Luvmi, i understand ur view of point, but did u hear wat daniel said "tell me about urself" and she started. Then he said something abt boyfrnd indirectly asking 4 boyfrnd. And she said no. Dont u think she wud jez av a flash back of wat happened that almost got her raped immediately? And smiled lyk "let me tell ds guy ds thing sef,i no dey lyk tell person b4, if told me things also" and vola she narrated. Though there are many coincidence in d story, but ds coincidence can be justified. D inspector part also can jez av a wild guess dat a witness was murdered d nyt b4 been interrogated? Dat can make him av guess abt mole in d force. Hand dey pain me jor.


Luvmi, bro frank don confess 2 me 4 back door o. We shall soon come 2 ur house so we can bring d fat envelope and plentiful colanut.

Lol @Frank, Candis, Damex na no serious o. Bride price deh expensive for our place o.
Oya lets move on, I definitely have learnt from your comments.

Nice one Damexx
@kunklushun(this ur name...) And phatkemi, nie to know u are there.

Luvmi, I am equal to the task, infact d more xpensive d bride price, d more I can't resist u my darlin.

Alright guy... Almost had writers block, but I took sometime out alone and engaged my brain with just two bottles of Star. Guess what, I and my brain came to a decision on what nxt to do.
Pls can I be permitted to update on wednesday? If so, wednesday it shall be then.
Pls guys keep the comments coming. Where is Larry nw? I didn't hear from u again

I can't but comment on this, this is well written, just try to look out for some little mistakes but all the same this is good

stories great for me...
just that those typos create 'noise' for me, (using the communications term)...
but do not make this people get so close to the truth with their guesses......they aren't that wise...

my opinion, lets move on


#and rap, i dey fine, i see your greeting, i wonder why #

Nice work Frank. I av faith in u goin places with your art cos u are talented. Your stories are deep with moderate twists to spice things up. I'm usually not one to post on NL but u wow me d second time, the first was tenth generation( sory I'm one of dos chop clean mouth, I hardly make comments). All d best. Pls keep d update coming

princesa: stories great for me...
just that those typos create 'noise' for me, (using the communications term)...
but do not make this people get so close to the truth with their guesses......they aren't that wise...

my opinion, lets move on


#and rap, i dey fine, i see your greeting, i wonder why #

Can't I say Hi? No ulterior motive though

Rap maestro: Can't I say Hi? No ulterior motive though

okay hi

Franko u promised update today don't fail o and it had beta be lonnnnngggggggggg .okay that said bye will check back.God is watching u in 5D

imonpoint: Nice work Frank. I av faith in u goin places with your art cos u are talented. Your stories are deep with moderate twists to spice things up. I'm usually not one to post on NL but u wow me d second time, the first was tenth generation( sory I'm one of dos chop clean mouth, I hardly make comments). All d best. Pls keep d update coming

nice to know u are there, u can also check out cyber lover right here on nairaland. thanks.

Eneze1: I can't but comment on this, this is well written, just try to look out for some little mistakes but all the same this is good

mnnn tanks

rofemiguwa: Franko u promised update today don't fail o and it had beta be lonnnnngggggggggg .okay that said bye will check back.God is watching u in 5D

yes, i promised and i surely will update, but i am not sure if it will be long enough... thanks

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yes, i promised and i surely will update, but i am not sure if it will be long enough... thanks

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Damex333:

what u de vex?

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alright guys... i hope i will be give till Saturday or Sunday to update.

i will like u guys to understand why i want more time... this is because i am now in the most difficult part of the story, any thing i do now might either make the story better or spoil it all. i therefore need time to remunerate and cope up with soothing plots. also ur feeback can serve as motivation.

thanks

Ride on frank...phew....pirest and his bunch of criminals:@

Priest and his bunch of congregation. Who is going 2 save my dear adanna and nkiru from ds psyc.

Great update.
Note, when Daniel and Adanna were together, and he asked her about his wife. You wrote 'wired', isnt it supposed to be weird?

Noticed some typos.. I'll type dat out later

Rap maestro: Noticed some typos.. I'll type dat out later

Thanks for pointing that out... But Is that the most encouraging word u have to tell me?

U didn't disappoint now am scared please no harm shud come to adanna and nkiru please and chidi too.biko

Quite a lengthy update.
Enjoyin d story bt got sum questns..!

1. The raid on Omenka's palace,which was a duplex lasted for 18mins,,where u said d house was touched(burnt).

Seriously,,do u really meant 18mins,,for a duplex 2b touched??.. Evn a bungalow cn't b burnt half-way in 20mins.

Bsyds, d Priest boiz n himself were not masked.. So, der cld av bn @least an Identificatn of JUST ONE of d suspects by d survivors.


2. The Omenka boiz r known for thier notoriety n gruesome murders commited by dem. So, its possibl d deceased of d loved ones murdered by dem (Chief Orji or anyoda victim) wld want to avenged dier loss n @d same tym,,frame someboy else, (Daniel most likely).

So, dem suspectin only Daniel witout thinkin of oda families dey v wrecked havoc in, doesn't blend well per say.

Nice story Sir!!

Ghen Ghen Ghen. Frank, Frank, Frank, well done.
Every elements to be a great writer is already in you. Maybe that is why it was easier for me to critique your work.
Let us have another discussion- Blessing change his name to Priest when he was in prison. How did Adanna know he was bearing Priest?

this happen to be one of the best chapter i have read, i didn't see any typo, am sure you did a big time editing in this update, the narrative was flawless and held me spell bound.

this is the Frank i read, who contributed in the Lucan story

welldone dear

luvmijeje: Ghen Ghen Ghen. Frank, Frank, Frank, well done.
Every elements to be a great writer is already in you. Maybe that is why it was easier for me to critique your work.
Let us have another discussion- Blessing change his name to Priest when he was in prison. How did Adanna know he was bearing Priest?

Thanks luvmi, pls read the part I gave priest's brief history, he was known as priest even when he was in school and before he went to prison, infact the name was given to him in school. I totally adopted the name in prison. Adanna would have heard someone callin him that. She was close to his brother remember.

iebanehita: Quite a lengthy update.
Enjoyin d story bt got sum questns..!

1. The raid on Omenka's palace,which was a duplex lasted for 18mins,,where u said d house was touched(burnt).

Seriously,,do u really meant 18mins,,for a duplex 2b touched??.. Evn a bungalow cn't b burnt half-way in 20mins.

Bsyds, d Priest boiz n himself were not masked.. So, der cld av bn @least an Identificatn of JUST ONE of d suspects by d survivors.


2. The Omenka boiz r known for thier notoriety n gruesome murders commited by dem. So, its possibl d deceased of d loved ones murdered by dem (Chief Orji or anyoda victim) wld want to avenged dier loss n @d same tym,,frame someboy else, (Daniel most likely).

So, dem suspectin only Daniel witout thinkin of oda families dey v wrecked havoc in, doesn't blend well per say.
Nice story Sir!!

Ok let me attend to this

1. Sorry I never mentioned the house was burnt down in 18 minutes, neither did I write that they were there till d house finishd burning. Remember papa's room wasn't even affected. So I expected readers to guess correctly that the whole house didn't burn down.

2. They couldn't remember anyone they had hurt recently that would take such a drastic action. I thought I pointed that. Remember, they were careful to cover their tracks after any attack. They were known more for notoriety(I mean as a very stubborn family) their drug activities was even a secret. They were more of stubborn thugs and didn't go around showing everybody they were murderers. That was why they had to kill the withness just to cover their tracks. People disliked and were afraid of them but not enough for such masacre.
There was also no indication that orji's family knew who kill orji.