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Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 9:19pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
sure we can begin |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 9:22pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
We may wish discuss the passage in some detail, analysing each sentence in turn or, in longer passages, significant sentences in respect of content and style. Features to be commented on include its structure and the form of the verses, rhyme and metre, symbolism, contrast, personification, the use of simile and metaphor, and punctuation. We may also wish to conclude whether the poet/poetess has been able to effectively utilise imagery. Also, how appropriate do you think the title is? |
Re: Poetry Contest by Nobody: 9:23pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Slave sons Need we speak of a motherland Wringling rights out from our hands Enriching the bellies of cunning bands Turning us strangers in our own land. |
Re: Poetry Contest by Nobody: 9:31pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
We are regarded as black monkeys Thereby importing AIDS into our country Thus, the instigation of nightmares beyond our dreams That made African cosmos to scream Due to our innocent nescience AIDS has become an indomitable pestilence If you say “ I feel like sexing you” You really mean, “I feel like killing you” The urges come to satisfy your desire You never know what would be acquired You choose partners at random Relying on the strength of condom Indulging into few minutes of pleasure Which may take away your life’s treasure You may momentarily feel cool Tampering with a destructive tool That can eat into your bright future Reducing it into mere broken pictures Youths have to really understand How to take unshakeable stand To be firm in what they stand for And be careful in what they fall for We have to embark on a raid That will sheath the swords of AIDS Let’s learn to say NO So that our future will glow Knowing fully that total abstinence Worth a million of sheer indulgence Let’s learn to STAY SAFE And not to PLAY SAFE Let’s take a common stand together So that our generation would perform better Let’s guard our destiny Because AIDS is a reality |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 9:34pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Genial: thats fine. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 9:36pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
saintbeng, post # 194 and 195 are they one poem? |
Re: Poetry Contest by Nobody: 9:45pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Post 194 is just part of one of my poems. Post 195 is another complete one. Now, I'm ready for critiques and analysis. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 9:50pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
will get back to you on the longer one much later saintbeng: this is straight to the point and simple, but also very good. |
Re: Poetry Contest by Nobody: 9:55pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Have you forgotten one u read sometime ago. It's a short parable of the sower. Need they know that a breeded seed Seeds not but what they breed And when desperately in need Smiles back at them to feed. |
Re: Poetry Contest by Ezenwenyi(m): 10:40pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
OUR OWN HANDS Oh!The chosen son The great rising of the sun People and their deeds Recreating the joy of yesterday And compromising the thoughts of today Our forgotten past The unforseen war of judgement The decaying of our Government running without any movement In the land of the blessed They were in the jungle crying to survive tomorrow The days of the broken mirrow Taking them to the promised land Evil men with , good looks decieving the mindset Our own world! Our own joy Fighting back the manifestation of Serenity Without much intergrity All in our own motherland bloods in our own hands Oh!our own hands
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Re: Poetry Contest by Nobody: 10:43pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
That's nice. I've got one too. It's dedicated to all close friends. THE BEST You're a true friend, that I want you to know, Our love for each other has helped us to grow. We've been through some tough times, but we've made it through, The only one I ever trusted was you. You helped me through anger, You've chased away fears. You held me through sadness, and kissed away tears. You stayed by my side when the world turned away. You helped me see joy when the skies were all gray. You were the rainbow at the end of the storm. You help me be different when I shouldn't conform. You held my hand when you knew we would fall. Every heartache, you saw me through it all. I'm not sure I'm always the best friend to you, I know I'm not perfect, but this much is true. When life gets you down, And there's nowhere to turn, I'll help you through and I'll share your concern. I'll try my best to return every favor, When you're sure that you'll drown, then I'll be your lifesaver; Even if we both go down. Whether we sink or swim doesn't matter at all, Just know that I'll be there whenever you call. I'll pull you out when life pulls you under. I'll be the sun when there's lightning and thunder. And when it's all over, And we've fought every war, There's one thing I promise, Of this I am sure, When the time comes that we're put to our rest. Be sure that you know that, My Friend, You're The Best |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 10:47pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Ezenwenyi: very nice. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 10:49pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Saintbeng, your "BEST" poem is really good. the other long one without a title (post #195), I'm still trying to decide what i feel about it. |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 10:50pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
saintbeng: Title: None Imagery: non-descriptive Comments: Fair. Not overly descriptive, not complex. Struggles to pass its meaning across, but it's ultimately a pretty clear what the writer is trying to say. No alliteration, simile or metaphor is employed. It appears the poem is about a seed and how it's a repository of food - it is sown, grows and is eaten again. It is assumed that "they" in the poem refers to the planters of the seed. It could also refer to birds, pests, or indeed any other beneficiary of the seeds fruitfulness. The grammatical correctness of "breeded" is also questionable. Rating (out of 5): 2.0 |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 11:16pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
