i usually just write whatever comes to my mind, here is one i just thought up. Critique it




She had the face of a goddess. Aphrodite at her best. Her skin had an even chocolate tone without blemish. No spots, no wrinkles, just pure uniformity. Her eyes were captivating and you could be enthralled by staring for too long. It was like a bottomless black hole that could suck you in. Full luscious lips that begged to be kissed. Every time she opened her mouth to talk, smile or laugh, her lips beckoned on him for contact. Prominent cheek bones supported her taut skin making them firm. Her head was perfectly placed on her long neck where her ear rings dangled.
Flowing black hair just stopped short of her shoulders that was full and rich and smelled like fresh oranges. The way she leaned back on his couch accentuated her full length. All six feet of pure beauty. Her legs stretched to eternity and her flowing red dress gave away a glimpse of her thighs. His heart raced. He moved over to her in a slow calculated manner, placed one hand on her neck and brought her lips to his where they exchanged warmth. The room seemed to spin to the sound of slow dramatic music. His other hand reached for her thighs where he slowly and carefully made his way upwards her dress. In anticipation, he jumped ahead of himself and released into his trousers and the CD seemed to skip and his illusion was shattered. She picked up her things and left him sobbing.