action, and they need to be prepared to face the consequences. 27 Likes 1 Share |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by newbie4c: 12:38pm On May 22, 2019 |
Good day house. Someone said you don't need to apply for US PCC since one didn't spend up to 6 months but 5 months and like 4 days. please, i would like to conform if that this right? |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by Rence22(f): 12:41pm On May 22, 2019 |
Thanks everyone. It's good to share success and challenge stories. I am happy I did because with your faith, I will pull myself up and act as advised. Thanks very much. 2 Likes |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ladymarshall: 12:46pm On May 22, 2019 |
@Abti Much has been said about structure by our able guru @johnnybravo1990 and others, now let's focus on grammar. I hope you are not heartbroken by your many mistakes. Pardon me if my corrections were harsh, but I'd rather be harsh with you here than the examiner on your exam scripts. 75k must not waste. To make you feel better, I have put the niceties about your essay in bold in my comments ![]() PARAGRAPH 1 (Introduction) "These days", not "this days" (subject+verb agreement rule). But "These days" is an informal adverb, you are writing a formal essay, "Currently", "At present" are good formal substitutes. "are of little use to us", is too wordy, "irrelevant" is a more concise substitute. I am not sure if "continuously" is appropriate here, I would have used "continually". But you decide. Read more about the difference here https://www.dailywritingtips.com/continuous-or-continual/ "that" (not "and" ) are constantly flooding... " "which" or "that" not "who" ("who" always refer to person or humans, never use it for non-humans, things or objects) "of benefit to us" is too wordy. "beneficial" is a better substitute. Be careful of being too wordy or verbose, else you lose points for cohesion. Your introduction is nice in terms of vocabulary but too wordy, make it more concise. A little note on structure: Make your introduction stronger by signposting. End the introduction with "In this essay, I will examine why production of waste is on the rise and effective solution by the government to curb this menance" (or "The following paragraphs in this essay will explain..." ). This helps you flow smoothly into your next paragraph and scores you points for coherence. Also the examiner knows what to expect in the coming paragraphs. PARAGRAPH 2 Sentence 1 is an epic no no!!! First, you repeat the exact first sentence you wrote in the introduction, which gives the examiner the impression that you are seriously struggling for words and you would lose points for vocabulary range. Second, that sentence also repeats the question and is an absolute waste of space. The body paragraph is the substance of your essay, just like the carbohydrate of a meal. This is where you prove to the examiner you know what you are saying. You have only 250 words at least, every sentence must add value to your essay. Sentence 2: what is the role of the word "civilized" in the context of the sentence, paragraph, essay and ielts question? What exactly do you mean? Avoid ambiguous words, words that have relative meaning. When you use contexual words (although I would strongly advise you avoid them to avoid wordiness), ensure you explain them, rather than assuming the examiner would automatically understand. Still on sentence 2: The question did not ask you about the consequences of production of waste, which would then makes sense that waste damages our health and well-being. The question asked you about the reasons for the increased production of waste e.g consumerism, ignorance, lack of effective environmental laws, lack of disposal systems in society, greed of manufacturing businesses etc. Thus, you lose points for task achievement. At this point, your examiner is unimpressed and expects less from you in the subsequent paragraphs. The marking of writing is subjective. Your examiner is human and has feelings. Your goal should be to make your examiner happy from the first word of your essay to the last. One of the best ways to do this is to stick to the question. Do not derail. Sentence 3 would have been a perfect first sentence for that paragraph because it answers the question of why. Packaging of food and drinks in plastic and its subsequent dumping is a reason for increased waste production, very good. Unfortunately, you used it as an example. At this point the examiner is sure that you do not understand English language or you are confused by the question, because you just used a "causal" sentence to exemplify your prior sentence "effect". So you would lose more points for task achievement and coherence. Ensure your examples are