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Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Nobody: 3:34pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
na wa o chistar... r u not writing again ni |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Cherylll(f): 6:02pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
nice story.. chistar |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by chistar01(m): 8:01pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
Hi guys, its really difficult to concentrate and write during festive seasons and this Xmas is all packed up with activities so that explains my unavailability. But I was the one who carried my big head and started this story so I won't starve you guys. Expect a long update tonight. EDIT. I see you guys comment and I appreciate them, kindly keep them coming. CHEERs. 1 Like |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Nobody: 8:21pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
chistar01: waiting for d "long" update o |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Emperortj93(m): 9:16pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
maayreee:same here waiting for the VERY long update |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Incredibleme: 9:26pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
chistar ! baba longest time, u no cum chop ur matric rice again? Am really enjoying the story, kip it rolling. |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by chistar01(m): 9:51pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
-8- MAXWELL A popular saying state, you don't know the value of what you have, until you lose it but in my case, I think it should be, you don't know how much you care about someone until you nearly lose the person. Those were the thoughts that crossed my mind as I starred at Mary-Anne through the closed window. She looked so peaceful, so calm and beautiful, for a moment, I wished I was really the kind of boyfriend she thought I was. A God-fearing and faithful one. "You can all go in to see her now," the doctor who was attending to her said as he came out of the ward, "you have five minutes," he added and walked away. We all trooped in immediately and I was the first person to speak. "Mary-Anne, what was that all about?" I asked looking at her in the eyeballs. The question had been on my mind for a while and I just couldn't wait to ask it. She stared at me blankly in response, like her mind was somewhere else. I asked her same question again and she replied this time although her reply was as good as her silence. "Nothing," she said. "What do you mean by nothing?" I asked calmly and pulled her arms into mine to comfort her. She was obviously still traumatized by the accident. "It's nothing I want to talk about!" She yelled at me surprisingly. "I was just having a really bad day," she added as she saw I wasn't really impressed by her attitude. I kept quiet afterwards. I figured she'll eventually have to talk to me so there was no real need to rush things, besides I don't think I would want to talk about whatever is bothering me if I just had an accident. What followed was just petty talks until the doctor came back to the ward holding a brown paper file in his hand. I immediately noticed Mary-Anne’s name which was written on it boldly with a blue marker. The doctor instructed us to leave the ward and then knowing Henry and I were he charge, he pulled us aside. He looked really tensed. There's this kind of facial impression bearers of bad news have by default, and I could see it vaguely on the doctor face but Mary-Anne looked perfectly alright when I saw her some moments ago so what could be the bad news. I pondered. "We need to contact her family right away," the doctor finally said. "Why?" Henry asked, beating me to the question I would have asked anyway. "Well, there's a problem," he replied. I wanted to ask what problem he was referring to but he then went ahead to open Mary-Anne’s file, I concluded he was going to tell me the problem anyway. Just as if he had observed this, Henry said nothing neither. "Just as you requested, we ran a full body and mental test on her," the doctor started to say, referring to Henry who was the one who requested that all related tests should be ran. I must confess, it was quite surprising, I never knew Henry cared about Mary-Anne or anyone for that matter. He acts like he cares about no one. It was strange and I felt it was quite supererogatory but Henry was the one paying so I decided to just sit back and watch as things unfolded. He, agreeing to settle the bills was a relief to me because I was quite broke at the moment but it was unexpected. "What did the test results show?" Henry asked. He was sweating profusely standing right at the front of an air conditioner. His sudden over hyped interest and care in Mary-Anne was starting to creep me out and I was already wondering who the boyfriend amongst our two was. "There's nothing wrong with her physically. Turns out her accident wasn't as bad as it looked, but I can't say the same about her mental state," he paused for a short while, "she has amnesia. Dissociative amnesia in particular, that means she'll be unable to remember some vital personal information. For example, during the tests, she couldn't remember her home address or her surname. She can also forget what exactly her relationship with someone is but still remember the person. We believe familiar faces like those of her family can trigger the memory." He concluded and excused himself I stared at him in awe. He was obviously trying to choose his words carefully. I was confused. Mary-Anne losing her memory wasn't expected. Too many thoughts started flooding my brain, I felt like it would explode. I knew I had to calm down if I didn't want to break down but I couldn't help it. I decided I needed to talk to someone and knew exactly who to talk to. I left the hospital few minutes later. *** PS - this is just one part of the intended 4 parts I planned for this chapter. I'm typing with my phone and would have loved to continue typing right now but I forgot to put one factor into consideration, my battery. Now its low. I'll continue once I power it. Please bear with me. 8 Likes |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by emarkson(m): 9:56pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