Slave sons Title: Slave sons. Promising title, but the poem seems to be the first verse of the whole. Imagery: Moderately vivid. Right away, one can see what the author is talking about. It uses personification - "bellies of cunning bands", metonymy - "speak of a motherland, wringing rights out from our hands". It uses conventional rhyming, no alliterations. Quite straightforward. Not much to think about there. Good work. Rating: 3.0 |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 11:27pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
A Sparkle of Love Somegirl, i don't know how i missed commenting on this. but i think its one of the best on this thread. Good job. |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 11:27pm On Nov 11, 2006 |
This is for nilla Title: None Comments: Quite good. Consistent rhyming at the ends of the sentences. Good punctuation. The sentence "something soft spoken like beauty mane" begs to be understood, though. The use of the expression "He be blessed that know'th her worth" and "May he die that breaks her heart" is an elegant use of antithesis, though the rhyming is somewhat lost. Rating: 3.5 |
Re: Poetry Contest by Bhola(f): 12:46am On Nov 12, 2006 |
Hmmm, I see we have another addition to the Princesses of Genial Association. On behalf of Mukina2, dominobaby, esylnera, tenik, and myself, Nilla welcome to the association. There are plenty plenty goodies in joining and we'll definitely get it across to you in due time. Genial, how you dey? |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 12:47am On Nov 12, 2006 |
Bhola:lol Doesnt he just know how to make a gal feel so special? |
Re: Poetry Contest by Bhola(f): 12:48am On Nov 12, 2006 |
He sure does and he has a good heart as well. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 12:51am On Nov 12, 2006 |
yup. there was so much flattery going on. i couldn't judge the last competition. Meanwhile Bhola welcome to the house. I'm oficially making you a judge. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 12:52am On Nov 12, 2006 |
or better still, bring out the poet in you and spring up some poems. |
Re: Poetry Contest by Genial(m): 1:09am On Nov 12, 2006 |
Bhola: Hello Bhola. Long time no see. |
Re: Poetry Contest by Bhola(f): 2:18am On Nov 12, 2006 |
I dey o, Genial. Nilla, poet in me ke? Na lie, I no get any, but I recognize correct poem when I see am. Ok, I go be judge. Wetin una rules? |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 2:22am On Nov 12, 2006 |
so far its the guys competing agains the guys and the girls against the girls. I normally have a winner for poems released around the same time thats when i'm still in control of my head you tell them what you like or dont like about it etc. |
Re: Poetry Contest by Orikinla(m): 3:58am On Nov 12, 2006 |
I love those who love poems. And I love those who can really compose poems. |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 4:01am On Nov 12, 2006 |
lol |
Re: Poetry Contest by Jimiyke(m): 3:47pm On Nov 12, 2006 |
Very funny people we have in Nigeria |
Re: Poetry Contest by nilla(f): 4:12pm On Nov 12, 2006 |
Jimiyke: how? |
Re: Poetry Contest by saintsam(m): 5:34pm On Nov 12, 2006 |
It seems guys are more poetic than babes.So far have not seen a ladies poem.But for the guys,I have notice that all ur poems are love,love,love.Plz lets try somethn else.like this poem about africa.check it out ya all. |
Re: Poetry Contest by saintsam(m): 5:39pm On Nov 12, 2006 |
DON’T CRY FOR ME AFRICA Don’t cry for me Africa Because I will never let you out of my mind I hear your voices people of Africa I hear your cries people of Africa I see pain in your eyes people of Africa It is hard to describe what you people of Africa are going through Poverty strikes you all people of Africa Don’t cry for me Africa Because I will keep you in my prayers people of Africa Power to the people of Africa People of Africa lift your spirit higher Lord is the light and truth people of Africa The Lord sends you a message from his heart to you people of Africa He said because I love you I will answer your prayers I hear your prayers Don’t cry for me Africa Because you have a friend that is the Lord People of Africa continue doing the Lords work Make a wish people of Africa The people of Africa are looking at the Lord face to face Lord here is no paradise We dream a little dream said the people of Africa to the Lord The People of Africa Pray that the Lord will give each other strength every day Don’t cry for me Africa Save the people of Africa Strengthened the people of Africa each day Because I’ll be there in your dreams people of Africa The people of Africa tells The Lord how much they love him Don’t cry for me Africa Lord comes when you are ready people of Africa Feelings you have for your Lord People of Africa And I know you will never let it die Nothing but flowers the people of Africa will plant in the sea shore for the Lord Don’t cry for me Africa The people of Africa needs hope to heal there land The Lord rose up on you people of Africa Don’t cry for me Africa My heart will go on Once I close this door of the ship I will sail across the Atlantic Sea |
Re: Poetry Contest by saintsam(m): 5:46pm On Nov 12, 2006 |
AFRICA COME BACK Come Back, I've heard the surge of your drums Come Back, my heart beats lasciviously 'Africa come back' Come Back, I've raised my face out from the dust Come Back, I've peeled off the pellicle of sorrow from my eyes Come Back, I've snatched away my arms from the grip of pain Come Back, I've wrenched apart the hasp of gloom 'Africa come back' The shackle's clasps have made the mace too much to bear So I've fashioned a mould by ripping the strap round my neck 'Africa come back' The bear's death-eyes blaze in every lair Enemy blood has reddened the negritude of night 'Africa come back' The ground is pirouetting with me Africa Rivers throbbing to the rhythm pouring out of the woods I am Africa, your stature mirrors mine I am you, my gait is the gait of your lions 'Africa come back' Come stride like your lions 'Africa come back' Am so proud of my colour.Nnilla,I would want to see ur poem. |
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