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The Edge Fades Now by saintsam(m): 8:34am On Apr 20, 2007 |
THE EDGE Today I need to sprint along the Edge I need to laugh into the darkness below to mock it. At the same time I need to toss back my head wind ripping at my hair and watch the moon rest majestic before the stars as this earthen, human world rushes past. I need to pull you to me and crash our bodies together like surf and rock like a meteor flashing hot against the sky like a lifetime of fucking rolled into once. Like a soft kiss damp lips and light breath on skin-- and bruising bites leaving traces of blood on my tongue and yours. I need it all. I can't have you right now so I close my eyes and we're together again. You are bound craupadine you are all mine and I am all yours. We play and laugh and love. This becomes our world our nirvana for the moment timeless senseless except for senses we stir: Kubla Khan rises around us the Great Pyramids the canals of Mars, flowing hot and molten Venus oceanbeds swirl schools of tropical fish dancing overhead sunken ships and gold and whipfire lightning flashing thick beneath the waves, God I miss you. That's all this is supposed to say. The Edge fades now. You've helped me push at the skin until my gleaming places sliced through secrets revealed. I can wait. Life is good now. I am so alive and I am so in love. |
Re: The Edge Fades Now by Yusufadeto(m): 1:53am On Apr 21, 2007 |
good imagination |
Re: The Edge Fades Now by saintsam(m): 8:38am On Apr 23, 2007 |
thanks man. |
Re: The Edge Fades Now by iice(f): 11:03am On May 13, 2007 |
Really liked the first part |
Re: The Edge Fades Now by RuuDie(m): 1:18pm On May 15, 2007 |
got outta the blocks brightly, but u didn't quite end with a flourish. great imagination, very good use figuratives, but ur layout leaves a lot 2 be desired! thumbs up man --- could do better, but u got game! |
Re: The Edge Fades Now by jesusfreak(f): 6:09pm On May 17, 2007 |
love the ending |
Re: The Edge Fades Now by RuuDie(m): 4:23pm On May 18, 2007 |
jesusfreak: what part of d ending do u like? |
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