WHIZKIDEFE:
( 2nd Entry)



Subject Line: The key to financial Independence; a secret the rich won't tell you.

Hey mate,

Making 6-figures income has never been this easy.

I promise, you won't find this secret on the internet. Most rich folks don't like competition; so they won't tell you how to be financially stable.

Wonder why there are so many self acclaimed influencer on the rise these days? They wanna rip you off your little funds in exchange for their half-baked infos about financial independence.

Most don't even know sh*t about personal finance, I kid you not. (Topic for another day)


So, about 4 months ago, Josh and I were given a link to join a group of like minded entrepreneurs.

While Josh joined instantly, I hesitated, lets blame it on procrastination(dream killer).

Barely 3 weeks after, Josh bought a brand new MacBook and the latest Iphone same day. I asked him what's up, he only smiled and said, "it's the Lord's doing"

"Abi dis boy dun dey do yahoo(fraud) for my back?," I thought.

The other month, Josh asked me to help him make a choice between 2 cars, as he wanted to buy the best one amongst them.

"My man, wetin dey sup, where you dey get all these money? Abeg show me way o," I told him, with a blank expression.

I wasn't asking for money, I rather he taught me how to make mine.

"Show you which way? Na that group link wen Ob send for us that day na, na there I dey make my money o," he said, smiling.


Showing me proof of his earnings and testimony from other friends who joined the community, I thought it best to give it a try.

But guess what? It was to late for me already. Too bad!

The group's admin decided to charge new members a fee before joining to gain awesome knowledge and premium materials they share in the E-comunity of his.

Damn! This was an opportunity that was given to me for free, few weeks earlier.

Well, after much appeal to the group's admin,
he decided to give me a 20% discount. I paid the price for my negligence and procrastination.


When I entered the group, It was a f*cking goldmine.

The list of things members are entitled to includes;
* Premium ebooks on financial growth and management
*Real life wealth building strategies
*Premium softwares for E-commerce/digital marketers.
*Problem solving arena for newbies
*Ideas sharing and brainstorming arena
*Weekly giveaways

After using one of the premium software shared in group that could've took me years to afford, I made my first six figures right from the comfort of my room!

I could've been a millionaire if I had joined earlier, but, it's all good. Better late than never, right?

I now have 3 streams of income, from the ideas and insight shared by financial experts in the group.

Truly, the right information and effort could make one financially independent, for life!

Although I'm not as rich as I want yet, but, I can afford my lifestyle and pay my bills now.

Are you broke?
Do you intend to start up a business but don't know how to start?
Do you have a business but find it difficult to convert prospects to clients?

Good news... I have got a solution for you!

Sam Wealth [link], the group that changed my life is now open for new members!

Yess, same group's link that was given to Josh and I.

The goldmine I talked about earlier, is now opened for new members. The goods news is, you ain't paying a dime, it's f*cking free!

The bad news is, it has a deadline. If you are reading The free entrance would be closed on [date]

The thing is, I don't want you to pay for negligence and procrastination like I did, that's why I took it upon myself to send you the link now.


If you want to start living the life of your dream and connect with established entrepreneurs in various field, join Sam Wealth[ link ] now.


See you soon,
Efe


I dun show you way now oh, rush enta for free now before dem close am o [link]


P.S. You'll be given a link to download an A-Z mini importation tutorial if you joined before 12:00pm WAT tomorrow


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Please, I await your constructive criticism ..
Cc. Venzal, Venzal1, Wordswriter, Foluwadamilare and co.

Thanks in anticipation.

Foluwadamilare:


This is way better than your first entry
I can't criticise this
Let venzal and co coman air their opinions

Nice work!

WHIZKIDEFE:


SL : Things could have been better if...

Hey Anon,


What am bout to tell has been a burden I have kept to myself for long. I can't keep it no more.

Am in sifia pains!

I lost my first $1700 job on Upwork. Guess who's fault..

It's none other person than the sensational writer, Foluwadamilare (Dami for short)

Are you shocked? You must wondering how she got involved in my loss, right?

Before you ask me," how was it her fault?," let me tell you.

Dami refused to critics a piece I was suppose to submit to a client as sample for a job he gave me! The annoying part was that I paid her for it.

You might want to ask, "Why would a client want a sample after awarding you a job?"

Well, the truth is, my profile captivated him and a good sample of a previous job done would’ve been an icing on the cake.

Dami's reason for not being able to critic the piece was, " I got a deadline to meet with the international firm I work with," she said. (Can you imagine)

Well, Dami and I have settled our differences now though. But, that was after she apologized and refunded me in full.

The sweetest part of the whole thing was that, she gave me [product name] that taught her her exceptional writing skill.

[Product name] Is an all in one guide to copywriting.

One thing that makes it the best Copywriting among others is that, it contains;
* How to write a great copy in 30 minutes
*How to set-up a verified Upwork and Fiverr account
* How to craft client magnetic proposals
* How to source for clients on LinkedIn

At the end of the day, I was happy she didn't deliver my job. *smiles** ( It was a blessing in disguise!)

If she had delivered my job, I wouldn't have known about this game changing book in her possession.