appropriate. PARAGRAPH 3 Use "Furthermore" You have used "firstly" in your first paragraph, using "secondly" would appear as if you are bulleting your points, which is not really sophisticated for an essay (this is my subjective opinion, you can decide otherwise) Again you repeated "there has been an increase" for the third time. The examiner at this point would assume you have crammed this phrase for your essay and is already preparing his/her mind on your ![]() I also can't believe you created a paragraph of just two sentences! What? ![]() ![]() ![]() In terms of content, you did a good job. That paragraph answered the question. Wasteful habits of purchasing more than what we need is a good reason for the increased production of waste. But you need to flesh up that paragraph. The question allows you to add your experience. Was there a time you or your children bought too many canned or plastic things from Ikeja City Mall or The Palms (assuming you live in Lagos) and had to throw them away? You can add that. Experiences and examples are great ways of fleshing up your paragraph if you ever get stuck while writing. PARAGRAPH 4 This is the best paragraph of your essay. Sentence 1 especially answers the second part of the question and has great vocabulary. Sentence 2 is a good example but has a very weak connection to your point in Sentence 1. Note that the example should buttress the laws and policies, not just production. You can make it better by rewriting it this way: "An example is the 2017 directive by the Manufacturing Association of Association (MAN) that orders the side production of paper bags and paper cups for the packaging of food and drinks by companies." (that MAN directive does not exist, but the examiner does not care, it is an appropriate example that suits your point and that is all that matters, I'm not sure if MAN is a government agency, but even your examiner might be as ignorant in that aspect as me ![]() add an 's' to government. Note that the question says "governments". As you write your essay, always refer back to the question from time to time to ensure you are on the right track. How "clear" can an example be? Can examples be unclear, yes. But have you ever seen any essay that writes "an 'unclear' example is...", no. Because it is assumed that all examples in formal essays should be clear. So delete. Avoid redundant words, you need all the points you can get for cohesion. PARAGRAPH 5 (Conclusion) Sentence 1 should be added to paragraph 4 as it is part of the solutions. Sentence 2 is good as a wrap up. Your conclusion is a summary and should perform that function. Rewrite the conclusion as "In conclusion, this essay has examined the reasons why there is an incremental production of waste and the measures that can be taken by governments to reduce it. Indeed, the practice of waste reduction should be a joint effort by both governments, manufacturers and the consumers alike, in order to successfully create a healthy environment for all." Overall, I like your use of transitional words, although it can be improved. Your structure is ok in terms of content. With the exception of paragraph 2, each paragraph contains the right content as demanded by the question, but you need to strengthen them by beefing them up (don't write "beef up" in your essay o, too informal ![]() In addition to watching Jay's videos as have been recommended by previous responses, spend some time understanding the IELTS writing marking scheme https://www.examenglish.com/IELTS/IELTS_Writing_MarkSchemes.html This detailed edit took me a little bit over an hour. For each IELTS draft I edit, I lose $35 per hour away from work. While I try to be 'selfless', I need to make the money I will spend in my new country ![]() ![]() Luckily, @johnnybravo1990 is available for one-on-one coaching and @RHEMA offered to help (I hope I got her monika right). @jjohndoe83 is on honeymoon, I guess but he will provide his service very soon ![]() All the best in your practice and exams. Abti: 22 Likes 11 Shares |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ladymarshall: 12:46pm On May 22, 2019 |
I just responded Sype: |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by onyexx: 12:46pm On May 22, 2019 |
Hello everyone, Please has anyone here used a statement of account from premium pensions? The customer service lady I spoke to just said they cannot include any letter explaining that I have access to 25% of the funds 6 months after retirement. Will the statement alone suffice? |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ceyrahtlk(f): 12:55pm On May 22, 2019 |