ok nw 2 Likes |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by toykathy(f): 10:11pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
keep em coming boss, weldone n thz 4d update. |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Nobody: 11:33pm On Dec 22, 2014 |
Ba3 never charge finish? Biko,comd back o... Besides why didn't the full body test show that Mary is preggie? 1 Like |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Psalmwise(m): 12:29am On Dec 23, 2014 |
Jennimma:d doc is still keeping it |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by chistar01(m): 7:16am On Dec 23, 2014 |
-8- (Continuation) FUNMI I was probably having the longest night of my life when something unexpected happened. If the wall clock was accurate, the time was around 5:30am and we were still in the hospital after the Mary-anne incident. I felt like an outcast because I had been with the whole group all night and literally no one had even noticed me enough to say hi or even check on how I was doing. I sat on one of the chairs in the reception after the doctor had apparently chased us out of the ward. I still didn't get what we were all still doing in the hospital, Mary-anne seemed to have stabilised and I would have thought it would be okay to go home and frankly, I would have actually gone home but I didn't want to look like the evil one, the one who left Mary-anne in the hospital all alone to herself, whatever that means. So, anyway, as I sat down on the chair, I observed something. I could spot the doctor talking to both Henry and Maxwell, and I could instantly tell he wasn't giving the good news as they both looked like they could use a hug. When the doctor was through with them, their reactions confirmed my thoughts. I noticed as Henry went to the water dispenser at one corner of the reception and quickly drank four cups of water in quick sucession then he sat down on the floor right beside the water dispenser. Maxwell on the other hand stared at Mary-anne for a while through the window and then swiftly walked out of the hospital... I wondered where he was going to and would have followed him if the girl who had been holding Mary-anne earlier not come over to my side of the reception to talk to me. She was looking like she hadn't slept for weeks but surprisingly, her hair was still well packed into a nice pony tail. "Err... How are you?" she asked with a forced smile. "I'm fine," I replied, "hungry and tired, but fine nevertheless compared to you guys," I added, hoping she won't take offence of read too much meaning into the innocent statement. I was really looking fine compared to them though. She chuckled. "Well, Mary-anne is really close to all of us here so we are just really worried," she replied with after sighing. I felt the need to introduce myself. "I'm Funmi, Maxwell and Henry's neighbour," I said and offered my hand to her for a hand shake. "I'm Amaka," she replied as she took my hand, "Mary-anne and Mary-anne's neighbour," she added and we both giggled at the joke. It was not really funny but we needed to laugh anyway. "Nice to meet you." I said when we were done giggling. "The pleasure is all mine," she replied and then a short silence followed before Amaka started another conversation. "Pardon me for asking and its probably non of my business but which of the guys are you dating?" She asked with a smile, strangely the smile looked genuine. "What makes you think I'm dating any of the guys?" I asked curiously. "Well, don't take this the wrong way but I don't think you would be here and spend all night in a hospital for Mary-anne who happens to be someone you don't even know. So its obvious you are just here to comfort your boyfriend." She explained and I could see sense in what she said but I wasn't dating any of guys. Maxwell, who seemed like the more likely option for the boyfriend status took me out on a date and bleeped it all up but here I am, still in the hospital, waiting outside the ward of someone I only just saw for the first time in my life few hours ago. Reality dawned on me. Who am I kidding? I'm not still here because of I don't want to look evil, I'm here because Maxwell is still here or was here. I need to find him, I thought. "I need to go now," I said to Amaka and immediately left the hospital same way Maxwell had left. *** Outside the hospital wasn't as dark as I had thought it would be after a night of heavy downpour. I stared at my wrist-watch, it was 6:20am already and I could help but wonder on how time could be so fast. I was standing at a T-junction and could not see any living soul on either of the three roads that I faced. I figured I wouldn't find Maxwell by standing on one spot, I picked the road on my left and started walking down. I had no idea why I was looking for Maxwell or what I would say to him when I saw him but I just felt the urge to see him. To be sincere, I was a little worried about him... He was obviously having a bad night. I barely walked two minutes when I saw a huge church building. From the writings on the wall, I figured It was a catholic church. It had a nice cute cross right above it, albeit being a small cross, I'm sure it was one of the most distinctive feature of the church structure. As I walked passed it, I noticed the doors were open and the inside was really dark. There was something inviting about it. I fought the urge to enter it and kept walking. I walked for another five minutes before I decided there was no way I was going