Although things could've been better if she had shared it with me earlier, but, I'm grateful anyways.

The goodnews is, I no longer spend money on paying for my piece critic cos I can now write as many samples and craft winning proposals by myself.

Can you keep a secret? I now have repeat clients and my earnings is now 7digits when converted to naira.

You don't want to lose your first client right?

Get the [product name] now before it gets too late. [Link]

Rich Regards,
Efe

P.S. You'll be given a 40% discount if you purchase it with this [link]. And you'll get an Upwork proposal template worth $500 for free!


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Foluwadamilare, in Dj Khalid's voice.. Another one!

Please, your views will go a long way.

I know say I dey stress you, but, I promise to ...... for you, after I land my first job.. ( pray for me)

Thanks a bunch! I'm grateful.

Esteedee12:
SL: If you only know the HORRENDOUS activities going on, on your face?

Have you woken consistently seeing pimples on your face despite all your visits to the dermatologist, attempts with creams, and cleanser?

Or you have been trying to get rid of all those nasty annoying spots, that somehow still always find a way, to ruin the beautiful moment for you.

Well, let me ask you a question. Of which I know you may or may not have the answer.

Have you ever heard of DEMODEX?

Now you are racking that gigantic brain of yours, or you just gonna do what everyone in our generation does. Google it.

But before I put an end to your curiosity. Let me take it for a ride first and show you the horrendous activities happening on your face.

Damilola is an aspiring model and yes she has all the qualities you'd expect a supermodel to possess: tall, slim, and a face that could be beautiful if not for the little red volcano she has on it.

She has been battling with the acne issue for a while now. Trying various creams and medication. But all that diminutive volcano wouldn't budge. Then her friend advised her to go see what's really going on, on her skin.

After adhering to her friend, she went and what she saw left her shaken.
In her words:

" It felt embarrassing and frightening to see Demodex mites were crawling on my skin. The news was bitter medicine, and I needed it.'

Now to answer my question:

Mites are called Demodex- a tiny parasite that lives on the skin hair follicle and feeds on sebum, the oily substance produced in pores. Naturally, they glom onto the oiliest part of the face, which means they typically hang out around the forehead, cheeks, and chin.

Fact:

Do you know that there are dozens of microscopic mites living, eating and yes, breeding on your face at all times? Yes again, your beautiful face. (Wow, talk about an orgy going on, on your face.)

Now before you run to the sink to thoroughly scrub your face clean which won't get rid of them - I'm here to tell you they're nothing to worry about. Everyone has them, and they're totally normal…

...except when they start to become abnormal like in Damilola's case.

Now if you are now pondering with that big brain of yours again. Wondering if the Demodex on your face is normal or abnormal?

Cheer up, that's why I am here and that's why I'm introducing you to the step by step method Damilola took to solve her Demodex problem.

Hit that [link] and minimize the orgy going on, on your face.

Otherwise, you might be having lots of unwanted Demodex. Cos I'm positively certain they are are not having protected sex.

Here's the link again [link]

Get back your face,
[NAME]

Please I await your constructive criticism venzal, venzal 1, word writer, foluwadamilare.and other bosses in the house.
Thanks.

Foluwadamilare:


Lmao, nice.
Headline might make your audience curious
The story part got me sha
However, I think you should've found a way to pit in You'd instead of I'd while trying to make them want the book...tou could've laid more emphasis on the benefits of getting the book after you wrote that list of what it contains...

All in all....I think its a good one sha...just keep practicing...

Crazeworld:
Critique not critic

Cc WHIZKIDEFE

Foluwadamilare:



Okay....nice story - you can make a better story though

You did not say anything about the benefit of the product....OK, you mentioned that it's supposed to get rid of the worms....but how?

Dies it have any side effects?
What's the product made of sef?

And...I don't think are really gonna believe that demodex worms are real with your story....
They'll probably think that you are spinning stories to get your product in the market..
you need to provide evidence that it's real...
Make your story more believable

PS- I myself go just GI google m to see wed e real or not

Foluwadamilare:


Lmao, nice.
Headline might make your audience curious
The story part got me sha
However, I think you should've found a way to pit in You'd instead of I'd while trying to make them want the book...tou could've laid more emphasis on the benefits of getting the book after you wrote that list of what it contains...

All in all....I think its a good one sha...just keep practicing...

Virgo01:
Hello guys, in as much as you're all learning, try to take action too. I just accepted my first offer on Upwork. It's a project to write 7 email sequences for a marketing blog at $10 per email. It's not much but it's a beginning

Virgo01:
Hello guys, in as much as you're all learning, try to take action too. I just accepted my first offer on Upwork. It's a project to write 7 email sequences for a marketing blog at $10 per email. It's not much but it's a beginning

adsmaster:
[INSANE] Tiger Woods practice Golf for 13 hours daily


Holy smokes!

How could these be?

Where did he get all that energy, he uses to practice for THIRTEEN freaking hours daily?

I am stunned...

Are you too?

Do you know, his trainer Haney said he often engage in marathon workout- where he works on his swing, play 18 holes, work on his game some more, then do a second workout in the evening.


Haney also said such laborious training gave woods a mental edge as he knew nobody will Outwork him.