THE STORY SO FAR Hey guys! It has been a long while since I visited this thread (or is it called trend?), and today, I felt I should share what has been going on at my end with the hope of encouraging someone. So, when I started this journey November, I was so excited, and I felt passing IELTS and getting ITA was going to be a breeze until IELTS 'jammed me'. My first attempt was January 19, and I was so sure of getting nothing less than 8 in writing, but, alas, I had L-9, R-8.5, W-6.5, S-7, and I didn't even stop there because I asked for EOR, but it came back unchanged. However, I didn't give up, and I booked the next available date, April 9th, and the test was computer delivered, and yay! I passed! L-9, R-9, W-7, S-7, but it did not end there, and in fact, that is where my story begins because I asked for EOR again. Actually, at this point, my score was 444, and I had been hoping to at least get 450. You see, after my first attempt, I came to this forum for assistance, and I joined Wasseynewest's writing group to familiarise myself with the essay structures, @bunmioluwa also introduced me to writeandimprove.com, a wonderful site for IELTS. Furthermore, I downloaded Grammarly app on my laptop, from the Microsoft store, and that made me realise some of my writing mistakes, and I worked on these by watching some youtube videos. When I started practising with writeandimprove.com, my score was 6.5, but, before the test, I was consistently getting 8, sometimes 8.5, under examination conditions. So, that prompted me to ask for a remark when my results came out because I badly needed 3 extra points at least. Fortunately, as God would have it, I got 6 points extra because I received my EOR report today. L-9, R-9, W-7.5, S-8. Halleluyah somebody! I guess what I am trying to say is that you should seek assistance when you need it because in this journey, being full of yourself isn't going to help you one bit, and secondly, even if you 'pass' the test, and you need extra points, consider asking for a remark first before rewriting the test. You might be surprised! Thank you @wasseynewest @bunmioluwa and every other person that dropped one tip or the other when I needed it most. I wish you all the best. 72 Likes 6 Shares |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by Ologunsunny: 12:55pm On May 22, 2019 |
My school recently replied to Wes through email and my profile changed from verification required to we are reviewing your documents, please it takes like how many days before they send me estimated completion date email? 2 Likes |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by haywhy80: 1:02pm On May 22, 2019 |
ladymarshall: Well done ladymarshall. You can pick up a part time job with British Council. Sure that will you earn more than $35 per hour. ![]() 2 Likes |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by Dame91: 1:02pm On May 22, 2019 |
Hello everyone, Please I need advice on what to do. I applied for EE on the 24th of April 2018 I was single then so I applied alone. I got a mail that My ppr was ready in October but I got married so I informed cic and I was able to add my husband. Then we got ADR on the 10th of January. We were informed in the mail that decisions will be made in 30 days. My medicals expired in Febuary so by March I was told to do another medicals. My status shows MEP now. But we've not heard from them since then. Our visa office is Accra, should I be worried? 1 Like |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ladymarshall: 1:05pm On May 22, 2019 |
You have a point. But he has given her permission to continue the process alone. He must have known the consequences of living apart, no? Anyway, this is what makes marriage complicated at times. I can't understand it. 'Singlehood' is so peaceful for decision-making. #teamsingleandhappyandnevereverlonely ![]() I have quite radical views @ bolded but I'll be silent on it, let me be culture and religion sensitive here. johnnybravo1990: 19 Likes |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ladymarshall: 1:06pm On May 22, 2019 |
Apply for it to be safe. Some VOs can be strict and tough. newbie4c: |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ladymarshall: 1:08pm On May 22, 2019 |
Congratulations. All the best for the rest of the process ceyrahtlk: |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by happyme31: 1:10pm On May 22, 2019 |
[You are truly an English quote author=ladymarshall post=78614797]@Abti Much has been said about structure by our able guru @johnnybravo1990 and others, now let's focus on grammar. I hope you are not heartbroken by your many mistakes. Pardon me if my corrections were harsh, but I'd rather be harsh with you here than the examiner on your exam scripts. 75k must not waste. To make you feel better, I have put the niceties about your essay in bold in my comments ![]() 1 Like |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ceyrahtlk(f): 1:11pm On May 22, 2019 |
