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Constructive Criticism Needed For This Poem by graphicsplay: 7:34pm On May 26, 2013 |
Almighty and ever living father We before your presence gather Unto your holy name our voices we raise Receive Oh Lord our sacrifice of praise In a christian home I found myself raised up I saw two of your names, Yahweh and Jehovah raised up But I'm confused at your third name called Allah Because of recent destruction carried out in the name of Allah A group of Religious fellows called Boko Haram Has charged at us like an angry ram I heard they considered western education evil which informed their decision to destroy like the devil Hear our cry this moment Oh Almighty father If Islam is a religion of peace let Boko Haram scatter Grant us victory as our soldiers sting them like bees Until they are brought down to their stinking knees. N.B. This poem should not by any means be misconstrued as an act of aggression against ISLAM! |
Re: Constructive Criticism Needed For This Poem by Nobody: 1:55am On Jun 03, 2013 |
Ill let it slide that you called me a gay man... I think you have a talent that you can develop with more work. I would love to see more of your writings, especially if they are religiously swayed. |
Re: Constructive Criticism Needed For This Poem by graphicsplay: 4:17am On Jun 03, 2013 |
SniperInADiaper: Ill let it slide that you called me a gay man... Thanks.... My religious bias has always led to controversies. 'Playing safe' with religion for now. On another note, with regards to 'your gay status', I have gays and lesbians as friends, though I'm not one of them. |
Re: Constructive Criticism Needed For This Poem by Nobody: 4:35am On Jun 03, 2013 |
Well its all good cos Im not gay and Im not a man So, share some of your others then. |
Re: Constructive Criticism Needed For This Poem by graphicsplay: 4:44am On Jun 03, 2013 |
SniperInADiaper: Well its all good cos Im not gay and Im not a man At the right time, things will fall into place. |
Re: Constructive Criticism Needed For This Poem by Nobody: 1:39pm On Jul 01, 2013 |
Please take note of the corrections below. Nice write-up though! graphicsplay: Almighty and ever living father |
Re: Constructive Criticism Needed For This Poem by graphicsplay: 3:26am On Jul 09, 2013 |
Victoriousvic: Please take note of the corrections below. Nice write-up though! Thanks for the input. |
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