to find Maxwell like this. My phone was low and therefore I couldn't call him. I decided to simply go back to the hospital, he might have returned anyway. As I walked back, I saw the church again and this time, I couldn't resist the urge. I walked in. As I walked in, I quickly scanned the whole building. It was a gigantic hall which had windows with pictures of famous people from the bible on them. There was a confession box at one corner of the hall and rolls or chairs. I noticed a familiar figure kneeling at the first roll of seats right before the alter. It was dark and I couldn't see any distinctive feature but I knew who it was. Maxwell. I was surprised. I stared for a short moment before I did what anyone would naturally do. I walked up to him and I had to tap him twice before he raised his head to look at me. He looked like he had just seen a ghost. *** *** *** 3 Likes 1 Share |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by chistar01(m): 7:19am On Dec 23, 2014 |
Jennimma:keep calm. You'll find out why soon enough. Toykathy - I see you Psalmwise and emarkson - You are both here too and I'm only just noticing? :| |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by chistar01(m): 8:21am On Dec 23, 2014 |
-8- (Continuation) HENRY Amnesia is a good thing. It would mean that Mary-anne would not be able to remember everything that has happened to her. Hopefully, she won't remember that I had sex with her and that she's pregnant. Thinking of pregnancy, why didn't the doctor say anything about it? The whole purpose of requesting a full body scan was because requesting for just a pregnancy test would have been too suspicious. Those were the thoughts that led me to th door of the doctor's office. DR. DONALD FIBRESIMA was the name tag on the door. It was a green name tag. I knocked at his door and pulled down the door knob before I got any response. I pushed the door open and walked in. There was a tapestry of on the wall. On it was a painting of the biblical illustration of the road to heaven or hell. There were two roads in the painting, while one was wide and filled with multitudes of people, the other was narrow with just one person on it. I looked away from the tapestry as the fat man behind a table cleared his throat to announce his presence. "Can I help you," he asked curiously. "Can I sit?" I asked as I walked towards the other side of the table. "Normally you are supposed to book an appointment with the nurse before you can come in here but since you are already here you may just go ahead and sit." He replied. I sat. "So how can I help you?" He asked again. "My name is Henry, I'm a friend of the lady who was rushed in here tonight..." "The one who had an accident?" "Yes, that one, Mary-anne." I confirmed. "I requested a full body scan on the lady and I must admit that your hospital is really efficient as the results came out barely three hours later." "Well, when you have the right facilities and trained staffs, efficiency is expected." He replied with a smile. "Yea, right. So I was wondering if you guys did a pregnancy test on her too?" I asked the one million naira question that had been on my mind. "Yes we did." "And what was the result?" I asked with an effort to sound calm. "She's not pregnant." The doctor replied after a short silence which felt like ages. "Thank you doctor," I said with a wide smile and asked about her amnesia just to ease up things a bit. "So, about her amnesia, should we be worried about it?" "Well, firstly you should know her amnesia could have been worse considering the blow on her head, she could have had retrograde amnesia where she forgets absolutely everything before the amnesia but what she has is selective amnesia. She'll tend to forget things she normally wouldn't forget. She can forget faces, conversations, events and quite an awful lot, we can't really say how much she has forgotten but to answer your question, I would tell you not to worry." The doctor said and took he short pause, he tilted his head forward in a way he could look at me directly and not through the glasses he wore, his stare was piercing. "By saying you shouldn't worry, I don't mean you should take the case lightly, as she might have forgotten quite a lot. I hope her family has been contacted by the way?" "Not yet, her parents are based at Abuja and they travel a lot so its going to be hard to get to them, but we'll make sure they are contacted before the end of today," I replied. Mary-anne had told me lots of stuffs about herself. "Good. I'll recommend she goes to see a psychologist, we have an excellent mental-care unit here in the hospital and I can refer you if you want." "That would be nice but won't be necessary for now. When would she be discharged?" "She's stabilised for now but we'll need to watch her for a day or two before she'll be discharged." "Alright, thanks for you time," I said as I stood up from the seat to leave. I could finally afford a smile as I walked out of his office. I went back to the reception and saw only Amaka sitting on one of the chairs, I walked up to her and sat down on the chair beside her. "We need to talk," she said. "Oh God! Not the we need to talk line again!" I murmured under my breath. TO BE CONTINUED 5 Likes 1 Share |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by chistar01(m): 9:38am On Dec 23, 2014 |
So I think its official, I now know so much about amnesia, thanks to lots of research and the help of R0YVER on this story. Chapter 9 comes up later in the day. I think breaking the chapters into smaller bits is better than just posting it all at once, what do you guys think? 1 Like |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Nobody: 9:46am On Dec 23, 2014 |
Chistar thanks for the update....you ve eased a little tension here....wow that means mary anne aborted the pregnancy after all,and am curious to know what maxwell was confessing at the church Patiently awaiting your next update Kudos |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by TiffanyJ(f): 9:52am On Dec 23, 2014 |
