Note: this is my first poem am not a student of English language so constructive criticisms are welcome.

A rose in a desert
In a desert of roses,
It seems to be an illusion,
You hunts for it today,
Tomorrow it hunts for you,

Over a dry plane,
Thought all hope was lost,
I did lost the taste,
But yawned for more,

Then like a pregnancy to a barren woman,
As a light in the dark,
The appearance of my need,
A rose close close by,

A colourful rose,
With a sap of beauty,
So tempting to touch,
It was indeed a smile of beauty.



Please your corrections and suggestions will be of help

Nice poem for a starter.

Texanomaly, Timpaker, Laykorn, Jigsawkillah over to you!

waali:
Note: this is my first poem am not a student of English language so constructive criticisms are welcome.

A rose in a desert
In a desert of roses,
It seems to be an illusion,
You hunts for it today,
Tomorrow it hunts for you,

Over a dry plane,
Thought all hope was lost,
I did lost the taste,
But yawned for more,

Then like a pregnancy to a barren woman,
As a light in the dark,
The appearance of my need,
A rose close close by,

A colourful rose,
With a sap of beauty,
So tempting to touch,
It was indeed a smile of beauty.



Please your corrections and suggestions will be of help

Hi waali, you write well,but still not without little flaws. e.g in your first verse:

You hunt for it today,
Tomorrow it hunt for you.

You need to put more effort, make your audience feel the groove. I mean, make your messages be plain. Just don't start, know where u r heading to.

Take note of punctuations, keep on reading and writing them, you'll surely be a wonderful poet.

Noblecares.