ladymarshall: Thank you so much |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ladymarshall: 1:11pm On May 22, 2019 |
Lmao! Where? In Nigeria? As in 100k for 8 hours per day with British Council? I think not. Even in my country of residence, people don't earn $35 per hour with BC ![]() haywhy80: 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ummhalimah: 1:15pm On May 22, 2019 |
Dame91: I don't think you should be worried, probably they are doing some background checks on your husband, wait it out PATIENTLY AND PRAYERFULLY, it will end in praise. Aameen. |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ummhalimah: 1:16pm On May 22, 2019 |
O God, Let it rain PPR. Aameen 13 Likes |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ladymarshall: 1:22pm On May 22, 2019 |
That's the spirit sis. Rence22: 2 Likes
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Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ladymarshall: 1:22pm On May 22, 2019 |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by alabambam: 1:27pm On May 22, 2019 |
Please I need someone to help me with my NOC 4166. I have B.A English language I have 8years experience in teaching English language in a secondary school.can I go for this NOC @topsmamen |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by Topsmamen: 1:30pm On May 22, 2019 |
alabambam: Hi. The NOC for Secondary School Teachers is 4031. I have also replied your PM. 1 Like |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by Vicolak: 1:33pm On May 22, 2019 |
Thanks @zara01 Zara01: 1 Like |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by ladymarshall: 1:36pm On May 22, 2019 |
Raise a CSE or send an email to Accra VO to ask how far. I am not sure if you can call Accra @Topsmamen @joo2018 @Stencil @Ifeoma77 more suggestions? Dame91: |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by lambotee(m): 1:39pm On May 22, 2019 |
please if am send my transcript to WES am i send to WES canada address or WES usa |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by Chynwey: 1:44pm On May 22, 2019 |
NOC 4031 should suit you better if you teach English in a Secondary school. alabambam: 1 Like |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by Ugomaxx: 1:53pm On May 22, 2019 |
My heart truly breaks for this woman. Given how thoroughly engrossed we all are in this process, it's downright disconcerting when 1 hurdle or the other, human or otherwise seems immutable. But I believe this woman will overcome this one, eventually, one way or the other, all legit. Having said that @ednut1,me thinks it is downright presumptuous calling sm1 else's husband "selfish". Mind you, he mustn't automatically share his wife's dreams or ambition. In any case, he's expressed willingness to let her & d kids have her way. This journey is long & tortuous and needs everyone involved to be completely hands on, for that, you need to buy into the project. It takes some of us more time than others to see the "light", and there's nothing wrong with that. Besides, do you know how hard he worked to get to where he is now, do you by any means have a ready made job waiting for him in Canada? Won't he "start" all over like the rest of us? For all we know, he has thought it through and is not sufficiently persuaded. So Madam, I believe you you know hubby more than any other person, so tailor your arguments and actions to his fears, dreams & aspirations and the greater good of the family. Use real life examples from the further research you'll make. Brace yourself up for ielts, ace that exam so you'll be well & truly on your way in this process. That way, you'll be animated well enough to encourage another person. As per child benefits in Canada, please trash that idea, only go pick it up from the dump if all else fails & you're still fired up. Child benefits with avoidable family separations & devoid of emotional support - is that one benefit? ednut1: 24 Likes |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by Josefuadjr: 1:54pm On May 22, 2019 |
johnnybravo1990: A na-ako shit. Loneliness is real, ko. So all the single people going to Canada have all died? Mtchew. As if she would be going to Canada if he had kept their account at billionaire status. Something her present condition currently lacks, is making Canada look attractive. May we never marry a spouse that kills destiny! 13 Likes |
Re: Canadian Express Entry/federal Skilled Workers Program - Connect Here Part 8 by Topsmamen: 1:59pm On May 22, 2019 |
Dame91: Don't be worried. It's normal that adding spouse after PPR would require extra checks. Your application will eventually be approved. Read the post here. 3 Likes |
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