Ride on chistar, you've got a wonderful plot |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by MzChistar(f): 10:13am On Dec 23, 2014 |
Chistar, dis is why I like ur stories. Dey are so realistic,educational and easy to relate with.u teach us the good , the bad and the ugly . You once taught us how to use water dispenser to dispense drinks in a party and that has been helpful in the past. Now I know something new about amnesia. I didn't even know there were different types of amnesia before reading this update. Dividing the chapter into smaller bits sounds like a good idea. It would keep the thread active and ease the excess suspense. ------------- About the story so far, I have a few observations. 1 - what happened to Mary-anne's pregnancy or she wasn't pregnant in the first place? 2 - you have painted Henry to be a hard core cultist and "bad guy" character , I think he is too soft. He hasn't really showed us much "fire" 3 - is Funmi confused or what? One minute she hates Maxwell and the next moment she's going to look 4 him. 4 - my favourite character so far is Maxwell, the guy is the king of all players.one of his girlfriend is in a hospital and his other girlfriends are with him. That's epic!!!!!! Awaiting your next update. 2 Likes |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Chuksemi(m): 11:54am On Dec 23, 2014 |
welcome back chistar |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Fatalveli(m): 12:49pm On Dec 23, 2014 |
MzChistar:Mzchistar Chistar, u've got to come see dis ooo |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Livingwalker(m): 2:49pm On Dec 23, 2014 |
Nice one but not as lenght as expected but either way i stil believe you |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by seunviju(f): 3:18pm On Dec 23, 2014 |
Wonderful update thank you |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by LogoDWhiz(m): 5:08pm On Dec 23, 2014 |
Chistar01 this is brilliant. Interesting Thank God I met this at the initial stage. In your last episode, first paragraph, you might want to correct it. It should be Mary-anne and not Funmi Love the suspense! |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Psalmwise(m): 6:35pm On Dec 23, 2014 |
chistar01:ehh sowie jawe...I be been here for long.....,jez keeping a low profile..... no worry I dey ya back kakaraka like German floor..push on |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Onemansquad(m): 7:20pm On Dec 23, 2014 |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by chistar01(m): 12:48am On Dec 24, 2014 |
I try to visit this thread only when I have an update to post as I'll feel bad for starving you guys if I read your "another update please" comments and can't do as requested, but since the update is almost ready (I'll post it like I did early this morning) I decided to check it and saw MzChistar's comment. Wow. I'm speechless. As writers, we are given a great power. The power to influence our readers in whatever manner we want to, through the lives of the characters we create. I sometimes forget this and just write whatever I feel is right at the moment pending on my mood and the plot I have in mind. Thanks for reminding me of this. Answers to your observations. 1) I wonder why everyone is asking this question, I think I'll have to clarify this in the next episode. 2) Lol... Don't worry, this story is just starting na, only 8 chapters so far and you want to see the Henry show his full character? Keep calm and trust me 3) Is funmi confused? Well, view it like this. This girl is just having her first taste of freedom. She likes Maxwell as I have pointed out many time but Maxwell isn't like your regular guys, he's a very complex character. Funmi doesn't really know how to handle him so she tries to keep up. Besides, she wants to be bad. 4) You read My Complicated Love Story right? And remember Michael Odoh? Who do you think is a better player. Michael Odoh or Maxwell? CHEERs 1 Like 1 Share |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by D9ty7(m): 12:54am On Dec 24, 2014 |
Na so I just gallant for here. Drop am make I read am sharp sharp |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by chistar01(m): 1:03am On Dec 24, 2014 |
@Ghostlady - I got your diary mention, thanks. It means quite a lot to me . I'm still waiting for you picture though. @tiffanyJ - I see you madam @chuksemi - was starting to wonder when you would turn up. Welcome on board. @fatalevi - seen and replied @LivingWalker - in my defense the episode was almost 3000 words. That's about 1000 words more than the usual update @seunviju - all these people that will just come and thank you sha... I should be the one thanking you for reading. @logodwhiz - thanks sir, would do the needed. @psalmwise - alright oh... I hear. @onemansquad - welcome on board sir and please no guns allowed. @d9ty7 - welcome on board sir. I think NL has the best set of readers any writer can ever hope for, you guys are the bomb. I might just create a whatsapP group where we can all relate on a more personal level. Might. CHEERs |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by LogoDWhiz(m): 1:10am On Dec 24, 2014 |
Uwc. Anytime! Waiting for more updates o More!!! |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by chistar01(m): 8:04am On Dec 24, 2014 |
Enroute Lag from PH right now. 8:04AM and my battery is 7% already. SoFcuKed. I'm so sorry guys. |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by Nobody: 12:34pm On Dec 24, 2014 |
the storyline is rwily fantastic unrelated 2 d ones av bn reading so far,,expectin more updates,,dn't kip me waiting 4 so long. |
Re: Why I Want To Be Bad - A Story by DrSage(m): 1:38pm On Dec 24, 2014 |
Nice one there @Chistar,waiting for more updates b4 today runs out 2 Likes 1 Share |
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