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| Poem~ Be Wrong Or Belong by Chuksemi(m): 8:52pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
I just started. Your criticisms are highly welcomed and appreciated. On a certain day he was born Years later he had grown His childhood wasn't devoid of tears Growing, he learnt to hide tears Insecurity he battled with, then and later Is he too tall or short Living up to people's expectation he tried not to fall short Is he too good or ugly For the public judge, not wrongly This life he lived, albeit sadly Up and down he climbed the hills of life Yes and yes he agreed to the public like a wife Decisions he took, not on his own People played him the funky tone Yet, his life was solitary So and so his life walked past For indeed time is fast All his life he tried to belong To the majority that could be wrong If only he knew better 3 Likes |
| Re: Poem~ Be Wrong Or Belong by Chuksemi(m): 8:57pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
I think this is a quintet, rhyme scheme is aabbc. Please correct me If I am wrong, I am purely a novice here. Oma4u. Timparker. Ishilove, divepen. Larrysun. Firestar, naijababe. Dygeasy. Ray360, audreytimms, marioking. Please drop a review. So, I have got a half rhyme up there, line 1 and 2. Born and grown. Thanks to oma4u  |
| Re: Poem~ Be Wrong Or Belong by lirusehn(m): 9:07pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
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| Re: Poem~ Be Wrong Or Belong by Chuksemi(m): 9:20pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
lirusehn: Oga me, please review biko |
| Re: Poem~ Be Wrong Or Belong by OMA4U(m): 9:56pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
Chuksemi: I think this is a quatrain, rhyme scheme is aabbc. Please correct me If I am wrong, I am purely a novice here.I love your poem and it's depiction. This's not quatrain. This's a five-line poem while quatrain is a four-line poem. You got it? OMA |
| Re: Poem~ Be Wrong Or Belong by Chuksemi(m): 10:01pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
OMA4U: I love your poem and it's depiction. This's not quatrain. This's a five-line poem while quatrain is a four-line poem. You got it?Thanks a bunch, mentor.  . So what is this one called? |
| Re: Poem~ Be Wrong Or Belong by OMA4U(m): 11:09pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
Chuksemi:It's called quintet and some of your rhymes are 'half-rhyme' e.g born and grown. Thumbs up! |
| Re: Poem~ Be Wrong Or Belong by OMA4U(m): 11:12pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
Chuksemi: |
| Re: Poem~ Be Wrong Or Belong by OMA4U(m): 11:12pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
Chuksemi:It's called quintet and some of your rhymes are 'half-rhyme' e.g born and grown. Thumbs up! |
| Re: Poem~ Be Wrong Or Belong by Chuksemi(m): 11:20pm On Oct 03, 2014 |
OMA4U: It's called quintet and some of your rhymes are 'half-rhyme' e.g born and grown.Thank you. |
| Re: Poem~ Be Wrong Or Belong by timpaker(m): 2:37pm On Oct 04, 2014 |
Very good for a starter.  However, I don't understand your rhyming scheme. Is it an end rhyme or an enclosed rhyme cuz I see you used both up there? |
| Re: Poem~ Be Wrong Or Belong by Chuksemi(m): 5:42pm On Oct 04, 2014 |
timpaker:Sir, it is supposed to be aabbc. End rhyme I guess it is. Cos, I intended to place the rhymes at the end of each line. What's an enclosed rhyme? Please point them out sir  . Thanks |
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