Forgotten

I have been forgotten
A dream made in the past
I shouldn’t be upset
But yet my feelings last
I don’t know why this happen
You said it never would
Yet I have been forgotten
Lost and closed for good.
What’s it like to be forgotten?
It’s something sad and gloom.
It makes you feel so rotten
Like you’ve been locked off in a room
One day you’ll remember
One day I hope at last
I will no longer be forgotten
Just a girlfriend from the past.

nice try ! the feeling is quite clear-simple and str8 4ward; the delivery good but could be better maybe a sprinkling of metaphors & other figurative expressions here and there ! but the simplicity is quite appealing though - really nice try !

mind to speak more about this poem ?

I tried to add more to this poem, but i just can't get anything else from it, Its one of my sad peoms hows this one,

Risks

Risk is a word I used today
Not out loud but in a personal way
You see there’s this boy and…um…
There’s also this dance… So well…
You know I just took a chance
It doesn’t matter if he says yes or no
Why you ask I don’t really know
I guess it’s because I just took a chance
I took a risk
I asked him to the dance.

tell u something -- u're getting better by the second! this one's absolutely FANTASTIC - plain 'n simple!!! no theatrics; language is clear and sound with a simplicty that just blows one away --- I LOVE IT !