Little wonder, HE won the following trophies

* 15 professional golf championship

* 82 PGA tour events


Woods leads all active golfers in career championship and career PGA!

What do you think is the motivation behind...

That made him put all that work.


Is it his passion for the game?

Is he trying to proof a point to someone somewhere; who might have said -HE will Amount to nothing?


OR...


Did he figure out early in life that - "practice makes perfect!"


My answer.

I think he did, he knew practice will make him perfect!

Do you agree? If you do, I have a question for you.


Have you been practicing; have you been writing email copy daily?

I would leave you now to ponder on these...

Adsmaster

PS.. Make it a habit to always right a copy daily and you will be great like woods

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Oga Venzal my first email copy criticize.......

Subject Line: I thought my life was ripped apart



[First name], Earlier this year, I bought a new four bedroom terrace apartment at Lekki Phase One for just “20 million naira”, and I was very excited like a die hard Liverpool fan who just witnessed the club’s first ever premier league title after “30 years”….


Goodness, gracious me!


Thirty years is really a long wait for a championship title ,and it’s not even comparable to living on planet earth for fuc*** seventy years without a property of your own.....


Please don’t laugh just pretend like nothing happened, because this is just the beginning of my ill luck or will I say the consequence of my ignorance.


Just a day after I purchased my new apartment, a group of lawyers accosted me at my apartment, demanding for my property documents, I questioned them with so much authority that, why will they request for my documents when I did nothing wrong….


But,Guess What?


My Documents were absolutely fake, and this meant that I have been ripped apart, torn apart and trodden down. I felt like the world should just come to an end.


My pension and lifetime savings gone to the drain, in just a twinkle of an eye, despite my precarious seventy years experience in life, I thought I knew it all but I ended up knowing absolutely nothing!


You know what?


This scam of a transaction that I fell for, meant that I owned the property for just a day. And I was foolish enough to assume a four bedroom terrace apartment will cost just 15 million naira in Lekki Phase one....


I cried till my eyes were red and I yelled “Enough is Enough of this perilous lifestyle”.


I began to look for answers to questions both online and from direct contacts, my truth searching journey continued, and it led to the establishment of my real estate firm(Great Realtors)[Link here]


Good news!


Those lawyers that approached me with aggressive intent are now my legal partners....


So as at today I have trained experts, partners and consultants who work around the clock, to ensure that proper assistance on real estate investment is giving out to our clients at any day and anytime.


You can get a sneak peek of some of the lucrative real estate investment here.[Link here]



I actually have more valuable tips for you.


Talk to you later.

echobazz:
This is my first entry and I need constructive criticism on this.

Cc Venzal,wordswriter and other gurus in the house

WordsWriter:
Cool. Really really nice.

It would have been better without the liverpool story tho. It would have been so so sad and connect instantly with the reader's emotion.

Then maybe introduce the liverpool abnalogy after the sober story to lighten the mood.


But in all you did a really great job. Story was on point, CTA was also on point, connection of story to business was great.

Nice one I like it!

TheSTreetman:
@Venzal1 Venzal. Please can you create a channel in that Telegram group and post your updates. Most people especially me don't like groups that when you're back, you'll be greeted with over 500 messages. Mostly chats while important messages will be hidden from it.

If there's an important question, you can as well use the channel and answer it while tagging the person.

My suggestion though.

Venzal:
Alright. I will do that. Thanks for the suggestion.

Virgo01:
Hello guys, in as much as you're all learning, try to take action too. I just accepted my first offer on Upwork. It's a project to write 7 email sequences for a marketing blog at $10 per email. It's not much but it's a beginning

Venzal:
Alright. I will do that. Thanks for the suggestion.

OYENIYIJK:

congrats bro

Chuksmonika:
bro, is it a new account?

Passwordkenny:
Please I'm interested, but no link to click .

Venzal:
EMAIL FORMULA #10: X ways to Y…

This is like an algebraic formula or something.

But in truth, this doesn’t have anything to do with mathematics.

What you simply want to do here is to show readers X benefits/ways to getting a good Y result.

Here’s how this formula can be used to craft an email:

1 If you are trying to ______________, then here is a few things that I have discovered that work really well…

2 List each of ‘X’ and explain the what and why… without revealing the HOW.

3 Want to know a simple way to make all of these things work at once?

4 Get my product it will help you (Y BENEFITS)

5. CTA

Here is an example:

Venzal:
Email FORMULA #11: TESTIMONIAL EMAIL

This one is similar to the case study email.

But in this case, instead of trying to dissect how a customer used the product to gain the result that they did, you let their words do all the heavy lifting.

Here’s a way to lay it out in your email:

1 Talk about an email you got from a customer…
2. Here’s what they had to say __________
3. Insert testimonial/screenshot of testimonial
4. If you want to get similar result, then get {NAME OF PRODUCT]
5. Here’s where to get it (CTA).
Here’s an example of this email:



NOTE: Look at that part where he says this:

Wanna know what advice I gave him?

Sorry... that's only available to Email Copy Academy students.

From what you've learned so far, WHAT DO YOU THINK MR. Chris did there? Let me know below.